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A Note In a Bottle

It was an old brown bottle with a cork stuck in top That I saw half buried in the sand On a remote stretch of beach near my Pacific Northwest home That I dug out with a stick and my hand. I pulled out the cork and removed a note from inside With handwriting that was old and faded; A letter that was written over fifty years ago Nineteen Fifty Eight on the top it was dated. “I am writing this note and casting it out to sea For no one in particular but mostly for me. I am with child but with no husband by my side; For months it has grown in me and every night I have cried. My family sent me here to Washington state, I’ve ruined their reputation so this is my fate. I will do my best to raise my child right, But it’s a future I face with terror and fright. Should you find this bottle and read my little tale Please say a prayer for me; I could use your support so that I don’t fail From the other side of the sea.” As it turns out the bottle didn’t travel far, In fact it was caste from this very shore. Fifty two years later I recognize the handwriting - I’ve seen it so many times before. It’s the same handwriting on notes I took to school And on every birthday card I saved; It’s the same handwriting from the woman I called Mother And last year buried in a grave. I never knew the story of how I came to be And, frankly, never thought to ask; I was just a bastard child of a wonderful mother Whose story I just found in this flask.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 12/29/2010 8:47:00 PM
a story poem with a great twist. Congatulations on your win! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 12/29/2010 4:23:00 AM
Congratulations Joe on your win in Paula Swanson's "Just Poetry" contest. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/28/2010 7:36:00 PM
What beautiful poetry Joe. Many congratulations for this win.
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Date: 12/28/2010 5:32:00 PM
Congrats Joe on your super first place win in Just Poetry contest with this amazing and awesomely creative write my friend.. enjoy with luv and happy New Year...
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Date: 12/28/2010 3:13:00 PM
Joe, I cried. Your mother is blessed to have produced such a son. Congrats on your win. Always, Will
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Date: 12/28/2010 11:44:00 AM
Joe, just stirring! So much emotion! A very well-deserved win!
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Date: 12/28/2010 10:26:00 AM
Oh, what a beautiful story. I suspected about half-way through, then when you confirmed my guess, I got the chills. Excellent writing. I truly enjoyed this poem. Thank you and congratulations. Deb
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Date: 12/28/2010 10:13:00 AM
I saw a winner here when I first read it. Congratulations on your no. 1 spot. Love, joyce
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Date: 12/27/2010 1:15:00 PM
Very interesting write Joe with a great finale. I too live in Washington State, and wonder why she was banished here. Thank you for reading and indeed I had left out a t in my poem. Thank you. Love, Joyce
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Date: 12/27/2010 12:33:00 PM
Brilliant! This my friend, is amazing. Keep it up (for my sake and for yours)! :)
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Date: 12/27/2010 11:33:00 AM
What a flow of the words and emotions. Very touchy , moving , poetry enough to bring tears. Joe, you have got a very poetic heart.
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