A Night Ride

One dark night takes me on a ride to an isolated hill where I inhale unpleasantness ..
Wide gleamy monstrous gate opens as the mighty wind blows,
creepy ferns crawl all over the floor.
Eerie garden awaits the lost lover's presence;
There stands a haunted home with a grubby porch at the entrance.
The magnanimous door welcomes me unwaveringly;
To the right there's slaughter hall polished with blood stains.
On the wall, hung portrait of a lady wearing a long red gown with a silver hat and a golden rosette stapled; 
Beside protruded, a yearning window decorated by cob webs;
To the left led staircase ,as I step on railing, it crackles like hatching eggs; Carefully I manage to reach the first floor and confronted a quiet room occupied by constant whispers & spine-chilling whimpers...I slowly move inside and envision nothing strange,but I feel something moist dripping on my cheeks from the roof above.
When I look up, the entire strong ceiling collapses,
disembodied spirit arises,floating on air,observes the decaying house from a distance.

14-7-2020

~Deepa. V~

First place in the contest:-)
Note: Decaying house Poetry Contest.
Sponsored by A Dear Heart(Constance)
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Gauthier Avatar
February 6, 2021 at 8:07 PM
A pleasure to find this very entertaining poem published in the 2020 PS Anthology ~
Mishra Avatar
July 27, 2020 at 4:22 AM
The haunting echoes of an abandoned decaying house reflect artistically throughout your muse Deepa. I could feel the chilling suspense of next turns. This is a brilliant write. So happy to see you placed #1. Congratulations on your win. How have you been? I've been caught up with a few things recently so I'm visiting your poems now :) I will visit your comments on my poems after this. Blessings and love!
Deepa Avatar
July 27, 2020 at 6:36 AM
Dear Aditi mam, Thankyou very much for your amazing review.Best wishes for you too. I am fine & on leave now. Once my school re-opens I will be busy with my schedules like you:-) Am glad to hear that your safe. Yes I can understand.Wish all your tasks to go smoothly.. Take care.Much love sent to you:-)
La France Avatar
July 25, 2020 at 9:17 AM
Deepa, congratulations on your win in my decaying house contest with this excellent write, a FAV for me _Constance
Deepa Avatar
July 25, 2020 at 11:36 AM
Hello Constance mam, Thankyou very much for your constant encouragement:-)Am pleased to know that my poem won your heart.:-)I feel great to be honoured by you amongst so many talented poets.You and your fun contests inspires me to create such beautiful poems:-) Mam..Keep inspiring us through your poetry's as well as contests:-) And thanks for the FAV.. am spinning here with joy:-D Have a lovely day.Much love~ Deepa:-)
Marcum Wong Avatar
July 22, 2020 at 1:22 PM
A spooky read embellished by your wonderful imagery V. Congratulations on your deserving first place win! Blessings xxoo
Deepa Avatar
July 23, 2020 at 5:31 AM
Hello Connie mam, Thanks a lot for the beautiful appreciation and blessings.:-) Am pleased to know that you enjoyed this poem.:-) Have a great day. Much love~Deepa
Allison Avatar
July 19, 2020 at 2:59 PM
Very eerie imagery indeed V Deepa, many congratulations on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
Deepa Avatar
July 23, 2020 at 5:28 AM
Hi Jan mam, Thankyou for the lovely appreciation.Am glad that you liked it.:-) Have a beautiful day. With love~Deepa:-)
De Beaulieu Avatar
July 15, 2020 at 2:42 PM
Hello Deepa, I wuld say, this house is very run down. It is in bad shape. Beyond repair. Enjoy your day my friend. Much love. Darlene
De Beaulieu Avatar
July 16, 2020 at 5:38 PM
Hello Deepa, a shabby house would be haunted or look haunted in the evening darkness.. Enjoy your evening my friend. Much love. Darlene
Deepa Avatar
July 16, 2020 at 4:29 AM
Hello Darlene mam, Thankyou very much for the lovely review.:-) Lol, Yes..it's a shabby decaying house haunted and ruined from may be a 100 years.:-D Have a wonderful day mam. Much love to you.Take care.:-)
Roper Avatar
July 14, 2020 at 3:23 PM
Fantastic story, Deepa, just perfect for Constance contest. Hugs Eve
Deepa Avatar
July 15, 2020 at 1:31 AM
Good morning Eve mam, Thankyou very much.:-)I am glad to know that you liked it.Thanks for the constant support,blessings and motivation:-) Best wishes for you too. Take care.With love~Deepa
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