John Gondolf Poet Pantoum

A Night of Surprises

As the sun sets and the moon rises,
hearts are filled with love and fire.
The night is sure to be full of surprises;
bodies teeming with passion and desire.

Hearts are filled with love and fire
as the couple makes their way upstairs.
Bodies teeming with passion and desire;
hoping to create a memory that’s theirs.

As the couple makes their way upstairs 
intent on fulfilling the urgent call;
hoping to create a memory that’s theirs,
a stirring is heard from down the hall.

Intent on fulfilling the urgent call;
hoping to allow desires to conclude;
a stirring is heard from down the hall;
the baby’s cry interrupts the mood.

Hoping to allow desires to conclude,
the night is sure to be full of surprises;
the baby’s cry interrupts the mood
as the sun sets and the moon rises.


October 5, 2017

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Ann Peck August 29, 2022 at 4:33 PM Isn't that just the way it always goes? :) Congratulations on your win, John! John Gondolf August 30, 2022 at 2:45 AM We’ve all been there! Thanks for sharing your thoughts and comments, Ann, I appreciate it. John

Kim Rodrigues August 28, 2022 at 12:00 PM I love this. Gave me a chuckle. Congratulations John! John Gondolf August 28, 2022 at 4:04 PM Thanks so much, Kim, I’m glad I was able to give you a little chuckle this afternoon, we’ve all been there. Hugs, John

Joseph May August 28, 2022 at 9:31 AM There were surprises in their plans, Very nicely penned John, Congrats on your win John Gondolf August 28, 2022 at 3:42 PM Thanks so much, Joseph, I’m glad you enjoyed my humorous piece. Thank for hosting the contest. John

Rhoda Tripp January 6, 2018 at 11:00 PM A fantastic example of a difficult form to write. Great job! John Gondolf January 7, 2018 at 7:32 AM Thank you, Rhoda, my first pantoum.

Afzal Nusker November 24, 2017 at 10:37 PM Congratulations on your win with this witty piece of your amazing write. John Gondolf November 27, 2017 at 8:18 PM Thank you, Afzal.

Alexis Y. October 19, 2017 at 2:14 PM Hi John, It's good to you get a high placement with this well written piece. When the baby cries all else comes second. Congratulations on your win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis Alexis Y. October 19, 2017 at 4:28 PM I literally laughed out loud when you wrote "Maybe that's God's plan for birth control:-) Alexis John Gondolf October 19, 2017 at 4:08 PM Hi Alexis, thank you so much! Any couple who has kids has been through this at least once, and yes you are right - the kids come first. Maybe that's God's plan for birth control :)

Jan Allison October 19, 2017 at 12:31 PM Dropping back to say many congrats on your win John:-) hugs Jan xx John Gondolf October 19, 2017 at 12:55 PM Thank you so much, Jan; it's humbling to me to see my name listed amongst you seasoned poets.

Eve Roper October 19, 2017 at 11:24 AM John, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve ~`* John Gondolf October 19, 2017 at 11:28 AM Thank you so much, Eve!

Roy Pett October 19, 2017 at 4:48 AM Congratulations on your well deserved win John, great piece of poetry. :)) John Gondolf October 19, 2017 at 6:38 AM Thanks, Roy, glad you enjoyed it.

Susan Ashley October 18, 2017 at 9:23 PM Congratulations John on your top win with your beautiful poem. John Gondolf October 18, 2017 at 9:49 PM Thank you, Susan, I am glad you enjoyed it. I am truly humbled with the placement.

Kim Rodrigues October 18, 2017 at 9:02 PM John , this was a lovely write! Congrats on your first place win! Kim Rodrigues October 19, 2017 at 5:16 AM Your welcome, John! This one made me smile :) John Gondolf October 18, 2017 at 9:44 PM Kim, thank you so much for this placement. I am humbled to see my name listed with these other wonderful writers!

Jan Allison October 5, 2017 at 6:52 AM Your lovely pantoum made me smile... children do have the habit of making their presence known at inopportune times and I guess they will have to put their possible baby making plans on hold lol:-) Hugs jan xx John Gondolf October 5, 2017 at 6:55 AM Your comments made me laugh, Jan. Yes, kids always come first...maybe that's a good thing.