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October. 9.2023
Night Bewitches Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Shadow Hamilton
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When sleep deserted me I crawled out of my bed unseen To delve into the crevices of the dark With the curiosity of an explorer And the near comatose of a somnambulist I walked up and down the steep slopes of the night Like a night watchman Without a lantern in hand. When my legs grew weary I sat on a rock Covered with moss and lichen Staring into the dark night sky With no constellation of fireflies Flashing their torches anywhere Sitting there, in that bewitching night, I listened to the song of night birds, The rustle of leaves, The howl of wolves, And the night wind’s rave. Looking into the dark pockets of the night, I thought of human mind, a deep gorge With many an uninhabitable corner Where serpent desires lie coiled, Scorpions crawl with toxic pincers And predators roam to prey upon helpless victims. The mystery of the night absorbed me, Her muffled sounds, her dark beauty And her elusive charm, like thick night fog, Percolated deep into my consciousness, And I floundered in a fathomless sea, Swirling in her eddies and currents. It whisked me away to lands far…far! But on being washed ashore, I was in a creative delirium. I am now in No Man’s Land, Where everything is in a coma of stillness, Where no light glimmers, No door ajar And no one in sight! Here the poet in me breaks open, The somnambulistic comatose, And down way flow my thoughts in indelible ink Which only I can read. Like a night bird, Roosting among the branches of a tree, I sing of my heart aches, Of my yearnings and longings. In the barely audible whispers of the night, My song reverberates in the eyeless abyss down, And in the dark desolate valleys below. People say, ghosts walk the earth at night. Oh! I am not scared! I am not eager for the dawn to break, Nor want to put my pen down!

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Date: 1/7/2024 5:50:00 PM
Dear Valsa, soulful poetess, every bewitching verse of your poem is exquisite. Vibrant imagery and rich metaphors flow from your golden pen as easily as a melody when "a night bird sings". I can't believed this was an NA poem! Your last stanza in an incredible finale to a masterwork of poetry. Potent, pulsing poetry! Congratulations for your wonderful win in Silent One's contest. Warmest wishes for a happy and creative 2024, my sweet friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 1/4/2024 8:09:00 AM
I enjoyed reading this creative write again. Glad Silent One did this. Have a creative day writing away........................
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Date: 1/3/2024 12:20:00 PM
An excellent poem full of imagery dear Valsa.. This wasn't really a contest, but an opportunity to showcase an Na poem..
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Date: 10/13/2023 4:27:00 AM
Valsa, truly bewitching is your poetic musing of night bird lore! Every line drew me further in! You crafted this piece so amazingly well, it is a winner in my book!! Happy Friday!
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Date: 10/11/2023 11:43:00 PM
Love it, what a story teller you are my dear friend, this is beautiful from the format to the theme, what a blessing you will be to those grand babies as the listen of your wisdom to share : )
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Date: 10/10/2023 4:44:00 PM
A very creative write, my dear friend. A fine entry for this contest. The mystery of your mental state is intriguing, and the closing verse is Powerful. Do not put down your pen! Smiles ~ Blessings Valsa Bill
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Date: 10/10/2023 8:57:00 AM
What a magnificent poem, so full of emotions coupled with dark imagery. A poem to remember. Best for a win. Blessings.
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Date: 10/9/2023 1:12:00 PM
A creative write. I enjoyed it. Good Luck... Have a wonderful day writing away.................
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Date: 10/9/2023 10:48:00 AM
Valsa, your imaginative artistry in poem writing is reflected in this nicely penned thoughtful poem. Kudos.
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Date: 10/9/2023 9:52:00 AM
- "Her muffled sounds, her dark beauty" ... the sounds of the night in beautiful harmony, Valsa :) - A wonderful poem :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 10/9/2023 6:53:00 AM
Valsa, your enchanting poem, about night and dreams enigma completely consumed my senses. It is a work of art that leaves me in utter awe. The way you skillfully weave words and imagery together is nothing short of captivating and enthralling. Every line of your poem held me captive, as I savored the beauty and depth of your words. Bol with the contest
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Date: 10/9/2023 4:23:00 AM
An absolutely stunning write, Valsa. Your words and imagery are so captivating and engaging!! So many lines I enjoyed. Mostly I enjoyed the soft, surreal experience of walking in the night with you. I sometimes, too, dream and don't want to put my pen down. The mystery of the night you created 'absorbed me' as well. A marvelous poem of which I am in awe. Am faving this one, hugs for the day, Sara
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Date: 10/9/2023 4:34:00 AM
Sara, I am so thankful to you for your frequent visits to my page and for your uplifting comments. You are so generous in your appreciation of others. Definitely you and Bill make a benign presence on this poetry site. Thank you so much sweet soul!
Date: 10/9/2023 2:56:00 AM
One of those poems that left me in awe, just impressed with how bewitching this write is! Blackmagic beauty of night and what roams beyond that darkness so creatively articulated and written! I love creative wordplay here, so unique! And the imagery too! Especially “ dark pockets of the night,“ “ serpent desires lie coiled,“ eyeless abyss down” wow! This will be a top winner: definitely! A fave for me/ theres a typo in your bewitching, pls do fix that as the rest of the poem is impeccable!
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Date: 10/9/2023 4:28:00 AM
Dear Empress, you are so supportive and encouraging.You make me feel so great ! One becomes great by making the small feel great. Though I wish to respond to all beautiful comments I get, I hardly have time enough after my daily chores as wife, with hardly any help to clean and sweep the house and to cook, also to maintain my garden. Your comments leave goosebumps in me. Thank you for pointing out the typo. My poems are simple and straight as I do not know how to use metaphors. Thanks once again sweet poetess.

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