Paul Callus Poet Senryu

A Mother's Regret

all the family
near her deathbed: glazed eyes seek
an aborted child


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A Senryu on Mother Contest
Sponsor: Jenish Samadas

© 5th January 2020

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Phyllis Babcock January 23, 2020 at 2:53 PM So sad and this happens often. love phyl Paul Callus January 24, 2020 at 2:18 PM So true, Phyllis, and many are those who live in remorse. Hugs // paul

Anil Deo January 15, 2020 at 6:59 PM wow, so powerful. The word "aborted" just changes the almost "homely" scene as goodbyes are said. I must keep saying, JESUS will forgive any sin, if we confess/repent. Wow again, Paul. Paul Callus January 16, 2020 at 9:29 AM Thank you for your contribution and complimentary remarks, Anil. Best regards and peace to you. // paul

Jennifer Proxenos January 9, 2020 at 11:06 AM Very powerful words Paul, deep thoughts, sad and could be so true for some. Blessings dear friend, Warm regards and hugs, Jennifer. Paul Callus January 16, 2020 at 9:27 AM I am sure I had replied to your feedback, Jenny, but I have nothing to show for it! Thank you for the lovely comments, my friend. ~ Warm regards & Hugs // paul

FJ Thomas January 6, 2020 at 10:18 PM Sometimes there just are not words... amazing Paul Paul Callus January 7, 2020 at 1:45 PM So true, Flo. Some things are hard to describe, and harder to understand. Thank you for stopping by. Warm regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire January 6, 2020 at 2:37 PM A stunning senryu, Paul. Sad that this happens so often. Surely you have a winner here! Love, Carolyn Paul Callus January 7, 2020 at 1:40 PM It is truly sad, Carolyn...but I do not judge anyone...I'm not in their shoes. Thank you for the faith you show in this poem, my friend. Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen January 6, 2020 at 1:02 PM - A mother will never forget that child ... really touching, Paul :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Paul Callus January 7, 2020 at 1:37 PM Glad you like it, Anne-Lise:) Thank you for your contribution. Hugs // paul

Sandra Adams January 6, 2020 at 10:18 AM wow... this one is powerful.... hugs Paul Callus January 7, 2020 at 1:36 PM Thank you for your powerful one-liner, Sandra:) Hugs // paul

Kim Rodrigues January 6, 2020 at 6:27 AM Wow! How many moms will meet such innocents in the afterlife... Paul Callus January 7, 2020 at 1:35 PM In my eyes, in the afterlife, I see it as a moment of rejoicing, Kim! Thank you for your thoughts. Regards // paul

Constance La France January 5, 2020 at 11:12 PM Paul, oh this is deep and wonderfully penned, well done _ Constance Paul Callus January 7, 2020 at 1:34 PM Thank you for the lovely comments, Constance. Best regards // paul

Eve Roper January 5, 2020 at 9:42 PM sad to read, Paul. A very good verse. Good luck in the contest. Paul Callus January 7, 2020 at 1:33 PM Thank you for reading and liking, Eve. Hugs // paul

Line Gauthier January 5, 2020 at 3:54 PM Wow - most touching, Paul. Paul Callus January 7, 2020 at 1:32 PM Thank you, Line...Regards // paul

Silent One January 5, 2020 at 2:30 PM heartbreaking... Paul Callus January 7, 2020 at 1:31 PM Thank you...regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich January 5, 2020 at 1:33 PM oh wow, that makes me think of going into the light and maybe the child awaits her with forgiveness. I can only hope so! Paul Callus January 7, 2020 at 1:29 PM There are several possibilities, Andrea, but yours would be such a redeeming one! Thank you for reading and commenting. Regards // paul

Vijay Pandit January 5, 2020 at 12:30 PM So sad--but so true to life--excellent write, Paul. Paul Callus January 7, 2020 at 1:28 PM Glad you found it to your liking, Vijay:) Thank you. Regards // paul

Jan Allison January 5, 2020 at 11:04 AM A heartbreaking poem on so many levels Paul, its so good to see you writing again and I hope you are on the road to recovery, good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Paul Callus January 7, 2020 at 1:27 PM Many thanks, Jan. I'm much better now and nearly totally recovered. For once I'm taking life easy!! Hugs // paul

Heidi Sands January 5, 2020 at 10:20 AM Oh so sad. Very good point to make. Well written :) Paul Callus January 7, 2020 at 1:25 PM Thank you, Heidi. So pleased you enjoyed. Regards // paul

Lin Lane January 5, 2020 at 10:07 AM Such sadness in the choice that can never be forgotten. Your lines exemplify the theme. I see from Tom's comment that you've been ill. I sincerely hope all is right in your world now, Paul. Paul Callus January 7, 2020 at 1:24 PM Thank you for the feedback and concern, Lin. The sun is shining bright again:) Best regards // paul

Tom Cunningham January 5, 2020 at 9:48 AM Powerful senyru Paul, a situation you often hear about. Good luck. Hope you're well now. Happy New year. Tom. Paul Callus January 7, 2020 at 1:21 PM Thank you on all counts, Tom. Feeling better....the new year is so far treating me well. Regards // paul