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A Magic Ocean

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I recognize your vivacious gaze A saffron blaze as speckled as the sun And how you framed your lips I despise having to say goodbye Thus, our ethereal realm is descrying. caused by the sham of wholeness A nebula sparked a throb in my heart Innocence is lost at an early age until the moon swallows it all, I wage.   I was jolted awake when we spoke Until her love-worn heart broke At first light, a human spirit awoke. Now I will tell the terrible truth Nor exert effort, as this is really smooth Our hapless path had been specified It was the source of a haphazard journey. I frequently sit and ponder Yet I love to rhyme, – particularly to wander On what oceans do you set sail? However, the sun never dries the dew on a dreary shore where no air blew Breeze sighed amber codgers too Whatever was lost is now null and void.
Written: February 08, 2023 Brian Strand Contest No 1183 Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Brian Strand

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Date: 2/10/2023 6:13:00 AM
Quite fascinating and equally complex. Too high for me that I must admit, I couldn't decipher much.
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Date: 2/9/2023 8:57:00 AM
A very thought provoking poem, Lasaad. The imagery and descriptive phrases were excellent. Good luck in the contest! A poetry friend in Texas, Bill (I'm back!) :-)
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Date: 2/9/2023 8:23:00 AM
Well written Sotto :)
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Date: 2/9/2023 5:54:00 AM
Intriguing write my friend. Impressive tone and flow. Best to you.
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Date: 2/9/2023 1:43:00 AM
Wonderful rhyme. It is my downfall as English is not my main language.
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