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A Looming Fog

I feel as if I'm on a boat,
floating on a narrow river,
driven between its banks
by an invisible strong current, 
leading me to God knows where.
On either side tall upright poplars
stand on guard as if I might try to escape.

An early greenish hue tints all
and ahead of me I see
a cloudy thick fog.
I wonder who is watching there,
hidden in the thick haze.
I wonder why I am where I am.
Where has my memory gone?
Is anyone hiding behind the trees?
Maybe I have lost my bearings.
Why all these questions in my mind?
Or perhaps I’m dreaming.

Suddenly I notice ahead of me
a fork in the river.
Now I am in a checkmate of indecision
Especially since the river current stopped.
Where must I go?
Left or right?
Am I going north or south?
The fog is no help.
The aquatic crossroad confuses.
I know not which way to take.
Shall I let the river decide?
I must take the right at least,
but which is the right?
Take my bearings with my right hand?

I hear an inner voice:
"Wake up, take up the oars.
Life is what you make it, 
stand on your two feet,
do what is right,
or enter into oblivion
into that looming fog."
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Daniel Avatar
June 15, 2021 at 9:01 PM
A poem filled with questions, a maze-like write, Victor:)
Edmonds  Avatar
June 15, 2021 at 12:40 PM
An inspirational write Victor, we either go with the flow to who knows where, or paddle our oar to take us to where our dreams lay bare… Belle
Jayasankar Avatar
June 15, 2021 at 2:04 AM
A beautiful poem with a message.. 'Listen to your inner voice'.... Enjoyed reading Victor... God bless.. ~ Ani
Y. Avatar
June 14, 2021 at 4:01 PM
WoW! Victor, What a well-written descriptive write. The last stanza sums up this write very well. I totally agree; life is what we make it. Excellent job. I'm adding this to my favs. Have a great day, my friend:-) Alexis
Rodrigues Avatar
June 14, 2021 at 3:45 PM
A dreamlike state of mind.
Buehler Avatar
June 14, 2021 at 10:20 AM
No one knows what lies around the bend. But taking control of your own life empowers you to impact your own destiny. This terrific poem contains great words of wisdom, Victor. :)
Roper Avatar
June 14, 2021 at 9:33 AM
Only the Lord knows. My life is at that point I am slowly drowning with the fog. Enjoyed reading. Hugs Eve
Pandit Avatar
June 14, 2021 at 5:25 AM
Your last stanza spells the essence of your poem. Much inspiration and advice emanate from your splendid write, Victor.
Cunningham Avatar
June 14, 2021 at 5:19 AM
Well written Victor, reminds me of that saying, paddle your own canoe to get anywhere in life. Tom
Ball Avatar
June 14, 2021 at 4:38 AM
WoW! a cleverly crafted piece here Victor. The river is Life and it is what you make it. We make our own decisions because we have a free will. We only need the wisdom, strength and courage to take up the oars. Well done. God Bless, JB
Seeker Avatar
June 14, 2021 at 2:43 AM
Or if you prefer an anticlimax ‘trust the robust Boy Scout compass’ ~ great write, Victor!
Legros Kelley Avatar
June 14, 2021 at 1:43 AM
This gave me chills! It is certainly the way life feels at times. Good message in your poem, to pick up the oars. Really good advice!
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