A Long Life Goodnight

My chest keeps echoes no one hears,
what once was warm now sweeps as mist,
a weight unseen, too dense to lift.

Each crack leaves marks that melts
yet roots begin to breathe beneath the soil.
But where you bore, now empty lies,
a soul planted thin beneath the skies.

At early bright, I wear a stranger's smile.
At night, I drifts a lonely mile.
The roses died but the thorns still remain...
and the joy slipped out without a name.

I feel the yank to sink beneath,
to whisper words, my mouth won't speak.
My voice is dust, it melts to stone,
a quiet scream that dies alone.

You glimmer faint in twilight's haze,
a scar that kept from golden days.
I dream of us the way we were,
before the quiet did arise.

One truth remains through changing skies;
a trace of you that never dies.
No blade and no bleak could cut apart
the quiet thread that ties my heart.

Am I unmade or only veiled?
A gentle quiet where the glow feels lost,
no flare ignites and no I'll will takes carry.
Only a calm that meanders through the horizons.

Now rest plunges as starlight falls
a tender serene that softens all.
The spirit arise.
The tonnage gone.
The years melt their grip restrained.

The years vanish and the pain is gone
but something brighter lingers on.
In endless night,
the spirit glows-
a long life ends yet deeper grows.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Godwin Avatar
August 2, 2025 at 5:00 PM
FOR ME, THIS CONFIRMS IT: YOU ARE A BORN POET. THIS IS OUTSTANDING, BEAUTIFUL, ENTRANCING AND BRILLIANT. I didn't know CAPS was on 'til I started typing, looks like I'm yelling. Seriously, you gave me what I love: a poetry adrenaline high. I love this so much that I can't help but want one change to make it perfect: each stanza has 4 lines of rhyme or near rhyme except 3rd: 'And joy, like wind, has slipped away.' How about ending w/ the word strayed? Play with it? I'm faving. Hugs, CayCay
Velasco Avatar
August 3, 2025 at 12:11 AM
Hi CayCay, Your comment absolutely lit up my day—thank you! I laughed at the CAPS confession (no worries—I read it as enthusiasm, not yelling . I’m so glad the poem gave you that poetry adrenaline high—that’s the best compliment I could hope for! And yes, I see exactly what you mean about the third stanza. I’ll definitely play with the rhyme—thank you for that sharp eye and thoughtful suggestion. Big hugs back, and I truly appreciate the fave!
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