Sara Kendrick Poet Fibonacci

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This came to me after reading one of Janet Frame's poems..Sara

A Lonely Night

Bleak
Sky,
Dark gray,
Charcoal drab,
Like an old man's night,
New widower beside the grave.
Desolate, forlorn, now individual, unattached,
Free, at liberty, unconnected, disconnected to life but still alive, pained



Contest:Tons Of Comma Fun
Sponsor: Russell Sivey

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Carol Sunshine Brown February 14, 2012 at 5:36 AM Congratulations on your win in Russell's "Tons Of Comma Fun" contest Sara. Love, Carol

Samual Ronthorpe February 13, 2012 at 8:21 AM I have never written a poem in the 'Fibonacci' style, but I may give it a try. Very nice job with this work and congratulations on your 4th place win in Russell's contest...................S.Ronthorpe

Poet Destroyer A February 12, 2012 at 2:14 AM DEAR SARA,, stopping by to wish you a SWEET VALENTINE.. AND A WONDERFUL , congratulations... ON your wonderful win In this awesome contest. Enjoyed ;-) . have yourself a wonderful valentines. @lways & @lways *xox~PD

Barbara Gorelick February 11, 2012 at 4:53 PM A dark one, but so well written. Congrats on your win. BG

Joyce Johnson February 11, 2012 at 11:37 AM Congratulations Sara. Great comma placement. Love, Joyce

Ralph Taylor February 11, 2012 at 8:15 AM Congrats, Sara. Awesome write. Enjoyed. Nice going. Thanks for your kind words. Have a great weekend. luv Ralph

Harry Horsman February 11, 2012 at 3:31 AM congrats Sara, love the deepness in this winner, take care, harry

Bl Devnath February 3, 2012 at 8:41 PM Wonderful Comma fun with a lovely picture, enjoyed and loved, bl

Poet Destroyer A February 2, 2012 at 9:20 PM Sara, this is very disconnected... you hung the emotions and feelings.. well.. good luck in the contest..pd

Julie Heckman February 2, 2012 at 1:46 PM I've never read this F... named poem before but this was very moving. As we get older and older it becomes more and more important not to get stuck in the past, even when the future seems so short

Jack Horne February 2, 2012 at 1:37 PM Yes, I agree with Russell - this one is awesome, Sara. This has to be a big winner - and many congrats on your wins : )

Russell Sivey February 2, 2012 at 1:31 PM Wow Sara, this is one of your best writes you've ever written (and shown on the Soup)! This is a dark and dreary poem, shown in each line written! I really enjoyed the poem tons today! Keep 'em coming! Great Work!!

Kash Poet February 2, 2012 at 12:00 PM A creative write by you Sara.Enjoyed the read.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart February 2, 2012 at 8:41 AM deeply intense lines Sara and this is a wonderful poetry form .. luv the new widower beside the grave line.. such emotion .. hope u are well luv.. blessings too..

Bhavna Khemlani February 2, 2012 at 7:42 AM So well expressed.

Leo Larry Amadore February 2, 2012 at 7:29 AM An interesting and visually appealing piece...

Patrick Cornwall February 2, 2012 at 6:59 AM Hey Sara...its beautiful as all your poetry is... xoxo Patrick

Doris Culverhouse February 2, 2012 at 6:57 AM sad thoughts.....hope you are having a good day.