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Edward Ibeh's This or That, Vol 29 Contest... Written 23 Dec 24
POTD How I wish I could have clutched vignettes of remembrance on this bench in a park; the same wooden one which cradled our afternoons, feeding little birds as slices of pang gripped my marrow-- The sharp sting of her farewell, right on this spot drowned time's kohl of fate--- that now, I hold the seat's arms limply, if only to recall how we kissed in the dark exploring east, west of mouths-- my fingers messing her hair nipping quick hours of rendezvous. I forget not the windswept look of her distant eyes... hours I have delayed with my misgivings, my absence wretchedly crossed --- and upon my woman's leaving I on this park every sordid night kiss her only in my thoughts ---forgive.

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Date: 12/31/2024 4:15:00 AM
This is perfect, and I rarely say so Nette, :) congrats
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Date: 12/29/2024 12:15:00 PM
Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest with this outstanding poem, Nette. I absolutely loved the sensuousness and the striking imagery. A well-deserved POTD win. Wishing you a Happy New Year!
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Date: 12/24/2024 8:46:00 PM
"I on this park every sordid night kiss her only in my thoughts" - Nostalgia. Poignance. Passion. Love... Loss. ... Very powerful poem. Congratulations!
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Date: 12/24/2024 6:26:00 PM
Dear Nette: The emotion and angst drew me, so vividly expressed. I remembered verses of thr Smith/Springsteen "Because the Night ". Best -Ken
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Date: 12/24/2024 5:28:00 PM
' I forget not the windswept look of her distant eyes, every sordid night, kiss her only in my thoughts. ' Moments and memories seem to tug upon the heartstrings. This is beautiful, sensual, and emotional; all at the same time. Congratulations Nette, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. Hugs, Brandy
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Date: 12/24/2024 4:54:00 PM
Very romantic, passionate poetry Nette. Congratulations on receiving the honour of poem of the day… Beryl
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Date: 12/24/2024 2:55:00 PM
Congratulations on your heart-wrenching, nostalgic poem to being chosen as POTD. With sensual images and enchanting choice of words, you have portrayed a scene remembering passionate romantic love!
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Date: 12/24/2024 1:33:00 PM
Congrats on POTD......love the weaving of words.....I feel like I am sitting on that park bench
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Date: 12/24/2024 1:02:00 PM
Windswept, I wept -- haunting! Congrats on POTD, Nette. Season's best, Gershon
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Date: 12/24/2024 11:22:00 AM
Memories of a lost love, Congrats on POTD
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Date: 12/24/2024 11:12:00 AM
Nette, so nice to see such a passionate poem honored on this day. Mesmerizing thoughts of a distant lover with distant eyes, cry out and have taken her far from the day's celebration. Forgiveness is for you. xo Congratulations on POTD!! May you have Happy Holidays
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Date: 12/24/2024 10:31:00 AM
Congratulations on your POTD, Nette! This poem is so winsome, your words speaking a plaintive longing for a lost love. So happy to see this as the POTD! Sending you all the blessings of Christmas! Merry Christmas to you and all of your loved ones!
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Date: 12/24/2024 10:06:00 AM
Excellent POTD choice, Nette!! Very well crafted and worthy selection. Merry Xmas! :o))
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Date: 12/24/2024 9:05:00 AM
Dear Nette, What a wonderful romantic, sensual and loss poem!! No Wonder it is POTD and certainly should be. Merry Christmas, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 12/24/2024 8:12:00 AM
Congratulations on your POTD. Well done.
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Date: 12/24/2024 6:33:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful write. Have a Merry/Blessed Christmas and a Happy/Blessed New Year 2025.....................
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Date: 12/24/2024 5:11:00 AM
Congratulations on your POTD Nette wishing you a happy Christmas and a healthy new year God bless.
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Date: 12/24/2024 3:11:00 AM
A wonderfully written POTD, Nette. Congratulations on your win and Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year to you.
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Date: 12/24/2024 2:55:00 AM
Beautiful POTD, Nette. Congratulations, enjoy your special poetry day!
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Date: 12/24/2024 1:54:00 AM
Quite a romantic verse Nette, congratulations to you on the honour of POTD. Tom
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Date: 12/24/2024 1:43:00 AM
Passionate, sensual and nostalgic remembrance Nette all woven into a lovely poem. Congrats on your POTD - hugs Maria
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Date: 12/24/2024 12:32:00 AM
A passionate potd! Congratulations!
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Date: 12/23/2024 4:31:00 PM
I think you still clutch the vignettes of remembrance in the memory of a windswept look of her distant eyes... what a glorious still photograph you have painted, dear poet
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Date: 12/23/2024 2:29:00 PM
Nette, a fascinating poem about memory. There seems to be some remorse still, and that will take a lot of work on the part of the character to resolve, although I sense that is happening...at least I hope so for the character's sake. There are so many of us that can't get past something like this. This kind of hurt affects our present existence and I get it completely. It's so hard to move on when love is involved. Probably harder than anything else. The hurt can last a long time. Smiles!
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Date: 12/22/2024 5:35:00 PM
A fav for me! This is absolutely breathtaking, Nette...
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