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A Killer Among Us

It is a thorny impossible situation. No one is talking, eyes are red, feelings are not being shared. No one knows who to trust. Whoever did this is either a friend or an enemy, and no one except the killer knows which. We are moving around each other with distrustful glances, suspecting our best friends, our cousins, our coworkers. Hoping we are wrong. It is a trying time, and it does not dissipate for months. Death is bad, but murder is somehow worse. We are on autopilot, jumping at loud sounds, never fully the same. Paralyzed by fear Never fully fixable, We suspect our friends Written for Mick Talbot's Haibun Contest on June 25, 2018

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Date: 7/7/2018 10:23:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. Who was it? A compelling read. Enjoyed!
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 7/7/2018 3:13:00 PM
I had to use my imagination, but I also used family tragedies to bring out empathy for this one.
Date: 7/5/2018 8:20:00 AM
A perfect prose, however, your haiku was a senryu, and you used capital letters to start your sentences, and added a comma, all three no, no's. Had it not been for the prose you would have been N/A'ed. Still, my most gracious thanks for participating, looking forward to your continued support, Mick.... PS Note Silent's comment, for if it wasn't for the senryu you would have been standing on the winners podium!
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 7/6/2018 9:49:00 AM
Thank you Mick. I am very new to this.
Date: 6/25/2018 8:07:00 AM
A well composed haibun,,, I do like the haiku/senryu at the end..
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 6/26/2018 4:49:00 AM
Thank you Silent One. This is actually my first try at a haibun.
Date: 6/25/2018 7:47:00 AM
A good poem indeed. Is it for the contest? You should re-visit the contest page and see the rules. GL. Regards.
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 6/26/2018 4:50:00 AM
Thank you. I will take another look at the rules.