A Jasmine Garland Seller

A female tongue pushes me down from the swing of sleep.
Rain kids rouse the stink of railway track in the dawn.
A long chain of complaints tinkles on her lips.
Worries about her female children at home
rise up like the black smoke from the train.

His liquor reddened half opened eyes gaze
at the life-like-fan – its rotation makes him dizzy.
His sweet brown lady drags him into his duties.


She arranges attractively jasmine garlands 
in her basket on the floor of the compartment.
Basket never enjoys the fragrance, but only carries.

First printed in my book, Kanoli Kaleidoscope, by Punkswritepoemspress, US.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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A   Avatar
May 24, 2015 at 3:24 PM
Fabiyas, Congrats on your awesome win @-> Always & Forever LINDA
M V Avatar
May 24, 2015 at 8:53 PM
Thank you PD.
Dietrich Avatar
May 22, 2015 at 6:10 PM
gosh, smells with colors and other interesting ways to do your images. This is just what the contest called for. Congrats for your win.
M V Avatar
May 22, 2015 at 8:11 PM
I am glad to see your encouraging words again after an interval. Thank you, Andrea. Hope you are well.
A  Avatar
May 21, 2015 at 7:15 PM
Fab, :-) Congratulations with your wonderful win! Forever *SKAT*
M V Avatar
May 21, 2015 at 8:04 PM
Thank you Skat. Regards
Allison Avatar
May 21, 2015 at 2:13 PM
such intense imagery many congrats on your win:-) Hugs Jan xx
M V Avatar
May 21, 2015 at 8:05 PM
A lot of thanks, Jan
Gooden Avatar
August 12, 2012 at 8:18 PM
Love the title, Fabiyas. Great write.
A   Avatar
July 29, 2012 at 10:06 PM
FAB,,NICE TO SEE YOU, still congratulating all my sisters past contest. . Now I'm on the poets favorite poem contest.. I'm actually amazed with all these poems. I see why they are chosen as a favorite poem by other poets...a Super Congratulations here. I think I agreed with all the winners in this contest... love~PD
Brown Avatar
July 26, 2012 at 1:08 PM
Congratulations on your win in SKAT's "Members Favorite Poem" contest Fab. Love, Carol
Williams Avatar
July 26, 2012 at 4:59 AM
FABIYAS a belated congrats on your win..David
Taylor Avatar
July 25, 2012 at 7:22 PM
Congrats, Fabiyas. Excellent. Great job. Nice going. Kudos. Ralph
Dietrich Avatar
June 1, 2012 at 8:03 PM
LOts of interesting images in this poem, Fabiyas. I especially liked "complaints tinkle on her lips" and "rise up like the black smoke from the train." and I see this was a winner in the "women" contest. Belated congrats to you.
Austin Avatar
June 1, 2012 at 11:13 AM
A tough life, Fabiyas, but Mrs Jasmine Garland Seller is doing her best to brighten things up. Enjoyed so much. Love, daver
Williams Avatar
May 9, 2012 at 11:26 AM
FABIAS congrats on your win..David
Brown Avatar
May 7, 2012 at 12:49 PM
Congratulations on your placement in the "Tell us of Women" contest Fab. Love, Carol
Quigley Avatar
May 7, 2012 at 8:41 AM
Congratulations on your win Fabiyas. Well written
Arowolo Avatar
May 6, 2012 at 2:01 AM
Big Congratulations to you,Fabiyas..Beautiful piece and nice imagery....
Dietrich Avatar
May 5, 2012 at 9:26 PM
hey, I see you placed high in Brian's contest with your poem. Big congrats, Fabiyas. you did GREAT.
Sweetheart Avatar
May 5, 2012 at 3:47 PM
a winning poem easy to spot Fabiyas and u have a great gift to convey stunning scenes with words luv.. visiting PS today so check out my latest poem luv..
Song Avatar
May 5, 2012 at 3:10 AM
I can just imagine this life like scene! Great depiction! Congrats on your well deserved win! Gwendolen
Onclaud Avatar
May 4, 2012 at 11:56 PM
love the hanging flow in the end.. congrats on your cherished win, fabiyas!.:) huggs!
Poet Avatar
May 4, 2012 at 11:09 AM
Amzing poetry by you Fabiyas!Congrats on your win in the contest.
Richards Avatar
May 4, 2012 at 8:26 AM
Each incredible line, is worth reading more than once. Indeed a winner, and one of the best I've seen! Congratulations!
Brown Avatar
May 4, 2012 at 7:03 AM
Congratulations on your placement in "Contest 174" Fab. Love, Carol
Dietrich Avatar
May 3, 2012 at 10:41 PM
lots of great images in this one, good job with it, Fabiyas. Is it for the female contest going on? How are you?
Kendrick Avatar
May 3, 2012 at 4:17 PM
Interesting descriptive work..Yes, those baskets can't enjoy the fragrance of the Jasmine..A mother who has to work and leave her children at home can't help but worry about them while she is gone..Very emotive and expressive work..Thanks for stopping by, reading , and taking time to comment on my work..Your presence was uplifting..Sara
Collins Avatar
May 3, 2012 at 8:22 AM
Fabiyas, I read this about three times and as each time it sank in, I was more amazed. Your words, "life-like-fan, its rotation makes him dizzy" actually made me woozy. The last line is a gem. Kathy
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