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A Jasmine Garland Seller

A female tongue pushes me down from the swing of sleep. Rain kids rouse the stink of railway track in the dawn. A long chain of complaints tinkles on her lips. Worries about her female children at home rise up like the black smoke from the train. His liquor reddened half opened eyes gaze at the life-like-fan – its rotation makes him dizzy. His sweet brown lady drags him into his duties. She arranges attractively jasmine garlands in her basket on the floor of the compartment. Basket never enjoys the fragrance, but only carries. First printed in my book, Kanoli Kaleidoscope, by Punkswritepoemspress, US.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 5/24/2015 3:24:00 PM
Fabiyas, Congrats on your awesome win @-> Always & Forever LINDA
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Date: 5/24/2015 8:53:00 PM
Thank you PD.
Date: 5/22/2015 6:10:00 PM
gosh, smells with colors and other interesting ways to do your images. This is just what the contest called for. Congrats for your win.
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Date: 5/22/2015 8:11:00 PM
I am glad to see your encouraging words again after an interval. Thank you, Andrea. Hope you are well.
Date: 5/21/2015 7:15:00 PM
Fab, :-) Congratulations with your wonderful win! Forever *SKAT*
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Date: 5/21/2015 8:04:00 PM
Thank you Skat. Regards
Date: 5/21/2015 2:13:00 PM
such intense imagery many congrats on your win:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 5/21/2015 8:05:00 PM
A lot of thanks, Jan
Date: 8/12/2012 8:18:00 PM
Love the title, Fabiyas. Great write.
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Date: 7/29/2012 10:06:00 PM
FAB,,NICE TO SEE YOU, still congratulating all my sisters past contest. . Now I'm on the poets favorite poem contest.. I'm actually amazed with all these poems. I see why they are chosen as a favorite poem by other poets...a Super Congratulations here. I think I agreed with all the winners in this contest... love~PD
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Date: 7/26/2012 1:08:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in SKAT's "Members Favorite Poem" contest Fab. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/26/2012 4:59:00 AM
FABIYAS a belated congrats on your win..David
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Date: 7/25/2012 7:22:00 PM
Congrats, Fabiyas. Excellent. Great job. Nice going. Kudos. Ralph
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Date: 6/1/2012 8:03:00 PM
LOts of interesting images in this poem, Fabiyas. I especially liked "complaints tinkle on her lips" and "rise up like the black smoke from the train." and I see this was a winner in the "women" contest. Belated congrats to you.
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Date: 6/1/2012 11:13:00 AM
A tough life, Fabiyas, but Mrs Jasmine Garland Seller is doing her best to brighten things up. Enjoyed so much. Love, daver
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Date: 5/9/2012 11:26:00 AM
FABIAS congrats on your win..David
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Date: 5/7/2012 12:49:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement in the "Tell us of Women" contest Fab. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/7/2012 8:41:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Fabiyas. Well written
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Date: 5/6/2012 2:01:00 AM
Big Congratulations to you,Fabiyas..Beautiful piece and nice imagery....
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Date: 5/5/2012 9:26:00 PM
hey, I see you placed high in Brian's contest with your poem. Big congrats, Fabiyas. you did GREAT.
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Date: 5/5/2012 3:47:00 PM
a winning poem easy to spot Fabiyas and u have a great gift to convey stunning scenes with words luv.. visiting PS today so check out my latest poem luv..
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Date: 5/5/2012 3:10:00 AM
I can just imagine this life like scene! Great depiction! Congrats on your well deserved win! Gwendolen
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Date: 5/4/2012 11:56:00 PM
love the hanging flow in the end.. congrats on your cherished win, fabiyas!.:) huggs!
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Date: 5/4/2012 11:09:00 AM
Amzing poetry by you Fabiyas!Congrats on your win in the contest.
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Date: 5/4/2012 8:26:00 AM
Each incredible line, is worth reading more than once. Indeed a winner, and one of the best I've seen! Congratulations!
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Date: 5/4/2012 7:03:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement in "Contest 174" Fab. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/3/2012 10:41:00 PM
lots of great images in this one, good job with it, Fabiyas. Is it for the female contest going on? How are you?
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Date: 5/3/2012 4:17:00 PM
Interesting descriptive work..Yes, those baskets can't enjoy the fragrance of the Jasmine..A mother who has to work and leave her children at home can't help but worry about them while she is gone..Very emotive and expressive work..Thanks for stopping by, reading , and taking time to comment on my work..Your presence was uplifting..Sara
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Date: 5/3/2012 8:22:00 AM
Fabiyas, I read this about three times and as each time it sank in, I was more amazed. Your words, "life-like-fan, its rotation makes him dizzy" actually made me woozy. The last line is a gem. Kathy
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