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After the wall passed by, the clouds moved over in a slow turn like the edges of a whirlpool.

Everything was so quiet, just the strong breeze could be heard.  The bright green grass was an amazing contrast to the dark soggy trees and steel gray skies.

The birds were not flying; just clinging to the swaying branches of the oak tree, all pointed Southeast, winds at their tails.

On a walk after the worst of the Sandy storm I slogged down the still dampening Green grass valley rutted between The moldering fences of the shadowed alley. Under the low, ominously rushing, soggy gray clouds I saw so many black birds silently Clinging against the stiff breezes To the broken branches of the skeletal oak on the corner As if they relished the fate of the cruelly stripped leaves. I saw a hundred crows there. How many make a murder? Black pointy wraiths; Scattered commas lined up like Iron shavings stuck To magnetic branches. Dull steel skies slid in vast arcs around them. Sprinkling windy foreboding, Their clouds reached down To Collect their talons. So many eyes I know they see Spiny black needles poking out of me. Bloodless murder, muffling gray gauze No need to caw…, A hundred crows see it all.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 10/4/2022 10:40:00 AM
Really enjoyed this Kevin.Beautiful phrasing.Really pulled me in.
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Date: 11/15/2018 5:56:00 PM
Kevin, You have a great way of phrasing. I especially liked "Scattered commas lined up like Iron shavings stuck To magnetic branches."
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Date: 8/8/2018 4:55:00 PM
Nice imagery!
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Date: 7/22/2018 5:09:00 AM
Kevin, this is really lovely. I love your choice of words and their juxtaposition with each other, such a great image of the crows being like iron shavings stuck to magnetic branches. You are an inspiration to the type of poetry that drives and makes me long to write more.
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Date: 7/17/2018 1:02:00 PM
Awesome poetry Kevin ..really well written.
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Date: 7/17/2018 11:31:00 AM
Kevin, loved this! Beautiful deep imagery. Well written!
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Date: 7/17/2018 11:24:00 AM
Hi Kevin, loved this poem, very descriptive
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Date: 7/8/2018 1:33:00 PM
Hi Kevin.. I really enjoyed reading your poetry today. Thank you so much for posting your creative write!
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Date: 7/7/2018 8:46:00 PM
Delicious poetry. Delectable.
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