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A Hummingbird in your Horizon

Roaming among a sea of stars,
like a feather adrift in the breeze,
I wandered into kismet's bazaar.
From all the exotic scents and colours,
I became hypnotised by your guise.
Gazing into your reverie eyes,
you blushed like a lilac sunset.
Our souls reflected like bismuth crystals,
as hues shimmered upon forgotten lips.

I desired to decorate your sultry sighs
in a garland of holy petals,
showering you in a fountain of confetti,
creating a trail of opulent pastels.

Yet, all shades fade away,
as so much that is precious
is stolen or lost forever,
so with this porcelain heart,
where in between every beat,
the tip of my tongue calls your name,
I will adore you from a distance -
for I am just a hummingbird 
in your horizon.

Simple Musing
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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George Avatar
February 1, 2025 at 2:58 PM
This feels so tender. I love the audio too. "showering you in a fountain of confetti, creating a trail of opulent pastels." Very enchanting and vivid, painting a picture of love that is both ethereal and unattainable. The metaphor of being a hummingbird in someone’s horizon beautifully captures the bittersweet nature of distant adoration. It’s a graceful balance of passion and restraint, a poem that lingers in the heart like a cherished melody. Truly amazing, Silent. Loved how you ended it.
Manley Avatar
December 10, 2024 at 12:10 AM
I love bismuth crystals. I have one as a necklace and one just to play with. Now I imagine two souls meeting in the 5th dimension and both the glittery colors of the hummingbird. mmmm
Goldsmith Avatar
December 5, 2024 at 10:33 AM
I enjoyed reading about your lovely hummingbird write. Have a blessed day writing away.............
Buehler Avatar
December 2, 2024 at 3:58 PM
Very nicely written, romantic, melancholy and lovely. I love the title and the gorgeous imagery. A wonderful work, Silent One.
Narain Avatar
December 1, 2024 at 8:06 PM
Nice poem with vivid imagery.
Tor Avatar
November 29, 2024 at 7:24 PM
The lack of confidence to wish for someone. Feelings of insecurity for the other not reciprocating a desire for you. " For I am just a hummingbird in your horizon." Is the example. I can relate to wanting someone and being so enthralled that you think the individual is unapproachable because in your eyes they are just too good. Your emotions expressed are raw and sincere. Your metaphors are cleverly thought and reflects your message Silent One. Such uniqueness in your writing and expression.
Tor Avatar
November 29, 2024 at 7:25 PM
to admire and enjoy. Thank you for sharing my friend. Hoping you are well... God bless...
Beaufort Avatar
November 29, 2024 at 5:54 PM
SO, The poem is just really a lot of fun and you express yourself beautifully and with so much passion! I get it completely. I wonder what stops us after seeing a person we might like from taking a moment to have a brief conversation to see what happens. Of course, we can't talk to everyone and sometimes just observing gives pleasure! we get to decide!!! This makes me smile!
Nicole Avatar
November 29, 2024 at 5:53 PM
' I am just a hummingbird in your horizon. ' A soft moment, yet tender and sad, all at the same time. You can look at it this way, at least you're close, even if you're not as close as wish you could be. Your thoughts are beautiful and emotional. My best to you, Silent One. Hugs, Brandy
Rolland Avatar
November 29, 2024 at 3:44 PM
i loved the image of the hummingbird, this is beautifully written, thanks poet enjoy your week end
DiMino Avatar
November 28, 2024 at 8:18 AM
"creating a trail of opulent pastels" -- I love that! "Yet, all shades fade away, as so much that is precious" -- Beautiful! Lovely read throughout. Enjoyed very much.
Dietrich Avatar
November 27, 2024 at 1:01 PM
I love this Silent One. Just the right size for the message and the right number of romantic imsges
Proxenos Avatar
November 27, 2024 at 9:58 AM
You feel that you are just a mere hummingbird in this exotic woman's presence, someone who you desire to shower in a fountain of confettii, but all you can do is adore her from a distance within her horizon. Wonderful description of a love the heart and soul long for and linger after within a sea of stars. Blessings my friend, Jennifer.
Williams Avatar
November 26, 2024 at 11:28 PM
Dear S1 your poem is absolutely breathtaking—a poetic symphony of vivid imagery and tender emotion. The metaphors, like "souls reflected like bismuth crystals" and "a hummingbird in your horizon," evoke a sense of both fragility and boundless wonder. So much imagery...Hugs
Buhagiar Avatar
November 26, 2024 at 9:52 AM
Amazing poem. With great imagery. Wish my poetry is like your simple musing.
Alhemaidy Avatar
November 26, 2024 at 5:50 AM
Very nice musing!
Cunningham Avatar
November 25, 2024 at 11:53 PM
Love the imagery in this one SO, never simple musing though. Tom
George Avatar
November 25, 2024 at 10:00 PM
So dreamy and whimsical... !.... "in between every beat, the tip of my tongue calls your name, I will adore you from a distance - for I am just a hummingbird in your horizon." Wow....! I feel the intensity of your longing. Your versification is so sweeping that I am carried away to a world where I see a humming bird that darts up and down mesmerizing all with its aerial feats and trying to land on a flower to suck honey from it, but can't.
Seeker Avatar
November 25, 2024 at 9:17 PM
My, my! So, so endearing. A clear fav for me, Silent One. Thanks for sharing.
Rose  Avatar
November 25, 2024 at 7:29 PM
Oh wow ! I almost flew away with this .
Peranteau Avatar
November 25, 2024 at 5:02 PM
"Simple musing"; i've consulted with thuh (a) sum uv mine fellowz...the synopsis uv ourn thinks?...."not the "Simple muse" ') much love
Poet Avatar
November 25, 2024 at 4:30 PM
Dear friend, SO, Outstanding poetry about romantic apathy and that sweet quality of lust. You express strong appreciation for someone with whom you are unable to fully connect, expressing the beauty of their emotions while realizing the anguish of distance and separation. It also explores themes of love, fate (kismet), appreciation, and the fleeting nature of beauty and passion. The artwork conveys a sense of wonder and magic, juxtaposed with the grief of unachievable proximity.
Empress Avatar
November 25, 2024 at 1:29 PM
Dear silent one, this is a very heartfelt poem that depicts love in a very seamless manner. I love the title and also how youv ended it is so touching! I think “ hummingbird in your horizon” can be a very inspiring prompt too as its unique and one of those lines that we often dont read anywhere. I especially love the way youv used colorful language here and metaphors, and used nature to express in such a captivating tone. Simple musings of yours always stand out for they are soulfully moving. Pleasure reading this gem. Sending you light always my friend
Hind Avatar
November 25, 2024 at 1:29 PM
This is truly lovely poetry. where in between every beat, the tip of my tongue calls your name stands out to me. :)
Kendrick Avatar
November 25, 2024 at 12:57 PM
A hummingbird only on his/her horizon. That would be far away. Creative content. Thanks for sharing. Sara K
May Avatar
November 25, 2024 at 12:38 PM
"She shines in the distant stars", Very nicely penned Silent
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