A Hayseed In the City

A hayseed from the country, he had come
with money in his pocket just to know
the city life; he heard the steady hum
of people everywhere and traffic’s flow.

The day had been quite hot, as they can be
on dog days of the summers in New York.
His friend had said, “Find neon lights!” so he
walked until night time, feeling like a dork.

Where lights flashed, females dressed so scantily.
The young man was approached by one cute girl
who whispered, “For a good time, come with me.”
His eyes popped out; his mind was in a whirl!

The hot day soon became a hotter night.
Good gosh! he thought. . .  my friend sure told me right!

For Deb's Contest: "Hot Time, Summer in the City"

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 11/16/2020 11:35:00 PM
Wow, a hot time in the city is right! Great enjambment on this one. I like how you rhymed New York with 'dork', haha!
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Date: 10/14/2012 10:11:00 AM
we call them Çountry tups here in 'Yorkshire' read like my first time to the big city, only no good time was on offer, Dang... your story telling always a surprise, and enjoyable...
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Date: 7/31/2012 3:09:00 PM
.....with a lady of the night? Poor fellow...he'll regret it later. :-) But a refreshing approach to a sonnet. Enjoyed. -Dean
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Date: 6/24/2012 1:27:00 PM
Remarkable enjambment! I love it when a line doesn't have to end with punctuation. Super flow and rhyming too, and a FUN story! Keith :)
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Date: 6/19/2012 3:12:00 PM
This one's 'lighter' than the other 2, but nevertheless very fine (and funny)... Terry (and by the way, thank you for all your kind comments, words of advice, etc... really appreciated!!!)
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Date: 6/18/2012 12:14:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement in Debbie's contest Andrea. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/16/2012 3:25:00 PM
congrats on a shared placement with me andrea, I enjoyed your saucy sonnet :-) I had slapped wristies for not having enough of the city in my poem lol I just entered something that fitted the theme of summer
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Date: 6/15/2012 9:08:00 AM
You had me laughing with this hot hot one Andrea. A hot entry for the contest. love phyl
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Date: 6/12/2012 3:20:00 PM
Thanks so much for the entry Ms. Hayseed. Light & Love
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Date: 6/12/2012 3:17:00 PM
Reminds me of the red headed young man character in, I think it was Paint your wagon with Lee Marvin and Clint Eastwood. That boy took to smokin' cigars, drinkin' and saloon girls like fish take to water.
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Date: 6/12/2012 1:15:00 PM
LOL, love this unique one, Andrea. Many congrats on your wins : ) I think I've already thanked you, but if not, thanks - loved your limerick contest
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Date: 6/12/2012 1:13:00 PM
Great images , befitting the song.
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Date: 6/12/2012 1:00:00 PM
Looks like a hot time indeed, a lovely expressed poem, I enjoyed reading it.God bless you,Hugs!Erich.
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Date: 6/12/2012 12:40:00 PM
One of my favorites because it was written extremely well. Your rhymes were spot on. I didn't like then ending though because he was corrupted by sex. I'm out here in Vicksburg, Ms it is pouring so hard and I'm soaked to the bone, but I'm enjoying the rain. I'm trying to get home early. My wife and I are headed to the Caribbean four eight days. Her parents have a farm there. How about? Going anywhere for the summer?
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Date: 6/12/2012 12:37:00 PM
Well, looks like that I'm headed for a couple of nights in New York Andrea ! Wonder if this can happen on a chilly night as well ! *smiles ! Great entry dear poet ! Have a fantastic week....much love, james
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Date: 6/12/2012 8:31:00 AM
Golly!! Another funny write, Andrea:) Your writes often make open other links...this time it was the Lovin' Spoonful...I knew someone had sung a song with 'summer in the city'. Both song and your verse seem to run along the same path..LOL Good luck in the contest; have fun!! Love, Mikki
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Date: 6/12/2012 7:44:00 AM
nicely done Andrea.. .good luck in the contest...hugs,,,Joseph
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Date: 6/12/2012 4:45:00 AM
A really different approach which has me saluting your imagination and style... thanks for sharing karen
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Date: 6/12/2012 3:42:00 AM
Very good story you have penned here through this Sonnet.Best wishes for the contest Andrea.
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Date: 6/11/2012 9:40:00 PM
A very nice entry Andrea, good luck in the contest,..pd
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Date: 6/11/2012 8:25:00 PM
Ha Ha, Andrea, you sure are quite funny! I just love the illustrious tale you have told here! What a delightful poem! I'm sure the country boy really loves the city now! Great Work!!
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