A Flower Crushed

You were a bright, yellow daisy 
in the garden of life, so cheerful 
kind and accommodating. 
I basked in the sunlight of
your tender care and attention
my own flower bloomed and thrived. 

Our roots ran deep and grew strong
in the rich soil of our lives
together, you and I, our vines intertwined 
but in time...in time, our seasons turned 
from spring to winter, and I began to die. 

For I was poisoned, slowly, subtly 
dying without knowing it, dying on the vine
strangling with the weeds, suffocating 
the colors of my petals were draining away. 

I gave and I gave, with little return
we shared confidences, vacations
food and family, yet you became jealous 
and turned away, unsatisfied, turned
to other flowers, lied and betrayed me
my petals were plucked off, one by one. 

How naive was I! You knew what you were doing
you knew, and you took and you took
you used and abused my kindness
and sucked the life out of me. 

Your fake flower kept shining, while my
own flower wilted on the vine. 
I have faded away, a jumbled mass
of jaded leaves and petals
rotting into the ground, crushed.

I may never open up my flower again.






Written on 5/5/2018
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018


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Date: 6/8/2018 1:33:00 PM
Hello Laura, I don't know how a flowercan be jealous. It was sad when the flower died. Have a nice day my friend.
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Date: 5/16/2018 3:55:00 PM
Palpable pain Laura, when we love we expose ourselves as you have shown here--you will rise, cuz that's who you are---but a little more carefully---ah, trust--"Just remember in the winter underneath the bitter snows, lies the seed, that with the sun's love in the spring becomes the rose".
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Laura Leiser
Date: 5/16/2018 5:03:00 PM
Ah, beautiful poetic wisdom in your quote, Craig. Thank you for your encouraging words :)
Date: 5/9/2018 5:20:00 PM
This is so well written to express such a painful experience. Well done! I hope you will continue to bloom bright :)
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Laura Leiser
Date: 5/9/2018 6:01:00 PM
Thank you, Heidi. I appreciate your kind comments and am glad you liked this one. :)
Date: 5/6/2018 9:49:00 AM
My gosh Laura, excellent use of simile. I really enjoyed this write.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 5/6/2018 10:09:00 AM
Thank you so much, Carlos! Your kind words are appreciated :)
Date: 5/5/2018 3:40:00 PM
My gosh, I could feel this. What a clever way you wrote this and emotions still came through. My heart hurts for yours, my heart still hurts for its own being betrayed too. This is a fave for me.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 5/5/2018 3:47:00 PM
Thank you, Susan. When the story is real, it resonates, I think...
Date: 5/5/2018 2:27:00 PM
Such a heartfelt and melancholy poem, Laura.. All the best to you!!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 5/5/2018 2:37:00 PM
Thank you, Robertina :)
Date: 5/5/2018 1:11:00 PM
Laura...this gripped at my heart. I hope it is a fictitious write. Whatever the inspiration was, I felt the hurt and devastation in every line. Being betrayed is so hard...great write, dear. Hugs
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Laura Leiser
Date: 5/5/2018 1:43:00 PM
Thanks for commenting on my poem, Eileen. Unfortunately, this was a true friendship in my life that went sour...over 3 years ago. It still hurts today.
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