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A Flower Crushed

You were a bright, yellow daisy in the garden of life, so cheerful kind and accommodating. I basked in the sunlight of your tender care and attention my own flower bloomed and thrived. Our roots ran deep and grew strong in the rich soil of our lives together, you and I, our vines intertwined but in time...in time, our seasons turned from spring to winter, and I began to die. For I was poisoned, slowly, subtly dying without knowing it, dying on the vine strangling with the weeds, suffocating the colors of my petals were draining away. I gave and I gave, with little return we shared confidences, vacations food and family, yet you became jealous and turned away, unsatisfied, turned to other flowers, lied and betrayed me my petals were plucked off, one by one. How naive was I! You knew what you were doing you knew, and you took and you took you used and abused my kindness and sucked the life out of me. Your fake flower kept shining, while my own flower wilted on the vine. I have faded away, a jumbled mass of jaded leaves and petals rotting into the ground, crushed. I may never open up my flower again. Written on 5/5/2018

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Date: 6/8/2018 1:33:00 PM
Hello Laura, I don't know how a flowercan be jealous. It was sad when the flower died. Have a nice day my friend.
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Date: 5/16/2018 3:55:00 PM
Palpable pain Laura, when we love we expose ourselves as you have shown here--you will rise, cuz that's who you are---but a little more carefully---ah, trust--"Just remember in the winter underneath the bitter snows, lies the seed, that with the sun's love in the spring becomes the rose".
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Laura Leiser
Date: 5/16/2018 5:03:00 PM
Ah, beautiful poetic wisdom in your quote, Craig. Thank you for your encouraging words :)
Date: 5/9/2018 5:20:00 PM
This is so well written to express such a painful experience. Well done! I hope you will continue to bloom bright :)
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Laura Leiser
Date: 5/9/2018 6:01:00 PM
Thank you, Heidi. I appreciate your kind comments and am glad you liked this one. :)
Date: 5/6/2018 9:49:00 AM
My gosh Laura, excellent use of simile. I really enjoyed this write.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 5/6/2018 10:09:00 AM
Thank you so much, Carlos! Your kind words are appreciated :)
Date: 5/5/2018 3:40:00 PM
My gosh, I could feel this. What a clever way you wrote this and emotions still came through. My heart hurts for yours, my heart still hurts for its own being betrayed too. This is a fave for me.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 5/5/2018 3:47:00 PM
Thank you, Susan. When the story is real, it resonates, I think...
Date: 5/5/2018 2:27:00 PM
Such a heartfelt and melancholy poem, Laura.. All the best to you!!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 5/5/2018 2:37:00 PM
Thank you, Robertina :)
Date: 5/5/2018 1:11:00 PM
Laura...this gripped at my heart. I hope it is a fictitious write. Whatever the inspiration was, I felt the hurt and devastation in every line. Being betrayed is so hard...great write, dear. Hugs
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Laura Leiser
Date: 5/5/2018 1:43:00 PM
Thanks for commenting on my poem, Eileen. Unfortunately, this was a true friendship in my life that went sour...over 3 years ago. It still hurts today.

Book: Shattered Sighs