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A Familiar Tune

I saw a look of hurt so primordial, the dust teared and cleared Every wrinkle, every agony, Every twinkle in his eye hopelessly wrought by words He struggled with a bag of old books, His white hair scraggly, his breathing heavy I, with sorrow wrenching from my soul, Sought his own, in a sad smile that he so feverishly caught Moments passed, as the older man disappeared, But I sat there, ready to speak to him if he should return For such a catch in the eye Cannot soon dim and die with chance He returned swiftly, “Excuse me, will you be here long?” I said, “Sure. What is it?” He looked into my eyes and smiled, “Would you mind watching my books for just a bit? My clarinet is in the building, I need to go fetch it from a friend.” “Sure,” Said I. “No problem.” He thanked me, setting the bag down near me And walked with confidence to the building, To retrieve his instrument I pondered his life, the pain in his eyes, And for a moment wondered how it might compare to mine This old man, struggling with a massive bag of books, An even greater weight pressing upon his practiced brain A brain filled with the pure notes of a mechanism that soars He returned almost joyously, thanking me once again, Relaying to me his previous sufferings, Unkind, uncouth words, In his mind, sure and inerasable “Have you ever been treated so ill you wished to die? Have you ever felt that little? Felt so powerless, and failing? Surely I must be boring you. . .” When his countenance calmed and I reassured him, Offering my sympathetic ear, And many a sensitive nod, He asked my name before leaving forever “Ah…do you know the song ‘Laura’?” He hummed the tune and I beamed, nodding, Remembering the haunting melody It was as if he was anticipating that nod, That he knew I recognized such a strange, haunting tune By his happy, alighted smile So when he went on his way, With his heavy bag of books, And his clarinet tucked safely in his black box, Our pains sauntered on to less fortunate fellows

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 11/20/2015 9:19:00 PM
musicians know. I am one and you are one. How painful it is for us to bring our performance art to fruition. It never sounds the same when performed(should it)??????? You touch my heart strings and pull at them. I want to hold you and help you. I love you.Hugs Kilmer~
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 11/21/2015 12:36:00 AM
Awwwww....such a sweet comment...thank you, and I love you too! ~Laura
Date: 11/5/2015 8:23:00 AM
There is always a story of some ill wind to be told by almost everyone. It is a burden we carry that must come out every so often. It is remarkable what people go though. You are a kind soul to offer your shoulder. It was certainly appreciated.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 11/5/2015 12:13:00 PM
It's funny also, how we can relate to one another, with such different backgrounds, and such different personalities. When I encounter such people who are brave enough to open up to me about meaningful things, it makes my day extra special. I truly wish I was that brave! ~Laura
Date: 11/5/2015 7:22:00 AM
This is really quite amazing, full of such eloquent observations and a deep sense of compassion and empathy. It's funny how a few fleeting moments with a stranger can make such an impression on us. I am sure he appreciated your attention and willingness to listen.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 11/5/2015 12:11:00 PM
It was a lovely experience, and a memorable one! Thank you so much for reading, and for the kind comment! ~Laura

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