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A Distant Sprite

I fall as shadows steep, and very heavy the outer world of waning stars do sparkle. My lids grab hold of death though I am breathing. The darkness still - my fullness faints, releases a distant sprite - it holds me fast to bedding…

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Karen Jones

Date: 10/6/2023 11:45:00 PM

Congrats on a win!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/8/2023 10:19:00 AM

Thanks, Karen!

I Am Anaya

Date: 10/6/2023 11:57:00 AM

Congratulations Kim, wow a book! :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/6/2023 2:53:00 PM

Thank you !

Suzette Richards

Date: 10/6/2023 1:30:00 AM

Congratulations, Kim. Thank you for supporting my Hypnagogic Dream contest. In order to claim your prize of the book, DOWNTOWN – Poetic Devices, please soup mail me your e-mail address. Regards, Suzette

Suzette Richards
Date: 10/6/2023 9:01:00 AM

At least we know we are not alone in experiencing these dreams :) Ah, you taught me a new word: hypnopompic. Thanks :) I've always used the term 'hypnagogic' interchangeably not realising that there is a difference.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/6/2023 8:26:00 AM

Thank you, Suzette! I am fascinated by the dreamlike state. Sometimes I wake up seeing a big shadowy spider or a fun one, where confetti was falling from my ceiling - in hypnopompic state.

Bill Baker

Date: 9/14/2023 9:41:00 PM

Nice Iambic Pentameter, Kim. If for a contest, good luck, my friend. Bill

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/15/2023 8:09:00 AM

It is…thank you, Bill!

Kelly Deschler

Date: 9/14/2023 6:19:00 PM

Quite a unique and wonderful description of those nightmarish moments we all experience from time to time... Very, very well written, Kim :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/14/2023 7:20:00 PM

Thank you, Kelly!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/13/2023 8:46:00 PM

Unique insight here into a moment usually buried midst collapsing shadows. Great write, Kim!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/14/2023 4:07:00 AM

Thank you, Gershon! I always appreciate you!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/13/2023 8:29:00 AM

Great one. Very descriptive and expressive work that you have penned in this one. Thanks for sharing it with us and for dropping by my page. Sara

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/13/2023 9:28:00 AM

Thank you, Sara!

Duke Beaufort

Date: 9/13/2023 5:55:00 AM

Sounds like a bit of a distressing moment. Our brains are very complex and we experience some phenomenal things. It's wonderful if we can relax and enjoy it all. I've decided no to be afraid of anything anymore--a luxury of age.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/13/2023 9:29:00 AM

When I was a kid a couple times I thought I was awake. I could see around the room but couldn’t move…caught between sleep and being awake.

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 9/12/2023 5:53:00 PM

An amazing poem Kim. It gives me chills down my spine.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/13/2023 5:00:00 AM

Thank you, Jerry!

Paige Hind

Date: 9/12/2023 12:43:00 PM

Chills with this one! I'm holding fast to my seat! LOL

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/12/2023 4:24:00 PM

Thank you, Paige! <3

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/11/2023 3:57:00 PM

When I looked up the meaning of the contest word, it meant the stage before we dream, so i guess I just took it too literally.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/11/2023 4:13:00 PM

When you have this paralysis happen you feel like you are awake. Happened when I was a kid. Look at this article under symptoms. I’ve experienced some of these https://www.verywellhealth.com/what-is-a-false-awakening-3014835

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/11/2023 3:56:00 PM

you did really great compared to me. I never posted mine yet, but I'd say it's only half show while yours is all show and no tell!!!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/11/2023 4:14:00 PM

I appreciate your comment. That helps me. Thanks, Andrea!

Yann Rolland

Date: 9/11/2023 3:41:00 PM

so beautiful poem, the power of the spirit of the night, enjoyed , so well written yann

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/11/2023 4:14:00 PM

Thank you, Yann!