Kim Rodrigues Poet Iambic Pentameter

A Distant Sprite

I fall as shadows steep, and very heavy
the outer world of waning stars do sparkle.
My lids grab hold of death though I am breathing.
The darkness still - my fullness faints, releases
a distant sprite - it holds me fast to bedding…

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Karen Jones October 6, 2023 at 11:45 PM Congrats on a win! Kim Rodrigues October 8, 2023 at 10:19 AM Thanks, Karen!

I Am Anaya October 6, 2023 at 11:57 AM Congratulations Kim, wow a book! :) Kim Rodrigues October 6, 2023 at 2:53 PM Thank you !

Suzette Richards October 6, 2023 at 1:30 AM Congratulations, Kim. Thank you for supporting my Hypnagogic Dream contest. In order to claim your prize of the book, DOWNTOWN – Poetic Devices, please soup mail me your e-mail address. Regards, Suzette Suzette Richards October 6, 2023 at 9:01 AM At least we know we are not alone in experiencing these dreams :) Ah, you taught me a new word: hypnopompic. Thanks :) I've always used the term 'hypnagogic' interchangeably not realising that there is a difference. Kim Rodrigues October 6, 2023 at 8:26 AM Thank you, Suzette! I am fascinated by the dreamlike state. Sometimes I wake up seeing a big shadowy spider or a fun one, where confetti was falling from my ceiling - in hypnopompic state.

Bill Baker September 14, 2023 at 9:41 PM Nice Iambic Pentameter, Kim. If for a contest, good luck, my friend. Bill Kim Rodrigues September 15, 2023 at 8:09 AM It is…thank you, Bill!

Kelly Deschler September 14, 2023 at 6:19 PM Quite a unique and wonderful description of those nightmarish moments we all experience from time to time... Very, very well written, Kim :) Kim Rodrigues September 14, 2023 at 7:20 PM Thank you, Kelly!

Gershon Wolf September 13, 2023 at 8:46 PM Unique insight here into a moment usually buried midst collapsing shadows. Great write, Kim! Kim Rodrigues September 14, 2023 at 4:07 AM Thank you, Gershon! I always appreciate you!

Sara Kendrick September 13, 2023 at 8:29 AM Great one. Very descriptive and expressive work that you have penned in this one. Thanks for sharing it with us and for dropping by my page. Sara Kim Rodrigues September 13, 2023 at 9:28 AM Thank you, Sara!

Duke Beaufort September 13, 2023 at 5:55 AM Sounds like a bit of a distressing moment. Our brains are very complex and we experience some phenomenal things. It's wonderful if we can relax and enjoy it all. I've decided no to be afraid of anything anymore--a luxury of age. Kim Rodrigues September 13, 2023 at 9:29 AM When I was a kid a couple times I thought I was awake. I could see around the room but couldn’t move…caught between sleep and being awake.

Jerry Brotherton September 12, 2023 at 5:53 PM An amazing poem Kim. It gives me chills down my spine. Kim Rodrigues September 13, 2023 at 5:00 AM Thank you, Jerry!

Paige Hind September 12, 2023 at 12:43 PM Chills with this one! I'm holding fast to my seat! LOL Kim Rodrigues September 12, 2023 at 4:24 PM Thank you, Paige! <3

Andrea Dietrich September 11, 2023 at 3:57 PM When I looked up the meaning of the contest word, it meant the stage before we dream, so i guess I just took it too literally. Kim Rodrigues September 11, 2023 at 4:13 PM When you have this paralysis happen you feel like you are awake. Happened when I was a kid. Look at this article under symptoms. I’ve experienced some of these https://www.verywellhealth.com/what-is-a-false-awakening-3014835

Andrea Dietrich September 11, 2023 at 3:56 PM you did really great compared to me. I never posted mine yet, but I'd say it's only half show while yours is all show and no tell!!! Kim Rodrigues September 11, 2023 at 4:14 PM I appreciate your comment. That helps me. Thanks, Andrea!

Yann Rolland September 11, 2023 at 3:41 PM so beautiful poem, the power of the spirit of the night, enjoyed , so well written yann Kim Rodrigues September 11, 2023 at 4:14 PM Thank you, Yann!