Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Poet Quatorzain

A Diamond In the Rough

A DIAMOND IN THE ROUGH

The silky pearly-white soft skin, beneath her comb's dark beams
and her intriguing olive eyes' attentive, thoughtful gaze,
behind the night's befalling veil, with elegance supreme,
like mystic crypts enchant the men and cause infernal blaze.

Involuntarily transmits her messages across
a forest nymph expands her spell beneath the moonlight's phase,
beguiles the thoughts; romantic dream her cherry lips of gloss
the nightly creatures stuns and laws of reason disobeys.

Untamed, a diamond in the rough, the nymph in darkness shines
without a partner to escort her dance beneath the sky,
denies to coexist with men, proposals she declines,
and so belongs to breezy streams, that lift her image high.

© Olive Eloisa Guillermo, 08-20-2014, All Rights Reserved
(Quatorzain or Iambic heptameter

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James Fraser December 10, 2014 at 2:02 PM If all such wearers could read this, just maybe, less would be wearing. Terrific poetry on a very touchy subject, James... Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser December 10, 2014 at 10:37 PM indeed it is.. :)! thanks much. :)

Casarah Nance September 3, 2014 at 7:31 PM I am always impressed by your beauty in words, well done, grats on your win sweetie :) Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 4, 2014 at 10:34 AM thanks much Cassie.. hugs.. and your poems too are great.. :)

Dr. Upma A. Sharma September 2, 2014 at 8:17 AM Amazingly beautiful Olive! Congrats on huge win dear! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 4, 2014 at 10:28 AM tHanks much.. :) GBU

Dr.Ram Mehta September 1, 2014 at 5:09 AM Very insightful write, Olive. congrats Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 1, 2014 at 5:18 AM Thanks much Dr. Ram really appreciate ur drop..:)

Joyce Johnson September 1, 2014 at 1:32 AM So very pretty. congratulations, Olive. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 1, 2014 at 5:17 AM Thanks much Joyce..:) appreciate it..:)

Brenda Meier-Hans August 31, 2014 at 7:57 PM Congratulations Olive. You must of worked hard to be able to write something this beautiful and deep. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 1, 2014 at 5:17 AM Thanks much Brenda.:) I appreciate it..:) GBU

Richard Palmer July 2, 2014 at 7:01 AM wonderful write Olive,its a world wide problem,alot of persons have dropped their standards,just to survive,touching write Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 2, 2014 at 11:55 AM Thank you Richard for stopping by and reading this,, :)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 1, 2014 at 5:40 PM Allow me to say that this poem is inspired by Arthur poem Burka woman but I did it in the opposite as I was also inspired by a documentary I watched. All over the world this happens due to poverty and lack of support both from parents and government..

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 1, 2014 at 5:38 PM Some chose such ways to have "easy money" but they use this to support themselves.. Some treat them unfairly and see them as somewhat "dirty".. I hope and pray that such treatments are eliminated rather still respect and respect must prevail..

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 1, 2014 at 5:38 PM . I hope too that those who are well-off will learn to value what they have, for some strives so so hard to finish their degree..:)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 1, 2014 at 5:37 PM And I really salute this people who tried to step out and stand from such situations and I salute more those who chose other way to support themselves. I am so thankful that I am blessed with responsible parents.)God bless us all... From such rough situations, diamonds will still shine.. :)

Debbie Guzzi July 1, 2014 at 4:16 PM Such insight for someone so young!Light & Love Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 2, 2014 at 1:38 AM I hope you saw it good Debbie..:) GBU :) thanks

Paul Callus July 1, 2014 at 4:07 PM Hi Olive_eloi! They say that opposites attract. Having read and much appreciated Arthur's I can safely say that your poem is also an excellent piece of work...seen from a different angle. // paul Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 2, 2014 at 1:36 AM weeeeee am afraid it will not be Paul or I'll be misinterpreted...:( thank you..:)

Arthur Vaso June 30, 2014 at 11:15 PM I am truly flattered Olive, I am at a loss for words! I loved the line "She tried to impress as slowly she undress" I can tell you that will always impress!!!! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 2, 2014 at 1:35 AM Hey is naughty Art whose there..:D lool :) thanks much I hope. Also that it's second meaning distinguish..:D

Tim Smith June 30, 2014 at 8:06 PM I love it Olive as will Arthur...I love the line her rights to live normally, a tamed aim.......hugs Tim Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 2, 2014 at 1:32 AM Thank you so much Tim..:)