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A Daydream

My fingertips lightly travel down these worn piano keys, the memories now unravel as I hear your favorite melodies. I reminisce within my writing about a time that used to be, when your arms were so inviting and they would hold only me. The quiet whispers on the breeze the first kisses that were soft, we sat underneath the willow trees, as my heart then sailed aloft. I can still smell the roses, red their petals pressed upon the page, where your old promises lie dead they have not withered with age. I am daydreaming of the past when our love seemed to be true, a relationship that will not last but, back then we never knew. Isaiah Zerbst's contest - "A Daydream" Based on the painting. "A Daydream" by Sir Edward John Poynter

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Date: 4/27/2015 2:25:00 PM
such an emotional write Kelly would have loved to see this place higher in Thomas's contest:-) Hugs Jan xx 7 xx
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 4/30/2015 2:11:00 PM
Thank you so much, Jan. I really appreciate your support! Hugs :)
Date: 4/26/2015 10:16:00 PM
Kelly, Congrats on your awesome win! ~SKAT~
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Date: 4/26/2015 9:38:00 PM
Congratulations Kelly fine poem.Well done.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 4/29/2015 11:46:00 PM
Thank you for your kind congrats and comments, Robert!
Date: 9/10/2014 6:01:00 PM
well written. well felt and then well written. a lovers' praxis. the first stanza and the last stanza (especially the last. damn pithy shot.) were the most potent for me. thank you.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 9/17/2014 2:00:00 AM
The emotion always comes first, before the poetry. I have to truly feel it in my heart, or else I could never put pen to paper.... Thank you for your kind comments, Michael. I appreciate them very much!
Date: 7/2/2014 6:25:00 AM
Such a sweet memory poem, Kelly. If we knew the outcome of things that don't last, we might avoid them but then we would miss the sweet memories. Love this!.. Hugs.. Arlene
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 7/8/2014 12:44:00 AM
Thank you once again, Arlene, for taking the time to read and comment on my poems. I appreciate it very much!.... I agree, we are better off from not knowing what the future holds, because then we might miss out on the fun of making memories that last! Hugs :)
Date: 5/25/2014 5:36:00 PM
Bravo and congratulations on your win. Beautiful and melancholy - great write!
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/26/2014 3:31:00 PM
Thank you, once again, Pandita. Your kind comments really meant a lot to me!
Date: 5/17/2014 12:12:00 AM
A hearty congratulations on your big win! Every line great but this one simply slays me! "The quiet whispers on the breeze the first kisses that were soft, we sat underneath the willow trees, as my heart then sailed aloft." Bravo!!!!!!!!!
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Robert Lindley
Date: 6/24/2014 11:57:00 PM
I came back to visit this poem again. This gem is now going into my fav list.. Thanks much!!!!
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/18/2014 11:30:00 PM
Thank you for the kind comments and the congrats! I appreciate it very much, Robert!
Date: 5/11/2014 3:22:00 PM
So true we should embrace earlier the concept that joy is fleeting, and to treasure it more when it's there. Congrad's Light & Love
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Date: 5/11/2014 9:47:00 AM
Melancholy! Nice poem and a big congrats. BG
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/12/2014 6:11:00 PM
Thank you so much, Barbara!
Date: 5/11/2014 9:41:00 AM
Congratulations on a well deserved win
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/12/2014 6:02:00 PM
Thank you so much, Frederic!
Date: 5/11/2014 12:48:00 AM
Highly romantic but a sad end Kelly ! Wonderful emotional write ! Congrats on great win !
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/11/2014 5:46:00 PM
Thank you for the kind comments, Dr. Upma! I do tend to end my poems on a sad note, and I'm not really sure why. I will try to write something different in the future! :)
Date: 5/11/2014 12:23:00 AM
Spectacular write, my friend! Your grasp of form has increased extraordinarily, and I love that. All the wonderful rhymes added to the intense life in the poem is downright fantastic!
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/12/2014 3:22:00 PM
When I first joined Poetry Soup I only knew about rhyme and free verse. And now I have written in quatrain, iambic pentameter, sonnet, rhyme royal, and acrostic forms. It is fun to try something different every now and then!
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Isaiah Zerbst
Date: 5/12/2014 11:25:00 AM
That's awesome, Kelly. You soak it all up like a sponge! It is so refreshing to see people that are eager to learn more about this beautiful craft.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/11/2014 2:15:00 PM
Thank you for giving my poem a first place in your contest! And your wonderful comments mean so much to me, Isaiah. Back when we wrote "The Signal", I did not know a lot about form. Since then, I have learned so much from you and a few other poets here on the Soup. I just want to absorb all that I can, and try to grow and become a better writer. :)
Date: 5/8/2014 8:11:00 AM
Very sad my dear Kelly but well executed. Just stopping by at the Soup. I hope you are keeping well.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/9/2014 11:10:00 AM
Thank you so much for stopping by, Mustapha. I am well, and I hope you are, too, my friend.
Date: 5/8/2014 6:00:00 AM
Oh! Kelly how romantic and sad at the same time, absolutely loved it, couldn't wait to get to the end to see how it ended and what a surprise.......Vera...............
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/9/2014 1:48:00 AM
Thank you so much for stopping by, Vera. Your kind comments are always appreciated. I'm very happy that you enjoyed this poem! :)
Date: 5/7/2014 3:23:00 PM
Dropping by to say hi. I enjoyed reading this one again.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/9/2014 1:22:00 AM
Hi Richard, thanks for dropping by to read my poem, once again. I do appreciate it. :)
Date: 5/5/2014 10:02:00 PM
makes me sad, but i love this poem because it is so beautiful... Good luck in the contest, although i must ask of u a favor... my sister (username: nobody) has joined poetry soup, plz get the word out!!! (but not for a couple of weeks) it would be greatly appreciated!!! see yah!!! -Jose
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/7/2014 9:35:00 PM
Thank you for the kind comments, Jose. I'm happy that you enjoyed this poem. I will definitely be stopping by to read your sister's poetry. :)
Date: 5/5/2014 1:27:00 PM
a wonderful relationship journey,,sorry it didn't last,,great write Kelly,best wishes for the contest
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/7/2014 4:36:00 PM
Thank you for the nice comments, Richard. I appreciate it very much!
Date: 5/5/2014 7:37:00 AM
Your soft words whisper eloquently of memories of a love that float so gently through the corridors of time. Fantastic write. Thank you for my placement in your contest.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/7/2014 4:07:00 PM
Thank you for the wonderful comments, Monterey. I really do appreciate it!....You're very welcome for the placement. Thanks for entering my contest. :)
Date: 5/3/2014 3:06:00 PM
oh my, kelly.. i feel like being absorbed in your world.. beautifully handled and a winner for me.. thanks for making me a big part of your poetry contest!.. huggs
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/5/2014 1:01:00 PM
Thank you for your encouraging comments, Nette. It really means so much coming from you!.... You're very welcome for the placement. Thanks for participating in my contests. I do appreciate it. Hugs :)
Date: 5/3/2014 1:33:00 PM
i love this poem....feels like im looking at the painting while i read great job-Love Ettie
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/5/2014 12:51:00 PM
Thank you for your kind comments, Ettie. I'm glad that you enjoyed my poem! :)
Date: 5/3/2014 8:01:00 AM
Great poem for the contest, Kelly! My only suggestion is to perhaps tweak line eight a bit to improve the meter. Cheers, Roy
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/5/2014 12:48:00 PM
Thank you for your encouraging and helpful comments, Roy. I will look at making a change. :)
Date: 5/2/2014 9:31:00 PM
A romantic memory frozen within your beautiful lines, it has a beauty of loves legendary sweetness, it is a emotion never to be forgotten but relived in thought's reflection, nice job. cheri
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/4/2014 1:59:00 PM
Thank you so much for stopping by Cheri. Your kind comments are always appreciated, my friend! :)
Date: 5/2/2014 2:02:00 PM
so sensual and enchanting Kelly a real day dream superb write hugs
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/3/2014 11:12:00 PM
Thank you very much, Shadow. Your kind comments are always appreciated! Hugs :)
Date: 5/2/2014 12:41:00 PM
I like how you connected memory with music, they are so closly connected. It is a good thing that we are unaware that some relationships will not last or we would have missed out on some amazing experiences.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/3/2014 9:17:00 PM
When a certain song comes on the radio it does bring back memories, some good and some bad. Music can connect people in so many ways.... And I agree, some things we are better off not knowing.... Thank you for stopping by, Richard. Your kind comments are always appreciated!
Date: 4/30/2014 7:24:00 PM
My daydream was of something not known, but I really like how you made yours a daydream of the past. I think those kinds are nice too!! Very good entry for the contest, dear.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/2/2014 7:29:00 PM
Thank you very much, Andrea. Your kind and encouraging comments are always appreciated! :)
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