Kelly Deschler Poet Quatrain

A Daydream

My fingertips lightly travel
down these worn piano keys,
the memories now unravel
as I hear your favorite melodies.

I reminisce within my writing
about a time that used to be,
when your arms were so inviting
and they would hold only me.

The quiet whispers on the breeze
the first kisses that were soft,
we sat underneath the willow trees,
as my heart then sailed aloft.

I can still smell the roses, red
their petals pressed upon the page,
where your old promises lie dead
they have not withered with age.

I am daydreaming of the past
when our love seemed to be true,
a relationship that will not last
but, back then we never knew.





Isaiah Zerbst's contest - "A Daydream"

Based on the painting. "A Daydream" by Sir Edward John Poynter

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Jan Allison April 27, 2015 at 2:25 PM such an emotional write Kelly would have loved to see this place higher in Thomas's contest:-) Hugs Jan xx 7 xx Kelly Deschler April 30, 2015 at 2:11 PM Thank you so much, Jan. I really appreciate your support! Hugs :)

Skat A April 26, 2015 at 10:16 PM Kelly, Congrats on your awesome win! ~SKAT~

Robert Stoner Jr April 26, 2015 at 9:38 PM Congratulations Kelly fine poem.Well done. Kelly Deschler April 29, 2015 at 11:46 PM Thank you for your kind congrats and comments, Robert!

Michael Miers September 10, 2014 at 6:01 PM well written. well felt and then well written. a lovers' praxis. the first stanza and the last stanza (especially the last. damn pithy shot.) were the most potent for me. thank you. Kelly Deschler September 17, 2014 at 2:00 AM The emotion always comes first, before the poetry. I have to truly feel it in my heart, or else I could never put pen to paper.... Thank you for your kind comments, Michael. I appreciate them very much!

Arlene Smith July 2, 2014 at 6:25 AM Such a sweet memory poem, Kelly. If we knew the outcome of things that don't last, we might avoid them but then we would miss the sweet memories. Love this!.. Hugs.. Arlene Kelly Deschler July 8, 2014 at 12:44 AM Thank you once again, Arlene, for taking the time to read and comment on my poems. I appreciate it very much!.... I agree, we are better off from not knowing what the future holds, because then we might miss out on the fun of making memories that last! Hugs :)

Pandita Sietesantos May 25, 2014 at 5:36 PM Bravo and congratulations on your win. Beautiful and melancholy - great write! Kelly Deschler May 26, 2014 at 3:31 PM Thank you, once again, Pandita. Your kind comments really meant a lot to me!

Robert Lindley May 17, 2014 at 12:12 AM A hearty congratulations on your big win! Every line great but this one simply slays me! "The quiet whispers on the breeze the first kisses that were soft, we sat underneath the willow trees, as my heart then sailed aloft." Bravo!!!!!!!!! Robert Lindley June 24, 2014 at 11:57 PM I came back to visit this poem again. This gem is now going into my fav list.. Thanks much!!!! Kelly Deschler May 18, 2014 at 11:30 PM Thank you for the kind comments and the congrats! I appreciate it very much, Robert!

Debbie Guzzi May 11, 2014 at 3:22 PM So true we should embrace earlier the concept that joy is fleeting, and to treasure it more when it's there. Congrad's Light & Love

Barbara Gorelick May 11, 2014 at 9:47 AM Melancholy! Nice poem and a big congrats. BG Kelly Deschler May 12, 2014 at 6:11 PM Thank you so much, Barbara!

Frederic Parker May 11, 2014 at 9:41 AM Congratulations on a well deserved win Kelly Deschler May 12, 2014 at 6:02 PM Thank you so much, Frederic!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma May 11, 2014 at 12:48 AM Highly romantic but a sad end Kelly ! Wonderful emotional write ! Congrats on great win ! Kelly Deschler May 11, 2014 at 5:46 PM Thank you for the kind comments, Dr. Upma! I do tend to end my poems on a sad note, and I'm not really sure why. I will try to write something different in the future! :)

Isaiah Zerbst May 11, 2014 at 12:23 AM Spectacular write, my friend! Your grasp of form has increased extraordinarily, and I love that. All the wonderful rhymes added to the intense life in the poem is downright fantastic! Kelly Deschler May 12, 2014 at 3:22 PM When I first joined Poetry Soup I only knew about rhyme and free verse. And now I have written in quatrain, iambic pentameter, sonnet, rhyme royal, and acrostic forms. It is fun to try something different every now and then! Isaiah Zerbst May 12, 2014 at 11:25 AM That's awesome, Kelly. You soak it all up like a sponge! It is so refreshing to see people that are eager to learn more about this beautiful craft. Kelly Deschler May 11, 2014 at 2:15 PM Thank you for giving my poem a first place in your contest! And your wonderful comments mean so much to me, Isaiah. Back when we wrote "The Signal", I did not know a lot about form. Since then, I have learned so much from you and a few other poets here on the Soup. I just want to absorb all that I can, and try to grow and become a better writer. :)

Mustapha Mohammed May 8, 2014 at 8:11 AM Very sad my dear Kelly but well executed. Just stopping by at the Soup. I hope you are keeping well. Kelly Deschler May 9, 2014 at 11:10 AM Thank you so much for stopping by, Mustapha. I am well, and I hope you are, too, my friend.

Vera Duggan May 8, 2014 at 6:00 AM Oh! Kelly how romantic and sad at the same time, absolutely loved it, couldn't wait to get to the end to see how it ended and what a surprise.......Vera............... Kelly Deschler May 9, 2014 at 1:48 AM Thank you so much for stopping by, Vera. Your kind comments are always appreciated. I'm very happy that you enjoyed this poem! :)

Richard Lamoureux May 7, 2014 at 3:23 PM Dropping by to say hi. I enjoyed reading this one again. Kelly Deschler May 9, 2014 at 1:22 AM Hi Richard, thanks for dropping by to read my poem, once again. I do appreciate it. :)

Jesus Tello May 5, 2014 at 10:02 PM makes me sad, but i love this poem because it is so beautiful... Good luck in the contest, although i must ask of u a favor... my sister (username: nobody) has joined poetry soup, plz get the word out!!! (but not for a couple of weeks) it would be greatly appreciated!!! see yah!!! -Jose Kelly Deschler May 7, 2014 at 9:35 PM Thank you for the kind comments, Jose. I'm happy that you enjoyed this poem. I will definitely be stopping by to read your sister's poetry. :)

Richard Palmer May 5, 2014 at 1:27 PM a wonderful relationship journey,,sorry it didn't last,,great write Kelly,best wishes for the contest Kelly Deschler May 7, 2014 at 4:36 PM Thank you for the nice comments, Richard. I appreciate it very much!

Monterey Sirak May 5, 2014 at 7:37 AM Your soft words whisper eloquently of memories of a love that float so gently through the corridors of time. Fantastic write. Thank you for my placement in your contest. Kelly Deschler May 7, 2014 at 4:07 PM Thank you for the wonderful comments, Monterey. I really do appreciate it!....You're very welcome for the placement. Thanks for entering my contest. :)

Nette Onclaud May 3, 2014 at 3:06 PM oh my, kelly.. i feel like being absorbed in your world.. beautifully handled and a winner for me.. thanks for making me a big part of your poetry contest!.. huggs Kelly Deschler May 5, 2014 at 1:01 PM Thank you for your encouraging comments, Nette. It really means so much coming from you!.... You're very welcome for the placement. Thanks for participating in my contests. I do appreciate it. Hugs :)

Ettie Christian-Bowling May 3, 2014 at 1:33 PM i love this poem....feels like im looking at the painting while i read great job-Love Ettie Kelly Deschler May 5, 2014 at 12:51 PM Thank you for your kind comments, Ettie. I'm glad that you enjoyed my poem! :)

Roy Jerden May 3, 2014 at 8:01 AM Great poem for the contest, Kelly! My only suggestion is to perhaps tweak line eight a bit to improve the meter. Cheers, Roy Kelly Deschler May 5, 2014 at 12:48 PM Thank you for your encouraging and helpful comments, Roy. I will look at making a change. :)

Cherl Dunn May 2, 2014 at 9:31 PM A romantic memory frozen within your beautiful lines, it has a beauty of loves legendary sweetness, it is a emotion never to be forgotten but relived in thought's reflection, nice job. cheri Kelly Deschler May 4, 2014 at 1:59 PM Thank you so much for stopping by Cheri. Your kind comments are always appreciated, my friend! :)

Shadow Hamilton May 2, 2014 at 2:02 PM so sensual and enchanting Kelly a real day dream superb write hugs Kelly Deschler May 3, 2014 at 11:12 PM Thank you very much, Shadow. Your kind comments are always appreciated! Hugs :)

Richard Lamoureux May 2, 2014 at 12:41 PM I like how you connected memory with music, they are so closly connected. It is a good thing that we are unaware that some relationships will not last or we would have missed out on some amazing experiences. Kelly Deschler May 3, 2014 at 9:17 PM When a certain song comes on the radio it does bring back memories, some good and some bad. Music can connect people in so many ways.... And I agree, some things we are better off not knowing.... Thank you for stopping by, Richard. Your kind comments are always appreciated!

Andrea Dietrich April 30, 2014 at 7:24 PM My daydream was of something not known, but I really like how you made yours a daydream of the past. I think those kinds are nice too!! Very good entry for the contest, dear. Kelly Deschler May 2, 2014 at 7:29 PM Thank you very much, Andrea. Your kind and encouraging comments are always appreciated! :)

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