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A Countryside Breeze

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You were mine, glad to be caged, imprisoned in my grip, an ecstasy of love. I was not wise, looked further afield, found other nymphs, satiated and fully satisfied I shunned your essence. I opened my hand and you like a freed butterfly, flew away. I saw you gorge on nectar sweet and urged you back, but the chain was broken. Once again like spring-time seeds you flew away upon the countryside breeze. FICTION

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M. L. Kiser

Date: 8/3/2021 11:41:00 AM

This was a great read, beautifully crafted.

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 7/30/2021 4:08:00 PM

Victor, if one wants to keep a butterfly sweet don’t go causing the heart of another to flutter. Love this fictional write… Belle

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/30/2021 4:50:00 AM

Hi Victor, You told that type of situation very well. Great job. Have a great day:-) Alexis

Sotto Poet

Date: 7/29/2021 5:01:00 PM

Major mistakes often mark adolescence that the aging process could undo. You've performed well, Victor. My very best wishes on the Alpha Line Contest, blessings, and best regards

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/29/2021 4:59:00 PM

- So tender and beautiful ... like a butterfly, Victor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Smita Kulkarni

Date: 7/29/2021 11:28:00 AM

What a lovely write! Enjoyed reading it Victor!

Supraja Kannan

Date: 7/29/2021 8:40:00 AM

So deep but lovely... Beautifully penned poetry...

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 7/29/2021 8:36:00 AM

A bittersweet tale, marvelously told, of what can happen when someone's careless with a love affair. Wonderful imagery! :)

Harry Horsman

Date: 7/29/2021 8:18:00 AM

Love this, Victor and the message it portrays..

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/29/2021 6:46:00 AM

Some people just are not going to be tied down to only one love. They are born that way and have to flit like a butterfly or a hummingbird. I enjoyed reading your work. I am sure you have know people like this from viewing it from afar. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara

Vijay Pandit

Date: 7/29/2021 5:43:00 AM

I hear your message in this metaphoric write, Victor. Meaningful turn towards the end.

John Lawless

Date: 7/29/2021 5:32:00 AM

As the song says "you don't know what you've got....til it's gone"....Beautifully and tersely written Victor

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/29/2021 3:44:00 AM

That last verse…wow!

Delice Arleen Skelly

Date: 7/29/2021 3:18:00 AM

Youth is filled with mistakes that sometimes even time cannot erase. Nice one Victor... By the way good luck in the Alpha Line contest..best wishes Delice

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/29/2021 1:17:00 AM

A verse filled with feelings of love lost due to grave mistakes, Victor:) great imagery used:)

Tom Cunningham

Date: 7/29/2021 12:52:00 AM

You play with fire you're going to get burnt. A scenario you often hear about Victor. Tom

Eve Roper

Date: 7/28/2021 9:41:00 PM

I love the flow and feel of this verse. I like the imagery of, "I opened my hand and you like a freed butterfly, flew away. like spring-time seeds you flew away"