Victor Buhagiar Poet Rhyme

A Bunch of Jonquils

You never forget your first love.  by poet



How can I ever forget my lovely first love.
    Spring vivifies blossoms with dancing hues
    As we were picking jonquils wild,
From curving lanes up high.
The balmy breeze blew softly o'er the greenish hills
          And there we met where yellow jonquils grew.

I stared at her, strangers coming out of the blue.
Hearing sparrows singing over the rills,
     Shyly I stared up to the sky,
     Her smile so sweet, so mild,
     She was a majestic picture of vibrant views.
That she'll be mine I prayed to the above.

Would our sympathies fit like any tender glove?
Lambent yet warm I was sure what to choose.
My heart was beating like a child.
     I urged myself to try.
     I took her hand and meandered towards the mills.
I proposed, joyfully she said yes too.

26 December 2020

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A Little Memory - My Invented Form - Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Constance La France

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Sara Kendrick January 21, 2021 at 3:50 AM Back with congrats. Sara

Marilene Evans January 20, 2021 at 10:37 AM Great write. Congratulations.

Constance La France January 19, 2021 at 12:06 PM Victor, congratulations on your win in my contest, A Little Memory using my invented Rhyme form, excellent poem, I love it and the quote too _Constance

Caren Krutsinger January 16, 2021 at 7:34 PM Tender, romantic and beautiful Victor. An amazing proposal. Wow!

Judy Ball January 6, 2021 at 9:49 AM This is so lovely. What a blessing to have these warm and tender memories. Loved this Victor. God Bless, JB

Andrea Dietrich December 31, 2020 at 5:28 PM wow, this is a splendid memory, Victor. Sorry I did not see it earlier. I have to redo my entry for Dear HEART. I did not post it yet, thank heavens. I completely forgot the unusual syllable count rule!! happy New Year to you. I think it's already there on your side of the world.

Kim Rodrigues December 29, 2020 at 5:04 AM So beautiful!

Michael Tor December 27, 2020 at 2:28 PM Lovely piece Victor so real and special when its a first love. I like how everything worked out. A happy ending is always best. Wonderful memory...

Tania Kitchin December 27, 2020 at 10:34 AM A beautiful poem, a great entry for the contest, I am sure will place high! hugs

Sara Kendrick December 27, 2020 at 7:18 AM Reads like a good contender to me. I haven't looked at the contest but reads like an interesting one. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara

Joanna Daniel December 27, 2020 at 6:10 AM A lovely memory to cherish, Victor:) so well composed:)

Alexis Y. December 27, 2020 at 6:01 AM WoW! Victor, The content and imagery were so well done—great descriptions on how it feels recalling memories of your first love. I found your well-written write to be very romantic in a subtle way as well. Best wishes in the contest. Happy New Year, my friend:-)Alexis

David Smith December 26, 2020 at 10:14 PM Your talent has not been dimmed by the passing of another Christmas day. May you witness a few more. ll the best from NZ

Evelyn Judy Buehler December 26, 2020 at 9:38 PM Yours is a wonderful description of first love, amid beautiful natural scenery and flowers. Best wishes for the contest. :)

Eve Roper December 26, 2020 at 7:56 PM Wonderful poem, Victor, a love not forgotten. Good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve

Quoth Theraven December 26, 2020 at 7:00 PM Victor, Sweet bliss in wild jonquils, heart like a wheel. You bring it to the table, we'll all have a feast. -Richard

Angela Crabtree December 26, 2020 at 6:05 PM A beautiful poem, Victor. We never forget our first love. This is true :)

Regina Mcintosh December 26, 2020 at 5:47 AM Lovely memory... so beautiful. A whisper of hope in the dark. Love and prayers for you. God B L E S S you

Vijay Pandit December 26, 2020 at 5:07 AM WOW! A beautiful love story set in a charming setting. Delightful details and imagery you created, Victor, in this difficult to execute rhyme form. Much enjoyed your recall on memory lane.

Tom Cunningham December 26, 2020 at 4:16 AM We never forget our first love Victor, they stay forever in our memories. Hope you've had an enjoyable Christmas. Tom Victor Buhagiar December 26, 2020 at 4:21 AM I hope you did so too.