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A Bunch of Jonquils

You never forget your first love. by poet How can I ever forget my lovely first love. Spring vivifies blossoms with dancing hues As we were picking jonquils wild, From curving lanes up high. The balmy breeze blew softly o'er the greenish hills And there we met where yellow jonquils grew. I stared at her, strangers coming out of the blue. Hearing sparrows singing over the rills, Shyly I stared up to the sky, Her smile so sweet, so mild, She was a majestic picture of vibrant views. That she'll be mine I prayed to the above. Would our sympathies fit like any tender glove? Lambent yet warm I was sure what to choose. My heart was beating like a child. I urged myself to try. I took her hand and meandered towards the mills. I proposed, joyfully she said yes too. 26 December 2020 Placed 1 A Little Memory - My Invented Form - Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France

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Date: 1/21/2021 3:50:00 AM
Back with congrats. Sara
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Date: 1/20/2021 10:37:00 AM
Great write. Congratulations.
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Date: 1/19/2021 12:06:00 PM
Victor, congratulations on your win in my contest, A Little Memory using my invented Rhyme form, excellent poem, I love it and the quote too _Constance
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Date: 1/16/2021 7:34:00 PM
Tender, romantic and beautiful Victor. An amazing proposal. Wow!
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Date: 1/6/2021 9:49:00 AM
This is so lovely. What a blessing to have these warm and tender memories. Loved this Victor. God Bless, JB
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Date: 12/31/2020 5:28:00 PM
wow, this is a splendid memory, Victor. Sorry I did not see it earlier. I have to redo my entry for Dear HEART. I did not post it yet, thank heavens. I completely forgot the unusual syllable count rule!! happy New Year to you. I think it's already there on your side of the world.
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Date: 12/29/2020 5:04:00 AM
So beautiful!
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Date: 12/27/2020 2:28:00 PM
Lovely piece Victor so real and special when its a first love. I like how everything worked out. A happy ending is always best. Wonderful memory...
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Date: 12/27/2020 10:34:00 AM
A beautiful poem, a great entry for the contest, I am sure will place high! hugs
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Date: 12/27/2020 7:18:00 AM
Reads like a good contender to me. I haven't looked at the contest but reads like an interesting one. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara
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Date: 12/27/2020 6:10:00 AM
A lovely memory to cherish, Victor:) so well composed:)
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Date: 12/27/2020 6:01:00 AM
WoW! Victor, The content and imagery were so well done—great descriptions on how it feels recalling memories of your first love. I found your well-written write to be very romantic in a subtle way as well. Best wishes in the contest. Happy New Year, my friend:-)Alexis
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Date: 12/26/2020 10:14:00 PM
Your talent has not been dimmed by the passing of another Christmas day. May you witness a few more. ll the best from NZ
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Date: 12/26/2020 9:38:00 PM
Yours is a wonderful description of first love, amid beautiful natural scenery and flowers. Best wishes for the contest. :)
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Date: 12/26/2020 7:56:00 PM
Wonderful poem, Victor, a love not forgotten. Good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve
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Date: 12/26/2020 7:00:00 PM
Victor, Sweet bliss in wild jonquils, heart like a wheel. You bring it to the table, we'll all have a feast. -Richard
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Date: 12/26/2020 6:05:00 PM
A beautiful poem, Victor. We never forget our first love. This is true :)
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Date: 12/26/2020 5:47:00 AM
Lovely memory... so beautiful. A whisper of hope in the dark. Love and prayers for you. God B L E S S you
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Date: 12/26/2020 5:07:00 AM
WOW! A beautiful love story set in a charming setting. Delightful details and imagery you created, Victor, in this difficult to execute rhyme form. Much enjoyed your recall on memory lane.
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Date: 12/26/2020 4:16:00 AM
We never forget our first love Victor, they stay forever in our memories. Hope you've had an enjoyable Christmas. Tom
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Date: 12/26/2020 4:21:00 AM
I hope you did so too.

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