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A Bounce Upon the Ground

these petals unfold like thoughts of mind heavy as the weight they bear this benumbed september day in the crux beyond a seed's gather viscid drops of crimson red carried off by wings of time now daffing in the cooler air the hive of mind through torturous stings of past grounds me thickset in honey coated memories i still taste the poison lingered from your lips bitterness of venomous lies through death's astringent kiss my love for you, it tarries no greater than the buzz amidst these dandelions stomped upon your grave September 4, 2019 Where Bumbles Bounce Poetry Contest Sponsored by Craig Cornish

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Chris Green

Date: 3/12/2020 8:28:00 AM

Wow, I am back for a third time on this amazing poem. Another congratulations coming your way my friend.

Sandra Adams
Date: 3/12/2020 6:34:00 PM

thank you so much Chris :) hugs

Paul Callus

Date: 10/4/2019 8:09:00 AM

Hurt, contempt and scorn come to mind when I read this excellent poem, Sandra. The topic has truly inspired you. ~ Congratulations on a merited podium finish. ~ Regards // paul

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/4/2019 9:27:00 AM

Thank you so much Paul...yes some of Craig's and John's contests really get my muse tied in emotional writes! hugs :)

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 10/4/2019 6:36:00 AM

Congratulations and you did an amazing poem. Blessings

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/4/2019 9:26:00 AM

Thank you so much Regina :) God bless!

Caycay Jennings

Date: 10/3/2019 6:23:00 PM

You done yourself proud - congrats on your placement with this splendid write! All the best ... CayCay

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/4/2019 9:25:00 AM

Thank you CayCay... this contest inspired emotions, they seem to be my strong point :) hugs

Chris Green

Date: 10/3/2019 4:54:00 PM

Looks like I should be the one congratulating you my friend. I loved your poem.

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/3/2019 5:24:00 PM

Thank you my friend :) hugs

Constance La France

Date: 10/3/2019 4:45:00 PM

Sandra congratulations on your win in the contest with this excellent poem!

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/3/2019 5:23:00 PM

Thank you my friend :) hugs

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/21/2019 10:19:00 PM

I had to look this up Sandra. I wish we could post our original below our excerpt in the contest. Greg's last contest I spent a lot of time looking up the original poems of the entries. You should include this riveting poem below your entry after the contest is over. Sometimes anger lingers long after death. Really good Sandra! : )

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/21/2019 10:35:00 PM

Thank you so much...perhaps when his contest ends, i will add this poem to the bottom... that is a good idea my friend :) hugs

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 9/21/2019 8:49:00 AM

This is poetic magnificence, Sandra. Inked pastoral elegance of bittersweet emotions. I LOVE your muse style! May love light your path in life always. Romantic Warrior

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/21/2019 11:28:00 AM

Thank you Freddie....my muse loves deep metaphorical writes most of all... :) hugs

Hello There

Date: 9/20/2019 11:05:00 PM

For me, this was an unexpected take on this challenge, but more powerful because of it. A fav for me due to its incredible depth and sting.

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/20/2019 11:12:00 PM

Thank you...my muse often sings in metaphor... this is how she interpreted the theme...hopefully it works for me, i usually do fair in Craig's Contests :) hugs

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 9/10/2019 3:38:00 AM

Your muse is on fire and dancing. Love this one!

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/10/2019 5:28:00 AM

Aww thank you Caren my time is more limited since school went back but this theme grabbed my muse quickly :) hugs

John Hamilton

Date: 9/5/2019 2:11:00 PM

Craig will love this one, you are a phenomenon Sandy, a quickness of mind that is unrivaled. How deftly you navigated thoughts without mentioning a bee the sting is still felt. You metaphors are very potent!

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/5/2019 2:40:00 PM

Thank you John you know how I love making nature bend emotions. I was hoping the bee came through it was an easy write for me :) hugs

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/5/2019 8:58:00 AM

I like where you took this theme. Bravo for having a unique perspective. I like being surprised.

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/5/2019 9:22:00 AM

Thank you Rick...you know my muse, she likes to think in metaphorical unique ways....although i know you can relate because your poetic stories are always very unique as well :) hugs

Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/4/2019 6:50:00 PM

Devastating verse, Sandra. You added a whole new dimension to the meaning of 'bounce.' Great entry for the contest. :) gw

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/4/2019 8:21:00 PM

Thank you Gershon, some topics really spark my muse, although i don't know how unique my approach is, the first few i saw also used death to tie the bee in.... :) hugs

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/4/2019 6:46:00 PM

Emotive write! Fantastic imagery!

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/4/2019 8:17:00 PM

Thank you Kim...i love to twist nature into metaphorical emotions... hugs :)

Ann Foster

Date: 9/4/2019 5:12:00 PM

Wow, Ouch, and cheering going on. Loved it all. Ann

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/4/2019 8:16:00 PM

Thank you my friend...my muse knows how to cast away demons of past for sure :) hugs

Constance La France

Date: 9/4/2019 11:16:00 AM

Sandra, I love your take on the theme, wonderful!

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/4/2019 11:28:00 AM

Thank you my friend, i just read yours, beautiful take on it...i let my ink on your page :) hugs

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/4/2019 10:02:00 AM

Very apt metaphors, Sandy..these petals unfold like thoughts of mind..and..torturous stings of past. I felt the intensity of disdain in the ending lines..you delivered on the contest theme expertly..as always.

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/4/2019 10:12:00 AM

Thank you my friend....i was surprised this one came to me so quickly, usually i need to think about a topic a few days, this one came out right away this morning.... hugs :)

Chris Green

Date: 9/4/2019 9:50:00 AM

Sorrow blooms in dark colors in this wonderful but desperately lonely feeling poem. But sad or not, this is perfect for the contest it was written for. I could feel the deep emotions in this as I read it this morning. Wonderfully done my friend.

Sandra Adams
Date: 9/4/2019 9:53:00 AM

hard to write a poem about bees without using the word, so i went for the metaphoric picture, this is what it brought to mind, thank you for your kind comments and visits :) hugs