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A Bonfire Smokes

a bonfire smokes - -
a tiny hedgehog wakes
and scuttles out

Jack Horne for Russell’s Autumn Splendour contest, 26th August

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/20/2012 9:51:00 AM

Congratulations on your very well deserved win in Russell's "Autumn Splendor" contest Jack. Love, Carol

Skat A

Date: 9/17/2012 6:57:00 AM

Congrats with your win~jack~SKAT

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 9/17/2012 6:09:00 AM

Congrats once again Jack well done xx

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 9/16/2012 1:35:00 PM

Nice and awesome Haiku,Jack..Congrats on your superb win in this contest...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/16/2012 9:36:00 AM

Hurrah for the master of the itty bitty poems. This one rocks it, Jack. Congrats on your win.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/15/2012 11:38:00 PM

Jack.. congratulations with your awesome imagery in Russell Sivey's " Autumn Splendor " beautiful contest. Always nice to support all contest when possible~ Good night :-* PD

Robert Pettit

Date: 9/15/2012 9:18:00 PM

Congratulations on winning with this impressive haiku.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/15/2012 8:54:00 PM

CONGRATS JACK ON A GRAND FIRST PLACE WIN LUV .. HONORED TO SHARE WITH U ..

Joyce Johnson

Date: 9/15/2012 1:25:00 PM

I have never seen a hedgehog. Great haiku and win. Love, Joyce

Cynthia Alvez

Date: 9/15/2012 11:35:00 AM

How wonderful! Congratulations on this win, teasing my senses! Cynthia

Harry Horsman

Date: 8/28/2012 9:37:00 AM

Well Russell wanted something Different, he sure got it with wonderful Haiku.

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 8/27/2012 11:23:00 AM

do you have hedge hogs in your area? I have never seen one in the wild.....I see them on tv. they are cute are they prickly?

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/26/2012 7:54:00 PM

Love it. you are holding strong to the title I bestowed on you: master of the itty bitty poems!!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/26/2012 5:20:00 PM

Hi, Jack,, how are you?? this is an image of images,,, i would like to see this image reality... love it.., thank you for sharing, xox~PD

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/26/2012 2:08:00 PM

I have hedgehogs in my garden Jack, they are so cute. - Wish you luck in contest. - oxox love Anne-Lise :)

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/26/2012 2:04:00 PM

Hey Jack..well regarding the bossum and the sneeze..I think I was trying to explain that the juxtaposed fragment of the haiku will not be a surprise/ an ahHA erukea moment IF the line simply shows [cause and effect] so a blossum which makes one sneeze would not be surprising? I write cause and effect TOO! and Chas usually is the one who catches me it's very easy to forget and do this. What it does show is you are getting so good and the form we are down to 'fine tuning' ;)

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 8/26/2012 2:05:00 PM

ex: above usually only 1 action[verb] in the 2 line part..sometimes you can use a verb in the fragment but you don't have to it can be a phrase or a statement [August Wind]