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A Bonfire Smokes

a bonfire smokes - -
a tiny hedgehog wakes
and scuttles out

Jack Horne for Russell’s Autumn Splendour contest, 26th August

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Carol Sunshine Brown

September 20, 2012 at 9:51 AM

Congratulations on your very well deserved win in Russell's "Autumn Splendor" contest Jack. Love, Carol

Skat A

September 17, 2012 at 6:57 AM

Congrats with your win~jack~SKAT

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

September 17, 2012 at 6:09 AM

Congrats once again Jack well done xx

Olusegun Arowolo

September 16, 2012 at 1:35 PM

Nice and awesome Haiku,Jack..Congrats on your superb win in this contest...

Andrea Dietrich

September 16, 2012 at 9:36 AM

Hurrah for the master of the itty bitty poems. This one rocks it, Jack. Congrats on your win.

Poet Destroyer A

September 15, 2012 at 11:38 PM

Jack.. congratulations with your awesome imagery in Russell Sivey's " Autumn Splendor " beautiful contest. Always nice to support all contest when possible~ Good night :-* PD

Robert Pettit

September 15, 2012 at 9:18 PM

Congratulations on winning with this impressive haiku.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

September 15, 2012 at 8:54 PM

CONGRATS JACK ON A GRAND FIRST PLACE WIN LUV .. HONORED TO SHARE WITH U ..

Joyce Johnson

September 15, 2012 at 1:25 PM

I have never seen a hedgehog. Great haiku and win. Love, Joyce

Cynthia Alvez

September 15, 2012 at 11:35 AM

How wonderful! Congratulations on this win, teasing my senses! Cynthia

Harry Horsman

August 28, 2012 at 9:37 AM

Well Russell wanted something Different, he sure got it with wonderful Haiku.

Doris Culverhouse

August 27, 2012 at 11:23 AM

do you have hedge hogs in your area? I have never seen one in the wild.....I see them on tv. they are cute are they prickly?

Andrea Dietrich

August 26, 2012 at 7:54 PM

Love it. you are holding strong to the title I bestowed on you: master of the itty bitty poems!!

Poet Destroyer A

August 26, 2012 at 5:20 PM

Hi, Jack,, how are you?? this is an image of images,,, i would like to see this image reality... love it.., thank you for sharing, xox~PD

Anne-Lise Andresen

August 26, 2012 at 2:08 PM

I have hedgehogs in my garden Jack, they are so cute. - Wish you luck in contest. - oxox love Anne-Lise :)

Debbie Guzzi

August 26, 2012 at 2:04 PM

Hey Jack..well regarding the bossum and the sneeze..I think I was trying to explain that the juxtaposed fragment of the haiku will not be a surprise/ an ahHA erukea moment IF the line simply shows [cause and effect] so a blossum which makes one sneeze would not be surprising? I write cause and effect TOO! and Chas usually is the one who catches me it's very easy to forget and do this. What it does show is you are getting so good and the form we are down to 'fine tuning' ;)

Debbie Guzzi

August 26, 2012 at 2:05 PM

ex: above usually only 1 action[verb] in the 2 line part..sometimes you can use a verb in the fragment but you don't have to it can be a phrase or a statement [August Wind]