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Author's Notes: "A Bohemian Maze of True Evil" is a co-authored narrative poem that my two great colleagues and dear friends, Donna Loughman and Liam McDaid, and I had completed after close collaboration and direct coordination with one another. This poem was orginally completed on December 23, 2017. It's a classic fantasy-horror-mythology poem. Liam posted this selection first during early January. I wanted to go ahead now, at this point, and post it a second time for those who may have missed its first posting. We completed this poem right at the height of the Christmas-New Year's season which is why we delayed any future exposure of it until now. The tenor and tone of the poem's theme are amply expressed by the overtones of its mythology-based imagery, metaphors, and expressive symbolism. This effort also included a careful calibration of the words and nuances used in the thematic build out in each of the eleven stanzas of this poem. For readers who have an interest in poetic themes of this nature, you might find this one to be of a definite interest! (Gary Bateman - January 28, 2018) (Narrative)

Categories: dark, evil, fantasy, god, horror, metaphor, and symbolism.

A Bohemian Maze of True Evil Once so loyal and always true the gargoyles watch everything now During their stony slumbers with their careful one-eyed open view, As evil red-eyed demons rain down upon us in their dark-sprit forms, Whilst our unsuspecting mortal Earth is flush in an aura of confusion And a cloudy haze of unrepenting sin that symbolizes Lucifer’s work. Malefic shapes of Hellspawn emerge now from an unholy alliance Where venom and hate merge in a dark chamber of “The Damned,” All the while their scowling and fiendish stares pierce us deeply, And unrelentingly as they beckon our inner spirits backwards with Their tinge and terror of true malediction and feverish desire for all Things uncanny and unclean that bespeak of macabre pure. Reasons dance upon slivered tunes and silvern tongues of the demons, As they grotesquely mount the battlements with their smiles of true evil. The hideous grimace on their faces is a devilish upside-down nasty-smile, That can only be possessed by the cruelest of creatures who are charged By Lucifer himself, as a perverse group of miscreants who welcome all Misguided visitors who arrive at this unholy and forlorn earthly cavern, To cross the River Lethe into a state of oblivion from whence they shall Never return to see and bask again in the brilliance of God’s eternal light! A radiantly beautiful mermaid entices her unsuspecting victims into a Menagerie she maintains as one of Lucifer’s most favorite disciples. After entertaining each victim, she turns her deadly Medusa-like gaze On them whilst sending icy-cold shivers through their dying heartbeats, As red-eyed demons anxiously await each victim’s painful demise. There can never be any mercy shown to a visitor who unexpectedly Enters Lucifer's Kingdon of Eternal Darkness and Damnation! In this continuous unending maze of debauchery there are also other Demons who are specifically assigned to entertain the deceptive and Spawning lies of those unusual aliens who co-exist on mortal Earth With human beings and are hidden in plain open-sight among them all. These aliens, devoid of all human emotion, who show up unexpectedly Are there to capture a glimpse of Hell's eternity under the dais circle. Endlessly as death comes—there is an aura to the emotional immorality As Centaurs, Sphinxes, and Harpies transform themselves into a kind of Ghastly, ghoulish, and deliciously evil group of dancing shadow-shifters In the realm of half-lived lives whose mendacity is the main dish now, Served where the only menu choice is a one-line trick possessed by the Specter of Death, the mythic eternal Footman himself—who doubles as A most trusted prophet of imprecation and fear for Lucifer! Self-appointed Demon Guardians of this lost world seeking fulfillment Of Lucifer’s masochistic imperatives rule the roost where those shells Of former human beings who were once viewed as members of mankind Are, indeed, viewed in contempt now as depraved hosts of the once great Human Race deprived of any hope, shorn of dignity—now soulless figures At the beck and call of everything that’s truly evil in Almighty God’s Eyes. Entering this final gruesome portrait of undying hellfire and unmitigated Evil in this Bohemian Maze are monstrous apparitions from bygone times, Who come alive and take real form as Minotaurs, Echidnas, and Chimaeras. All are profoundly frightening creatures who are ready and willing to do the Horrible bidding of Lucifer at the very flick of his finger—as such creatures With this unbridled power and force of nature find their true home in this Evil maze! This ancient covenant of evil and moral deception is symbolically cast As a vicious coiled snake—who bespeaks an aura of poisonous venom And an odious degree moral depravity beyond normal description where Black Phantoms reign and freely haunt the consciousness of all mankind As it hopelessly trembles ignorantly fretful, whilst all the while being Truly unaware of the undeniable and unlimited power of Almighty God In this instance! To those who harbor their fears of the darkness, the unknown, and the Evil intentions and machinations of Lucifer and his minions, they should Understand that Almighty God’s authority and power are omniscient, and That His divine and radiant heavenly light shall forever crush the horrid Impulse of darkness to shine, and shall conquer all creatures and things Presenting themselves as truly evil, uncanny, and unclean! Amen! Deus miseratur! Deus tecum! Gary Bateman, Donna Loughman, and Liam McDaid A Collaborated Poem, Copyright © All Rights Reserved December 23, 2017 (Narrative)

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Date: 2/1/2018 7:02:00 AM
Congratulations on a very complicated and deep write Gary, Donna and Liam. The 'incubus in the guise of the Mermaid is an interesting touch. And just as all seems lost, you showed the light ...Maria
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Gary Bateman
Date: 2/1/2018 8:29:00 AM
Thanks Maria on behalf of all three of us!! Yes, for sure, in the world of fantasy and mythology one should always be careful of how the Mermaids may "appear" to be. This notion is somewhat reminiscent of Keats' faery lady in "La Belle Dame Sans Merci." God's divine light did win in the end, indeed!! Very Glad you liked our selection here!! Cheers and Best Wishes, Gary
Date: 1/29/2018 9:19:00 AM
truly a pleasure writing this with you both it sing out in its contents thank you deeply gary wishing you both a blessed week ahead
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Gary Bateman
Date: 1/29/2018 11:42:00 AM
Hello Liam Mate!! Likewise, always my pleasure to share ink with you on these specialized poetic writes. I'm very pleased too that Donna joined with us in making this narrative poem the very high quality write it is. Thanks, as always, for your mutual support on everything!! Cheers and Best Always, Gary
Date: 1/29/2018 7:23:00 AM
What an amazing three way collaboration.. this is really dark in some places and a great last stanza highlighting the importance and strength in the belief of God..
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Date: 1/29/2018 8:11:00 AM
Hello Silent!! Great to hear from you!! And thanks for your read and comment here on behalf of all three of us. And, you're certainly right, the last stanza was so very important in highlighting the rightful authority and omniscience of Almighty God in challenging and confronting the willful wickedness and evil of Lucifer and his kingdom of demonic Hellspawn. May "Light" triumph "Darkness" always!! Best Wishes, Gary
Date: 1/28/2018 10:13:00 PM
Well congratulations to all of you who truly scared the &*$%#!@ out of me! lol But a special thanks to whoever wrote the last verse. Thank you for giving me that sigh of relief. lol
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Gary Bateman
Date: 1/29/2018 8:01:00 AM
Hello Carole!! First, thanks for your read and comment on behalf of all three of us!! Well, I see we were all successful in scaring the &*$%#!@ out of you!! LOL!! If it helps, believe it or not, I was the one who actually wrote the final stanza to include the ending verse expressions used in Church Latin. I think we all decided to end this one on a positive note with God's divine light crushing Lucifer's kingdom of darkness. Not so bad in the end, eh?? LOL!! Best Wishes, Gary
Date: 1/28/2018 8:44:00 PM
Gary, thank you once again for including me in this write. It was an honor to be able to write a poem with you and Liam! Have a blessed week my friend!Donna:-)
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Gary Bateman
Date: 1/29/2018 7:51:00 AM
Thanks Donna!! I'm glad the three of us were able work together on this particular narrative write. It's always fun to do these "team writes" especially when the subject at hand is just right. It's always great when writers are able to discuss and synergize their thoughts together to great effect. This poem stands as a testimony to that statement. Always fun working with you and Liam!! I look forward to doing some more of these too in the future with you both!! Cheers and Best, Gary
Date: 1/28/2018 11:16:00 AM
WOW! I can see that it took a magnificent effort to put this together..many thanks for the background notes. You depicted the evil with great energy and I was getting worried there is no way out to defeat this evil till I got to the final stanza to find that all will be well. Kudos to all for this collaboration!
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Date: 1/28/2018 12:04:00 PM
Vijay, Thanks very much for your gracious words and comments here on behalf of Donna, Liam, and me. The work on this one had been in motion for a while dating back to the final three months or so during last year. Hopefully, everything as written and posted appears error-free!! These larger writes always have a lot of moving parts and nuances, as you can well appreciate!! Cheers and Best Wishes from Donna, Liam, and me!! Gary

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