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Shell Fragments

on a white sand beach lie scattered fragments of shells-- my unfulfilled dreams 6/28/15 For Shadow Hamilton's "Traditional Haiku" contest

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/1/2015 8:59:00 PM

Good first 2 lines Kim, you need a strong third line based in fact ex: my wedding ring falls. [somehow SHOW an unfulfilled dream-see?] Light & Love

Kim Merryman
Date: 7/1/2015 9:37:00 PM

Thanks for stopping by Debbie! I appreciate your help and knowledge of haiku. How do you keep all the different variables in mind? I'll keep on trying. I'm determined to get it right!

David Mohn

Date: 7/1/2015 7:17:00 PM

Congrats Kim...a wonderfully wistful winner

Kim Merryman
Date: 7/1/2015 9:34:00 PM

Thank you, David!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/1/2015 4:29:00 AM

Ah Kim a wonderful haiku n so is the win! Big congrats!

Kim Merryman
Date: 7/1/2015 9:33:00 PM

Thank you so much, Upma!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/1/2015 12:54:00 AM

Kim, congratulations on your Traditional Haiku win. Love LINDA

Kim Merryman
Date: 7/1/2015 9:32:00 PM

Thank you, Linda!

Viv Wigley

Date: 7/1/2015 12:37:00 AM

Lovely, lacrimose Haiku, Kim. Congrats, Viv x

Kim Merryman
Date: 7/1/2015 9:31:00 PM

Thank you, Viv! I had to look up that word in the dictionary. I'd never heard it before.

Skat A

Date: 7/1/2015 12:11:00 AM

nice win. SK

Kim Merryman
Date: 7/1/2015 9:28:00 PM

Thank you, Skat!

John Lawless

Date: 6/30/2015 7:05:00 PM

A tinge of melancholic sadness in a Haiku. congrats on the win.

Kim Merryman
Date: 7/1/2015 9:27:00 PM

Thank you, John!

Eve Roper

Date: 6/30/2015 4:55:00 PM

Kim,congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve

Kim Merryman
Date: 6/30/2015 5:56:00 PM

Thank you, Eve!

Paul Callus

Date: 6/30/2015 4:32:00 PM

Isn't this beautiful, Kim!! Congratulations on a most deserved win. All the best. // paul

Kim Merryman
Date: 6/30/2015 5:55:00 PM

Thank you so much, Paul! I'm glad you liked it.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/30/2015 1:38:00 PM

congrats, for me this was probably the most amazing one on the list.

Kim Merryman
Date: 6/30/2015 5:54:00 PM

Thank you, again, Andrea!

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 6/30/2015 1:15:00 PM

beautiful Kim congrats on 8th place hugs

Kim Merryman
Date: 6/30/2015 5:53:00 PM

Thank you for my placement, Shadow!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/29/2015 11:37:00 AM

this is pure haiku , of the metaphorical ilk. I LOVE it.

Kim Merryman
Date: 6/30/2015 5:52:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea! I'm still not totally sure what's acceptable in haiku. Your comment is very encouraging.

Ilene Bauer

Date: 6/28/2015 7:07:00 PM

nice one, kim! good luck in the contest!

Kim Merryman
Date: 6/30/2015 5:49:00 PM

Thank you, Ilene! Glad you like it.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/28/2015 12:19:00 PM

- I wish I was there, lovely haiku Kim - Good luck in contest ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Kim Merryman
Date: 6/28/2015 4:17:00 PM

Thank you, Anne-Lise! Appreciate you stopping by.