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Shell Fragments

on a white sand beach

lie scattered fragments of shells--

my unfulfilled dreams

6/28/15
For Shadow Hamilton's "Traditional Haiku" contest

Copyright © Kim Merryman | Year Posted 2015

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July 1, 2015 at 8:59 PM

Good first 2 lines Kim, you need a strong third line based in fact ex: my wedding ring falls. [somehow SHOW an unfulfilled dream-see?] Light & Love

July 1, 2015 at 9:37 PM

Thanks for stopping by Debbie! I appreciate your help and knowledge of haiku. How do you keep all the different variables in mind? I'll keep on trying. I'm determined to get it right!

July 1, 2015 at 7:17 PM

Congrats Kim...a wonderfully wistful winner

July 1, 2015 at 9:34 PM

Thank you, David!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

July 1, 2015 at 4:29 AM

Ah Kim a wonderful haiku n so is the win! Big congrats!

July 1, 2015 at 9:33 PM

Thank you so much, Upma!

Poet Destroyer A

July 1, 2015 at 12:54 AM

Kim, congratulations on your Traditional Haiku win. Love LINDA

July 1, 2015 at 9:32 PM

Thank you, Linda!

July 1, 2015 at 12:37 AM

Lovely, lacrimose Haiku, Kim. Congrats, Viv x

July 1, 2015 at 9:31 PM

Thank you, Viv! I had to look up that word in the dictionary. I'd never heard it before.

July 1, 2015 at 12:11 AM

nice win. SK

July 1, 2015 at 9:28 PM

Thank you, Skat!

June 30, 2015 at 7:05 PM

A tinge of melancholic sadness in a Haiku. congrats on the win.

July 1, 2015 at 9:27 PM

Thank you, John!

June 30, 2015 at 4:55 PM

Kim,congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve

June 30, 2015 at 5:56 PM

Thank you, Eve!

June 30, 2015 at 4:32 PM

Isn't this beautiful, Kim!! Congratulations on a most deserved win. All the best. // paul

June 30, 2015 at 5:55 PM

Thank you so much, Paul! I'm glad you liked it.

Andrea Dietrich

June 30, 2015 at 1:38 PM

congrats, for me this was probably the most amazing one on the list.

June 30, 2015 at 5:54 PM

Thank you, again, Andrea!

Shadow Hamilton

June 30, 2015 at 1:15 PM

beautiful Kim congrats on 8th place hugs

June 30, 2015 at 5:53 PM

Thank you for my placement, Shadow!

Andrea Dietrich

June 29, 2015 at 11:37 AM

this is pure haiku , of the metaphorical ilk. I LOVE it.

June 30, 2015 at 5:52 PM

Thank you, Andrea! I'm still not totally sure what's acceptable in haiku. Your comment is very encouraging.

June 28, 2015 at 7:07 PM

nice one, kim! good luck in the contest!

June 30, 2015 at 5:49 PM

Thank you, Ilene! Glad you like it.

Anne-Lise Andresen

June 28, 2015 at 12:19 PM

- I wish I was there, lovely haiku Kim - Good luck in contest ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

June 28, 2015 at 4:17 PM

Thank you, Anne-Lise! Appreciate you stopping by.

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