Olive

Swirling my slurred thots around and ‘round and ‘round with my miniature blue plastic sword I’ve pierced my brain All green and stuffed with blue cheese Oh, I’ll live Oh, live Olive

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Gregory Golden

Date: 12/28/2024 9:25:00 PM

The "Olive" poem swirls around in my head like a carousel. Yeah, baby, naughty, naughty, because I like it a lot! Can I please have some more anchovies with the olives on top? Indeed, the wordplay is superb.

Susan Ashley

Date: 12/28/2024 10:49:00 AM

Dear Benjamin, your poem is ingenious! Love the swirl of your "slurred thots", "around and ‘round and ‘round" down to the last three lines.. clever captivation! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Paige Hind

Date: 12/16/2024 1:46:00 PM

Interesting - this is a cool write

Matthew Herfurth

Date: 12/8/2024 7:25:00 PM

Great use of words that create great imagery.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/5/2024 12:15:00 PM

very creative! I hate AI.

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/5/2024 8:20:00 AM

The amazing poem tackles the chaotic and surreal nature of thinking and awareness, mixing aspects of joy and absurdity, as expressed in the imagery of a "miniature blue plastic sword" and "blue cheese."You are really brilliant and capable of writing on any topic. Thank you for commenting on my page.