Timothy Hicks Poet Rhyme

8 Minutes

The sunset's just light leaving here
8 minutes just to watch it disappear
Just a ball falling into the mouth of the sea
But when I'm with you and you are with me
It's like closed eyes seeing for the first time
We're both getting older and wasting time

The sunset's like the light of the day
8 minutes just to watch it fade away
Though it always comes around
As soft as love without a sound
A collage of colors raging to fill the sky
Like a beauty always changing, destined to die

It makes me think of me and you
Live and learn and begin anew

The sunset's like the moon driven tide
8 minutes just to sit and enjoy the ride

Low to the ground hoping to be found
The sunset will always be just a sunset
Without love in your heart to let it
Always come back around



For Gail Angel Doyle's
A Ripple In Time Contest



NOTE: It takes approximately 8 minutes for the light from the sun to reach our eyes. When you see the sunset it actually set 8 minutes before.

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Kim Van Breda May 30, 2013 at 12:14 PM Man.. I love this Tim... you write in a true poetic style... it takes one to the moment and emotion. xx Timothy Hicks May 30, 2013 at 11:17 PM I really need to proofread when I comment. Always never cease? That makes no sense! Supposed to just be, "never cease"... Timothy Hicks May 30, 2013 at 11:16 PM Your comments always never cease to bring a smile to my face (or maybe it's your profile pic that does that to me... smiling is contagious!). I wrote this one when I was trying to get sleep actually! It started to bug me so much that I actually went out of bed, turned on the computer, and sent an email to myself! Oh the things I do for writing's sake... lol.

Caleah Buil May 17, 2013 at 9:29 AM Oh, I loved it! You continue to impress me with your poetry, as usual. This was beautiful to me as it just makes me think of how time goes, and in the 8 minutes where you enjoy that great moment, it's even better when you share it with someone you love for the rest of your life. Lovely piece! Timothy Hicks May 17, 2013 at 2:57 PM I came up with this one in the middle of the night... I was trying really hard to asleep, but I knew I wouldn't remember it the next morning... so I ran to my computer and sent an email to myself... worked out nicely! Always nice to bring a smile... thanks :)

Juli- Michelle May 1, 2013 at 12:37 PM Loved it, and very interesting Timothy Hicks May 2, 2013 at 1:22 AM Thanks Juli!

Karen Anglesey April 29, 2013 at 1:15 PM From the depths of a writer's heart, thoughtful, gentle and pure. Timothy Hicks April 29, 2013 at 7:45 PM Thanks again Karen... it is much appreciated!

Painted Hunter April 29, 2013 at 6:40 AM Great idea, Timothy...it should do very well in the contest. Its a good one for sure. Timothy Hicks April 29, 2013 at 10:34 AM Your supports means a lot to me! I'm trying my best to enter more contests and expand...

Eileen Manassian April 28, 2013 at 8:13 PM Sunrise and sunsets....magical moments of time! Wonderful theme for this contest, Timothy. There is beauty in every line! As there should be...for you've connected it to love! ;) Hugs and good luck! Timothy Hicks April 29, 2013 at 12:00 AM Thanks Eileen... you are always so supportive!

Anne-Lise Andresen April 28, 2013 at 12:00 PM - But it may be 8 wonderful minutes ..... - Without love in your heart you will not see how gorgeous sunset is - Good luck in contest Timothy! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :) Timothy Hicks April 29, 2013 at 12:00 AM Yes... 8 minutes is a short amount of time. Don't waste it! Hope you have a great rest of your week, Anne!

Richard Lamoureux April 28, 2013 at 8:06 AM I love the poem but for me the very first line feels awkward I had to read it over several times and it distracted me from the rest of the poem. Timothy Hicks April 28, 2013 at 8:54 AM I wrote this a few years back, late into the night, and I've always thought there was something amiss about it. I'll see what I can do about that first line, and will let you know if I come up with something :)

Andrea Dietrich April 28, 2013 at 1:46 AM comes around as soft as love without a sound. that was SO lovely!! This is a sweet poem! I hope I can think up something as wonderful for this contest!! Timothy Hicks April 28, 2013 at 8:52 AM Aww you're too kind.