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5 - 3 Poetry - the Mountain

THE MOUNTAIN ~~~~~~~~~~~~ The mountain shimmers. Morning sun. A snowdrift glimmers. Shadow fun. As the sun rises, a strong wind blows in surprises! Warm air kind. No wind chill, thawing. Snow melting. Avalanche warning! All daunting. Those that did not heed? All now dead! How many hearts bleed? “Sorries”, said.! The mountain cares not! Day after? Frozen all forgot. New laughter! Life moves on, new day. Piste? Perfect! Skiers, ski away, None object! The mountain shimmers. Morning sun. A snowdrift glimmers. Shadow fun. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
5-3 Definition: A poem consisting of an odd number of quatrains (16 lines or more) I have no idea if this form has been otherwise named if you know please advise. Alternating lines of 5 and 3 syllables, where lines 1 and 3consist of  an IAMB and an ANAPEST da-DUM da-DUM-da, lines 2 and 4 consist of a DACTYL DUM-da-DUM Each stanza uses individual rhyme pattern –abab where the b-rhymes are always feminine rhyme The first stanza is a refrain, repeated as the final stanza.

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Date: 2/18/2018 6:58:00 PM
So cool how you are playing around with rhyme and meter, Mick. It's the fun part of poetry that the free versers miss out on.
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Date: 2/18/2018 10:17:00 PM
Andrea, Thanks, and yes I am having great fun, and I love the challenge! Love for some feedback on the 'Trick Poetry', albeit I see an error in it every time a read it, but hey I love it! Mick https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/trick_poetry_-_poem_-_nature_the_artist_995344 ..... https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/trick_poetry_-_nature_the_artist_2_995571

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