5 - 3 Poetry - the Mountain
THE MOUNTAIN
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The mountain shimmers.
Morning sun.
A snowdrift glimmers.
Shadow fun.
As the sun rises,
a strong wind
blows in surprises!
Warm air kind.
No wind chill, thawing.
Snow melting.
Avalanche warning!
All daunting.
Those that did not heed?
All now dead!
How many hearts bleed?
“Sorries”, said.!
The mountain cares not!
Day after?
Frozen all forgot.
New laughter!
Life moves on, new day.
Piste? Perfect!
Skiers, ski away,
None object!
The mountain shimmers.
Morning sun.
A snowdrift glimmers.
Shadow fun.
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5-3 Definition:
A poem consisting of an odd number of quatrains (16 lines or more)
I have no idea if this form has been otherwise named if you know please advise.
Alternating lines of 5 and 3 syllables, where lines 1 and 3consist of an IAMB and an ANAPEST da-DUM da-DUM-da, lines 2 and 4 consist of a DACTYL
DUM-da-DUM
Each stanza uses individual rhyme pattern –abab
where the b-rhymes are always feminine rhyme
The first stanza is a refrain, repeated as the final stanza.
Copyright © Mick Talbot | Year Posted 2018
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