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I look upon the earth And see the beauty of it all I look upon the nightsky And count the stars twinkling up high I imagine the way the silhouettes sigh

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Date: 10/6/2008 11:24:00 AM

Nice use of this form. I like the light feeling of the tanka. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us and for your kind words regarding my poem. Keep on writing. Karen

Syed Amaan Ahmad

Date: 9/29/2008 5:21:00 AM

brilliant way of expressing :)

Deneen White

Date: 9/28/2008 3:55:00 PM

nice peaceful write, i can imagine myself looking at the staes, take care D-ncye

Joseph Spence Sr

Date: 9/28/2008 11:22:00 AM

This is excellent. I like your use of figurative language and the descriptiveness of the piece. The imagery is very relaxing. This reminds me of relaxing on the beach and counting the stars. Great job! ~Joseph

Brian Strand

Date: 9/26/2008 12:49:00 AM

Beautiful image in the last line Fathima'I imagine the way the silhouettes sigh'Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments

James Foulk

Date: 9/25/2008 12:03:00 PM

liked your title, a very well done piece of work.

Laura Mckenzie

Date: 9/25/2008 10:42:00 AM

Well done Tanka! Laura :)

Sharon Winter

Date: 9/25/2008 7:41:00 AM

Clever title! Beautiful write. Imagery is dazzling. Love, Shar