Sandra Adams Poet Rhyme

17 Is the Lucky Number

idyllic fake smile, an empath death holds
a supine body twisted in the folds
lamenting memories seep through the pain
where incidental weakness falls like rain
ten fold the weeping willow tree's own bane
veneration seeps with crimson tinged night
as her aura blends with the fading light



july 15, 2019

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Jude Herrick September 13, 2019 at 11:47 PM Awesome poem! I especially enjoyed the last line.

Chris Green August 22, 2019 at 3:48 PM It appears I missed a lot while I was away. It seems congrats are in order but this poem was a winner in my eyes regardless of any contest. Wonderfully written. Sandra Adams August 22, 2019 at 4:10 PM Thank you Chris... this was a tough contest...we only had so many lines to fit the given words, rhyme is more difficult for me to begin with, but sometimes i like to challenge my muse :) hugs

Ralph Sergi August 17, 2019 at 8:25 AM A poem worthy of a first place. Congratulations, Sandra! Sandra Adams August 17, 2019 at 8:38 AM Thank you Ralph :) hugs

Connie Marcum Wong August 8, 2019 at 11:47 PM Wow! I don't think this could have been written any better Sandra! You used these necessary words like a virtuoso plays his Stradivarius! I am impressed enough with this poem to put it straight into my Faves! Congratulations on your deserving First Place win! : ) xxoo Sandra Adams August 9, 2019 at 7:39 AM Thank you Connie. This was a tough challenge and I was happy with the way it turned out :) hugs

Jeanne Mcgee August 5, 2019 at 8:49 AM where incidental weakness falls like rain...what a beautiful line. Congrats on your beautiful win. Sandra Adams August 9, 2019 at 7:38 AM Thank you Jeanne :) hugs

Beautiful Scars August 4, 2019 at 2:50 PM great poem, loved it...thank you for your participation and congratulations on your win. :)-luloo Sandra Adams August 4, 2019 at 3:14 PM Thank you for hosting the contest and finding my poem worthy of a win....it was a good contest, one that made the writer think within the box....sometimes good challenges like this ink some great poems! :) hugs

Jennifer Proxenos July 19, 2019 at 1:46 PM HI sandra, an excellent write and a very good contender for the contest - well penned - holding thumbs, an aroma of win win win in the air! Hugs, Jennifer. Sandra Adams July 28, 2019 at 6:36 PM Thank you Jennifer, i believe since my write Lu Loo changed the rules slightly but i liked the way this turned out so didn't attempt to change it :) hugs

John Gondolf July 16, 2019 at 8:29 AM Nicely done, Sandy. I really struggled with the constraints of this contest and finally decided to pass. Best of luck my friend. John Sandra Adams July 16, 2019 at 8:39 AM Thanks John it was definitely one of the hardest contests but my muse likes to be challenged so I gave it a whirl. Hugs :)

Caren Krutsinger July 15, 2019 at 2:43 PM Sandra, you did a great job. I thought to myself "hey, these words sound familiar." Then I remembered this word list. Not easy to do in such a limited line count. I had trouble eliminating until I went from 8 to 7 lines. Good luck in the contest! Sandra Adams July 15, 2019 at 9:23 PM Thank you Caren, I agree it was tough, I set out to attempt it the other day and got a great sonnet out of it today my muse was on the same page with me :) hugs

John Hamilton July 15, 2019 at 12:23 PM Great word selection, as always a great red from you! Sandra Adams July 15, 2019 at 12:56 PM Thank you John, this was a very challenging write to use all the words in 7 lines of 10 syllables that rhymes :) hugs