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11:23 PM

11.23pm Frothy clouds and floating waves, On the rooftop while I stargaze. 11.24pm Though my heart is stained with darkness, That's where you'll find the brightest stars.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 7/26/2016 7:41:00 AM
both are beautiful... I like the second one the most...
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Julia Ho
Date: 7/26/2016 9:17:00 AM
Thank you! ^^
Date: 7/26/2016 7:15:00 AM
So poetic...nice
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Julia Ho
Date: 7/26/2016 9:17:00 AM
Thanks! ^^
Date: 7/25/2016 8:46:00 PM
I really like these Julia...Can I make a small suggestion?...try removing while in the last line of the first one...I don't think it is necessary.
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Julia Ho
Date: 7/26/2016 9:33:00 AM
Thanks for the suggestion! I really like it too if the word is removed as it gives another feeling and meaning to it, but I intend it to flow while it's being read..not trying to create two separate scenes in the stanza. :)
Date: 7/25/2016 7:09:00 AM
beautiful beyond ...
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Julia Ho
Date: 7/25/2016 7:17:00 AM
Thank you so much! It's my first time writing in an unusual style and I'm soooo glad that you liked it :)