1-21-10 Too Younge For This

Dietrick, ive always had to worry over when you would die
but we both thought it would be a suicide
both of us now see we were fooled
for you wont die lying in your own blood pool
youll die just like a man, though your only 18 years old
but cancer is taking you, and all the dreams you secretly hold
if you go through with the surgery, the chance of having children is slim to none
but this is one thing that can never be undone
you tell me your not going, that gives you a month to live
come see me, i want to tell you, just give me one last kiss
i love you, and i beg you to defeat your sickness
cancer cant take you away from me yet, your too younge for this.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 4/15/2010 2:40:00 PM
A very deep write, i felt for this, this was a truely sad write... and i'm sorry... wish him the best
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Date: 1/30/2010 2:04:00 PM
HUGS..so sad..so sad! Light & Love
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Date: 1/25/2010 2:34:00 PM
This is heart wrenching, sad!
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Date: 1/22/2010 9:31:00 AM
Wow. Um... I don't really know what to say here Rain.
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Date: 1/22/2010 6:52:00 AM
a very deep and sad write people can never be replaced. thats why we must cheerish them this is a exelent write sad but a great write Rain Keep writting Your friend Ken
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Date: 1/22/2010 2:59:00 AM
A very sad but excellent write. I feel your desire to keep this young man alive. We pray for death to stay away from his door.
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