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03- 02- 2011

Leo living large Lion lying in his lair Big belly bloated Zebra and Zebu Warily watching, worried Ready to run Fatigued full feline Snoozes in the savannah Animals amble For Chris D. "Aechtner's Alliterative" Haiku contest.

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Date: 4/9/2011 8:02:00 PM
great write, enjoyed reading. thank you for reading if ever there was and for your comment
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Date: 3/19/2011 5:29:00 PM
things which make you go "hmmm" a new contest...? remember hon no, periods ever, I think you are doing very well with the cut to the 3rd line!! just NO comma either, no cap's Light & Love always
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Date: 3/19/2011 11:55:00 AM
What a violent place for animals Africa is. Good luck in the contest. Love, Dave
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Date: 3/16/2011 11:01:00 AM
I am stopping by today to say a special Thank You for your kind comments Robert. Have a wonderful day. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/8/2011 3:57:00 PM
Good luck in the contest...Reads like a winner..Sara
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Date: 3/5/2011 10:13:00 PM
Oh, I read this twice and suddenly got the little tale it was telling. What a cute story it is. And the animals get to amble!! Delightful, Robert.
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Date: 3/5/2011 8:28:00 PM
I like this one Robert. Thank you for your nice comments. Love, Joyce
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Date: 3/3/2011 10:06:00 AM
I am enjoying reading the many diverse poems written by the many wonderful poets writing and sharing here at PoetrySoup today. I am happy that yours was among the ones I had the pleasure to read Robert. The best to you in the contest. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/3/2011 8:21:00 AM
Wow! You certainly mastered the alliteration form and employed it vividly to create unique and creative images in your haiku, Robert. Tried to do this one, but couldn't. Wishing you success in Chris's contest! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 3/3/2011 5:51:00 AM
Hey Robert! T'would be the ideal time for other animals to amble, when the "Fatigued...feline..is full"! Good luck with this write in the contest! The haiku can be tricky, but writing more that can stick together, while holding their own, is an amazing art. Best to you, Mikki
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Date: 3/3/2011 1:36:00 AM
A truly beautiful image of the savannah. All the best for the contest.
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Date: 3/3/2011 1:14:00 AM
good luck with ths wonderful entry, Harry
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Date: 3/2/2011 6:04:00 PM
love the theme, good luck in the contest
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