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03- 02- 2011

Leo living large Lion lying in his lair Big belly bloated Zebra and Zebu Warily watching, worried Ready to run Fatigued full feline Snoozes in the savannah Animals amble For Chris D. "Aechtner's Alliterative" Haiku contest.

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James Foulk

Date: 4/9/2011 8:02:00 PM

great write, enjoyed reading. thank you for reading if ever there was and for your comment

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/19/2011 5:29:00 PM

things which make you go "hmmm" a new contest...? remember hon no, periods ever, I think you are doing very well with the cut to the 3rd line!! just NO comma either, no cap's Light & Love always

Daver Austin

Date: 3/19/2011 11:55:00 AM

What a violent place for animals Africa is. Good luck in the contest. Love, Dave

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 3/16/2011 11:01:00 AM

I am stopping by today to say a special Thank You for your kind comments Robert. Have a wonderful day. Love, Carol

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/8/2011 3:57:00 PM

Good luck in the contest...Reads like a winner..Sara

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/5/2011 10:13:00 PM

Oh, I read this twice and suddenly got the little tale it was telling. What a cute story it is. And the animals get to amble!! Delightful, Robert.

Joyce Johnson

Date: 3/5/2011 8:28:00 PM

I like this one Robert. Thank you for your nice comments. Love, Joyce

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 3/3/2011 10:06:00 AM

I am enjoying reading the many diverse poems written by the many wonderful poets writing and sharing here at PoetrySoup today. I am happy that yours was among the ones I had the pleasure to read Robert. The best to you in the contest. Love, Carol

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/3/2011 8:21:00 AM

Wow! You certainly mastered the alliteration form and employed it vividly to create unique and creative images in your haiku, Robert. Tried to do this one, but couldn't. Wishing you success in Chris's contest! Love, Carolyn

Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 3/3/2011 5:51:00 AM

Hey Robert! T'would be the ideal time for other animals to amble, when the "Fatigued...feline..is full"! Good luck with this write in the contest! The haiku can be tricky, but writing more that can stick together, while holding their own, is an amazing art. Best to you, Mikki

Tahera Mannan

Date: 3/3/2011 1:36:00 AM

A truly beautiful image of the savannah. All the best for the contest.

Harry Horsman

Date: 3/3/2011 1:14:00 AM

good luck with ths wonderful entry, Harry

Francine Roberts

Date: 3/2/2011 6:04:00 PM

love the theme, good luck in the contest