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- When the Backpack Feels Heavy -

Hold on tight A journey begins Not in the crowded city streets A journey of high mountains as close to heaven that you think you can catch the stars Pack your backpack with sad thoughts Upwards ... the bag is heavy I will hold you in your hand Stop ... take a deep breath Your journey has begun Proud high mountains suddenly makes the backpack a little lighter Follow your feet forward The air is crisp and fresh Even if you are tired Lower your shoulders I'll teach you to dance on the sparkling snow Our goal is the top The backpack feels lighter Do not give up - we will reach our peak Heavy thoughts erased Abrasions and tired feet Satisfaction - a major force The goal is reached ... you won Dance in the sparkling snow ... catch your star The backpack is empty The whole world is at your feet 21.05.2014 A-L Andresen :) Copyright © All Rights Reserved

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Shaun Herron

Date: 10/19/2014 6:45:00 PM

Excellent commentary on climbing mountains. I love how you contrast the emotional build of the journey against how heavy the pack feels. It is a true interpretation of the emotional perception.

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 10/20/2014 11:20:00 AM

- Hi Shaun, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 8/2/2014 6:14:00 PM

SEVEN and added to my short list of faves!!!!!!!!!!!!

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/3/2014 5:50:00 AM

- Highly appreciate to come to your fav. list, JSL - Thank you !!!

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 8/2/2014 6:13:00 PM

"as close to heaven that you think you can catch the stars "-Your poetry is better than my therapist!~ THis is my favorite so far! PRISTENE VOYAGE!

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 8/3/2014 5:47:00 AM

- Your therapist costs a lot of money ...... my poems are free :)))) - JSL, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Muhereza Rodgers Roger

Date: 6/19/2014 3:18:00 PM

Do have a scar? That's what i mean each of your poems i read leaves one on me!!

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 6/20/2014 7:56:00 AM

- Everyone has some content in their "backpack" - Life is not "painted in pink" - R.R. thanks for visiting and comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Ettie Christian-Bowling

Date: 6/15/2014 1:06:00 PM

Lovely write 8-)-Love Ettie

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 6/15/2014 1:19:00 PM

- Hi Ettie, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Malkavian Raven

Date: 6/10/2014 5:14:00 PM

Great message written here: Never give up, especially on yourself and if need be, ask for help from loved ones around you. Very nice piece, Anne. hugz - Raven

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 6/11/2014 11:30:00 AM

- You're absolutely right ......Never give up .... !!! - Raven, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Harry Horsman

Date: 6/10/2014 10:43:00 AM

I read so much love in this poem,

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 6/10/2014 11:59:00 AM

- My friend Harry, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Pace Ink-U-Script

Date: 6/7/2014 6:13:00 PM

This is an amazing write....I truly love the way you penned this. Beautifully done!!!

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 6/8/2014 2:53:00 PM

- Pace Ink-U, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Bl Devnath

Date: 6/5/2014 10:51:00 AM

Hi! my lovely friend, it's a magical poem boosting up to go high with optimistic view. Your sensational pen talks nicely. I am stopping by..... here. My one of favorite poems indeed. Loved always, bl

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 6/8/2014 2:52:00 PM

- Dear friend bl, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 6/5/2014 6:25:00 AM

Wonderful. The world is so much a lighter nicer place without those worries.

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 6/8/2014 2:51:00 PM

- Scott, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Robert Lindley

Date: 6/4/2014 8:36:00 PM

Just reading that delight made my backpack lighter my friend!! Fantastic write.. BBBravo!!!!!

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 6/8/2014 2:50:00 PM

- Hi Robert my friend, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Deborah Shiells

Date: 5/31/2014 7:25:00 AM

Hi Anne Lise, This was such a sweet and peaceful write to read. It reminded me of when I used to ski. I loved the emphasis of lighter and no load at all analogy, the imagery was perfect. Thanks for sharing this write with us. Thanks so much for your visits and kind words. Love and Peace, Deborah

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 5/31/2014 7:33:00 AM

- Hi Deborah, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus

Date: 5/30/2014 12:53:00 PM

Love how that backpack keeps getting lighter!! All worries and problems vanish once our goal is attained. /x/ paul

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 5/30/2014 12:58:00 PM

- Yes, we have to struggle a little to get a lighter "backpack" :) - Paul, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/29/2014 6:04:00 AM

Dear Anne Lise, All we need to do is go out and enjoy nature to lighten our "backpacks." You really have a beautiful message in this creative write, filled with awesome images on you "journey." Love, Carolyn

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 5/29/2014 10:56:00 AM

- Carolyn, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Arlene Smith

Date: 5/28/2014 1:26:00 PM

Very encouraging.. Thank you for this write, Anne..Arlene..

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 5/28/2014 1:36:00 PM

- Arlene, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Richard Ferry

Date: 5/28/2014 9:49:00 AM

Thanks for helping me lighten the load..........rick

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 5/28/2014 12:31:00 PM

- Richard, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Matthew Anish

Date: 5/27/2014 10:04:00 PM

Reminds me of the song "Rocky Mountain High" by John Denver, Have you ever climbed a mountain? I went to the top of Pikes Peak in Colorado - but we drove to the top. Great words! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 5/28/2014 2:22:00 AM

- I have never climbed in the really BIG mountains, Matthew :) - thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Justin Bordner

Date: 5/27/2014 7:05:00 PM

The voice of a Gaurdian Angel, and every mountain has a prize. This sweet motivational poem elicits these happy thoughts Anne, thank you. I really like your extended style. I'll go star catching now. J.A.B.

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 5/28/2014 2:20:00 AM

-Justin, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Ken Carroll

Date: 5/27/2014 1:50:00 PM

Some nice sentiments in this one Anne!

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 5/28/2014 2:19:00 AM

-Ken, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/27/2014 9:47:00 AM

may you journey light, anne... a sweet hello to you.. huggs

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 5/27/2014 1:03:00 PM

- huggs, to you :)))

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 5/27/2014 6:52:00 AM

Excellent. Well crafted poem. Enjoyed reading it. Tfs

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 5/27/2014 8:11:00 AM

- Ravi my friend, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Keith O.J. Hunt

Date: 5/26/2014 12:50:00 PM

Beautiful write Anne! I too am for venturing and I took up bird watching not too long ago, Always, Keith ;-)

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 5/26/2014 1:29:00 PM

-Keith, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Carl Fraser

Date: 5/26/2014 7:36:00 AM

A very uplifting and inspiational poem Anne, I needed this today as well, blessings,Carl

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 5/26/2014 7:40:00 AM

Thanks for visiting, Carl .... always enjoyable ! - My warmest thoughts go to you. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/26/2014 7:28:00 AM

on a suddenly rainy hour, tjis uplifgts me, anne.. missed posting on yopur page; my computer has been so slow for days.. huggs!

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 5/26/2014 7:33:00 AM

- Missed your sweet smile, dear friend Nette - Thanks for visiting .... always enjoyable ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Peggy Caulfield

Date: 5/25/2014 2:20:00 PM

Lovely poem.

Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 5/25/2014 2:34:00 PM

- Peggy, thanks for visiting and nice comments on my poem: - When The Backpack Feels Heavy - oxox // Anne-Lise :)