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---Pink-Cheeked Baby

pink-cheeked baby watches the summer storm silver rattles

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/7/2012 3:29:00 PM

this is beautiful...pd

Jack Horne

Date: 11/11/2011 2:08:00 PM

What a sweet haiku - I think I'm beginning to see what haiku's about. I'm very glad you think I'm improving : )

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 4/22/2011 5:00:00 PM

this is adorable, Debbie-- and read your comment below-- how cool to relate the rattle to lightning & thunder! silver sky & thunder :D very nice & thank you fro all your inspiring comments-- :D hugs your way & Happy Easter )

James Foulk

Date: 4/22/2011 11:49:00 AM

Debbie this was a great Haiku, loved the way you wrote it.

Soulfire

Date: 4/21/2011 9:55:00 PM

Hi Debbie. Love the image of the baby watching the sky light up. I'm curious, what syllable/mora patterns are OK when it's not a 5/7/5 Haiku? Many thanks for any help in trying to understand this. ~ Soulfire ~

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/21/2011 9:32:00 PM

Such a cute image of the baby, Deb. Nice work! Love, Carolyn

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/21/2011 8:21:00 PM

nice D.G.. cute,..p.d.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/21/2011 7:59:00 PM

Hoping will be seeing a pink cheeked baby this Thanksgiving Day Debbie.. found out it will be a little girl..with silver rattles too..oh boy..lovely Haiku fitting for me tonight...luv..

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 4/21/2011 7:16:00 PM

yes I was hoping you would see and hear the rattle as a indicator that there was lightening :)

Brenda Atry

Date: 4/21/2011 5:33:00 PM

Wonderful..Are the silver ratles the lighting bolts? Brenda Atry

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/21/2011 2:53:00 PM

Cool juxtapositioning!!

James Foulk

Date: 4/21/2011 1:42:00 PM

a beautiful Haiku, enjoyed it.