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old bayonet—
I wonder if one touched
my grandfather’s body






June 12, 2017

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FJ Thomas

Date: 12/29/2020 3:00:00 PM

Hi Nikko! Hope everything is okay over there :) ~Flo

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/1/2018 5:03:00 PM

Ahhh, your last poem was almost a year ago, Nikko. GET BUSY NOW!!! Happy Easter and April Fool's Day!!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/21/2017 2:48:00 PM

Chilling Nikko. War is hell hugs, Connie

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/20/2017 11:45:00 PM

this is superb, Nikko!!! I guess more subjective, so good thing you used that other one. No soupmail any more?

Keith O.J. Hunt

Date: 6/13/2017 4:26:00 PM

Wow, this is really different, a book might be written on this premise, really enjoyed!:-)

Charlie Smith

Date: 6/13/2017 11:28:00 AM

Congratulations KP for POTD honors, well done...

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 6/13/2017 10:01:00 AM

Very thought provoking poem, kP. Kudos on POTD. Love always.

Sunlite Wanter

Date: 6/13/2017 9:41:00 AM

What an emotional punch! Congratulations!

Akkina Downing

Date: 6/13/2017 9:24:00 AM

Congrats on your awesome potd :)

Eve Roper

Date: 6/13/2017 9:14:00 AM

Wow,, this one took me by surprise. Very good.. congratulations on POTD very well deserved ~*

Dean Wood

Date: 6/13/2017 8:48:00 AM

I like this Nikko. Congratulations on POTD honors. - Dean

Sunita U.D Palawon

Date: 6/13/2017 4:36:00 AM

So short and direct. Enjoyed this one. Congrats on the POTD. :)

Maria Williams

Date: 6/13/2017 4:17:00 AM

Congratulations on POTD. Love your Haiku...Maria

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/13/2017 3:55:00 AM

- Playful haiku, well done Nikko :) - Congratulations on yours p.o.t.d. :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 6/11/2017 8:33:00 AM

noooo dear nikko! i picked up totally that this was a sombre moment; i don't think it needs to be changed!

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 6/11/2017 8:01:00 PM

Thank you, Charlotte for your thoughts :)! You made me smile with your no.That is great that you picked up the somber mood, but yes, I'm still really not sure if this is the one I'll enter. Eep.

Tim Smith

Date: 6/11/2017 6:55:00 AM

Awesome image Nikko. Sounds like a lazy Sunday morning.

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 6/11/2017 7:28:00 PM

Hi again Tim :) that is cool with me if somehow reading this brought you somewhere else... and yes, I was going for a different kind of jolt and I admit, I was playing around with that 2nd line, and I'm thinking it still borders on the vague side, of what I was trying to envision in my head. With that said, your initial thoughts do make me want to tackle a lighter haiku... thanks again Tim :)

Tim Smith
Date: 6/11/2017 7:38:00 AM

It is probably just me fantasizing over my morning jolt. I get it now. The second line is great with line lying flat.

Kabuteng P.Ink K.
Date: 6/11/2017 7:11:00 AM

Hi Tim :) Thank you for passing by and I find your interpretation refreshing... I was going for a more somber/disturbing feel to this, oops methinks I have to work on this more & this might be too vague...

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