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old bayonet— I wonder if one touched my grandfather’s body June 12, 2017

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Date: 12/29/2020 3:00:00 PM
Hi Nikko! Hope everything is okay over there :) ~Flo
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Date: 4/1/2018 5:03:00 PM
Ahhh, your last poem was almost a year ago, Nikko. GET BUSY NOW!!! Happy Easter and April Fool's Day!!
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Date: 6/21/2017 2:48:00 PM
Chilling Nikko. War is hell hugs, Connie
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Date: 6/20/2017 11:45:00 PM
this is superb, Nikko!!! I guess more subjective, so good thing you used that other one. No soupmail any more?
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Date: 6/13/2017 4:26:00 PM
Wow, this is really different, a book might be written on this premise, really enjoyed!:-)
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Date: 6/13/2017 11:28:00 AM
Congratulations KP for POTD honors, well done...
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Date: 6/13/2017 10:01:00 AM
Very thought provoking poem, kP. Kudos on POTD. Love always.
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Date: 6/13/2017 9:41:00 AM
What an emotional punch! Congratulations!
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Date: 6/13/2017 9:24:00 AM
Congrats on your awesome potd :)
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Date: 6/13/2017 9:14:00 AM
Wow,, this one took me by surprise. Very good.. congratulations on POTD very well deserved ~*
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Date: 6/13/2017 8:48:00 AM
I like this Nikko. Congratulations on POTD honors. - Dean
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Date: 6/13/2017 4:36:00 AM
So short and direct. Enjoyed this one. Congrats on the POTD. :)
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Date: 6/13/2017 4:17:00 AM
Congratulations on POTD. Love your Haiku...Maria
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Date: 6/13/2017 3:55:00 AM
- Playful haiku, well done Nikko :) - Congratulations on yours p.o.t.d. :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 6/11/2017 8:33:00 AM
noooo dear nikko! i picked up totally that this was a sombre moment; i don't think it needs to be changed!
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kabuteng P.iNk k.
Date: 6/11/2017 8:01:00 PM
Thank you, Charlotte for your thoughts :)! You made me smile with your no.That is great that you picked up the somber mood, but yes, I'm still really not sure if this is the one I'll enter. Eep.
Date: 6/11/2017 6:55:00 AM
Awesome image Nikko. Sounds like a lazy Sunday morning.
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kabuteng P.iNk k.
Date: 6/11/2017 7:28:00 PM
Hi again Tim :) that is cool with me if somehow reading this brought you somewhere else... and yes, I was going for a different kind of jolt and I admit, I was playing around with that 2nd line, and I'm thinking it still borders on the vague side, of what I was trying to envision in my head. With that said, your initial thoughts do make me want to tackle a lighter haiku... thanks again Tim :)
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Tim Smith
Date: 6/11/2017 7:38:00 AM
It is probably just me fantasizing over my morning jolt. I get it now. The second line is great with line lying flat.
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kabuteng P.iNk k.
Date: 6/11/2017 7:11:00 AM
Hi Tim :) Thank you for passing by and I find your interpretation refreshing... I was going for a more somber/disturbing feel to this, oops methinks I have to work on this more & this might be too vague...