-----Night Train------ -Reverse Poem-

Adrift is smoke, that rises into the shape of a question mark...
Blurring the vacant night, with a ceremonial arc

Tomorrow, under a different sky, in a brand new way
I will wake up to a different sun, and to a wistful song of yesterday

'Though, I cannot find a star, through the drowning dredge of rain
Tonight the moon, left behind, wears a bitter frown of blame

Like a crying mother calling, with a voice of great devotion
A whistle's wailing sadness, resounds my own emotions

With tear-stained eyes, I witness the reflection
In view from where my heart once lived, a dismal day's rejection

I feel the rumble of the wheels, and a tumble of my heart
With a tremble, as the landscape is swallowed by the dark

The snake-like chain bends eastward into constellation courage
With strange misshapen shadows, streaking illuminated passage

Raindrops mimic my own heart, upon the window glass
Spilling over imprints of all the futile questions asked

I find my throat is swollen, and my will too worn to speak
Beside me, rudely flaunting, is a taunting, empty seat

Like a sickle for harvesting a lonely star…
Smoke sketches the sky with the shape of a question mark...




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Submitted for Craig Cornish's Contest
8/13/13

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 8/29/2013 11:22:00 PM
tremendous work that clearly deserves a top win, carrie... sweet congrats as always!..:) huggs
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Date: 8/29/2013 5:15:00 PM
You gotta tell me something here Carrie... How in the HECK did you manage a RHYMING reverse poem? It's just not fair...
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Date: 8/29/2013 11:41:00 AM
Wow, Carrie, this is really brilliant! Read either way, it flows so well, with the images staying with you-- I could be in that train myself and feel that emptiness... I find it soo cool how you did this one, & the end/start lines being similar yet worded so beautiful for each. Everything ties together so smoothly-- again you take me there. The melancholy, everything. No wonder this won, & deservingly so! Awesome win for you & I'm so relieved to know you are ok despite the fire, xoxo take care!
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Date: 8/29/2013 10:50:00 AM
Congrats on your great win..Sara
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Date: 8/28/2013 9:05:00 AM
Raindrops mimic my own heart... love the line... Congratulations... xox..Linda
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Date: 8/27/2013 9:44:00 PM
wow! Great week for you..you never disappoint. congrats. BG
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Date: 8/27/2013 6:19:00 PM
awesome poem...well done, congrats on your win :)
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Date: 8/27/2013 6:11:00 PM
Congrats to you on your win. Morgan
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Date: 8/27/2013 4:34:00 PM
Congrats on your first place win!!! I must agree that this is beautifully written. :)
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Date: 8/27/2013 4:08:00 PM
great write and win...congrats
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Date: 8/27/2013 4:02:00 PM
Congratulations Carrie...well deserved....
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Date: 8/27/2013 2:32:00 PM
So glad to see you take the top spot! This was a difficult task for me and it seems so easy for you that's how you can tell it's perfection!! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 8/24/2013 6:11:00 PM
Beyond excellent a truly fine write, I can feel the lump in my own throat! Light & Love
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Date: 8/16/2013 6:45:00 AM
Carrie, you made this look so easy with this beauty. enjoyed reading it this afternoon. Sure hope to see it on the winner's list :) tc Wilma
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Date: 8/13/2013 11:54:00 PM
Hi dear Carrie..this form wasn't an easy task and you outdid it with flying colours..So very.profound..It describes so vividly the sadness of loss..of someone who was there and now is not..That other sunny sky is hopeful though.Memories can indeed make us sad for what we lost or happy for what we had.An excellent poem sweet lady.
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Date: 8/13/2013 9:34:00 PM
Carrie its not only a fabulous poem but a story and reverse!....wow..
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Date: 8/13/2013 12:23:00 PM
Again, you stun me with such fantastic imagery & tone within your lines. Color me impressed!
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