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so i just wrote a rough draft, can i get your honest feedback please. :) The looks on her body were so beautiful and bent as curved as the tips of paint brushes and her eyes brown and mysterious like the bottoms of a desert That every time we hugged and her arms wrapped my body I was caught in a sandstorm and when it finished and I looked into her eyes, I felt lost because looking into her eyes were like looking into a vast of nothingness Like lost chapters in a book untold She was those hidden pages which were about to unfold Not knowing how much of a big impact it will leave on my life But like lost chapters that needed to be forgotten She needed to be lost in my sands of time Because she was like my nasty habit because I'd crave her all day She was so hot that she made the desert seem like it was the tropics she'd have more curves than sand dunes in the sahara She was my specially customized tumble weed And I was that dirty drug addict that would walk to the ends of the deserts just so I can have a dose of her every single time I treated her like my last sip of water because she was my queen of this desert But no matter what deserts I had to cross The self sacrifices I had to make And the time that I could never get back She would still call me friend Nothing more and nothing less What she thought me being friendly was actually me hoping to be more than friends giving it my best Or maybe I was the stupid gullible one that swallowed every sugar coated white lie she said Hypnotizing me in the placebo effect Yes it's stupid to hold onto something that keeps hurting you,but it's also stupid to let go of something that you've ever wanted The pain of her blindness felt like someone throwing a sandball to your eyes for the first time It stings but knowing that rubbing it will just make it worse
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