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Sleep's Shifting Gaze - Hiku 37 -


Written: August 15, 2025, for Brian Strand Contest

             ****************

         y     e
      e            s      t
      g              n
           l     i                     t                 h                
                                         h           g           
                                             r     u
                                                o              still    h~a~z~e~




    M
        e
             m                                     e
                   o                             r
                        r                    a
                            i             l
                               e      f
                                   s             h_a_l_f         r      e
                                                                     c      a
                                                                      l      l
                                                                      e     d
     * * *                          * * *
         t                               s                       
              r                      e                 
                 u              d
                     t       i
                         h                 in    s~l~e~e~p       f     o
                                                                          l     d
                                                                             s





eyes glint through still haze
memories flare half recalled
truth hides in sleep folds

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Date: 8/18/2025 11:04:00 PM
This is a wonderfully crafted, haiku, with lovely images, Sotto! Best wishes for the contest. :)
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Date: 8/15/2025 10:01:00 PM
Very creative poetry, my friend. The Haiku and the amazing shape you created. Good Luck in the contest! Bill
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Date: 8/15/2025 8:38:00 PM
This is such a great haiku. Everything is in a haze between sleep and half wakefulness . I love the last line. Your graphic representation looks like the gradual unfolding of a dream. All the Best
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Date: 8/15/2025 4:57:00 PM
I especially liked the 2d line, Sotto. Your ability to construct these types of poems amazes me. Have a splendid weekend, Sara
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Date: 8/15/2025 2:58:00 PM
I can see myself in this. It's sometime hard to press out of the "sleep folds" :)
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Date: 8/15/2025 11:26:00 AM
What a creative/fun write. Few words with much said. Have a fun day/weekend writing away..........
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Date: 8/15/2025 8:43:00 AM
- Well-formed ... love the last line :) - Glad you posted them in straight lines ... you know my IQ :))) - Best wishes in the contest :) - Have a lovely weekend, Las :) - hugs
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Date: 8/15/2025 6:17:00 AM
Very nice! Enjoyed this one and its dreamlike imagery! Hugs ~ Kim
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