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Jack's Knife House

He whittled away
A very large branch
That in 6,000 days
Was part of his ranch

Yet not just the branch
Or a tree or two
He whittled a forest
Full, through and through

For this man and knife
Both aptly named, Jack
Had spent half their life
Constructing a shack

Jack’s knife was quite big
With hammer and shovel
To both cut and dig
A primitive hovel

After trees dropped
With Jack’s knife axe
The bark was lopped
To fill in the cracks

He whittled five oaks
And one hundred pines
Yet the pines, no joke
Took half the time

He sliced up the frame
Most days and nights
But could not hue stain
Nor pare out the lights

He whittled a door
Out of an ash tree
And also the floors
Of all rooms, just three

The man ate plenty
With no need to shop
Whittling fish hooks
And felling peach crops

Then finally old Jack
On a day with gloom
Completed the shack
That lacked head room

The rooms were too small
For all the hassle
Yet, Jack stood tall
Beside his castle

His wife took a tour
But quickly fumed
Since there was no sign
Of a bathroom

But Jack was prepared
For his fair spouse
Pointing out back to
A rough sawn outhouse

Still, floors were creaky
From lacking nails
And ceilings were leaky
Details, details

So Jack told his wife
That his next mission
He’ll devote his life
On an addition

And when they had kids
Of at least three
They learned to whittle
Their own family tree

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024




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Date: 2/3/2024 8:02:00 PM
Very cute and I love the ending. I guess hobbies can be addictive, too.
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David Fisher
Date: 2/5/2024 4:02:00 PM
Thank you, and yes addictive but hopefully productive; at least a little.
Date: 2/3/2024 7:30:00 PM
ha, ha, ha, ha, ha. Quite the clever ending there, David.
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David Fisher
Date: 2/5/2024 4:00:00 PM
Thanks Gershon! A wood chip off the old stump, as they say.
Date: 2/3/2024 2:40:00 PM
Your ending stanza was brilliant and brought a perfect ending to well-told story.
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David Fisher
Date: 2/5/2024 3:58:00 PM
Thanks for that Jerry. Once in a while the lines fall into place just right.
Date: 2/3/2024 9:04:00 AM
David, this has a lot to fathom. The effect on the forest, the lack of perfection and size, pride of finishing, living off the land (as some indeed do), the opinions of loved ones, and the ongoing generations. Quite a story and I'm wondering what your inspiration was. We have people like this in our family. My brother-in-law who very recently passed away was in heaven when hunting and skinning a dear or building a garage to house a vintage car.
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David Fisher
Date: 2/5/2024 3:57:00 PM
Thanks Duke for your thoughts and comments. I just write away and in this case, who knows what Jack and a jack knife are capable of; sky's the limit, I guess
Date: 2/2/2024 9:39:00 PM
Fine story telling in this fine rhyme poem, David. A FAV for my list! Your poem really flowed well and was a family tale to tell. Thanks for sharing, Bill
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David Fisher
Date: 2/5/2024 3:54:00 PM
Thanks Bill for your kind words. I enjoy writing these type of tales once the premise appears in my brain.

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