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    A frozen chunk..
          his numb heart thumping against
        the malady of raging menace
            ears pressed on a twisted loop
         his wailing scars defy imprudence.

     Gasping as his skin festers
          with decaying yellow leaves
            awaiting his impending doom
               on snow covered in blood red weapons
                  his drooping eyes imagine his existence
                    bidding farewell to the soldier
                      echoing memories of his beloved
                        rustling leaves wipe in Autumn's whirlwind
                           smiling faces beginning to dissolve...

           Oh but what about angels?
               Wouldn't they caress his last wishes..
            How he listens to wretched silence 
                in desolate sounds of trampled twigs..
            Envisioning fallacies of resurrection
                warm his frozen courage
            he succumbs to an eternal slumber..

                                  ~~~~~

      Swaying in a hammock of ecstasy
                 he wakes up at twilight
      away from the frozen battlefield.
           The sultry aroma of electric waves
       twirling to seduce him in azure blaze,
            his beloved's fingers entwined
              to trace sandcastles on his palms,
          an albatross afar orchestrating
             vibrating shades of dusk in rhythms,
                 dancing flames of haloed stars
                    on a galactic opera in breeze..

    His carousel of Cashmere threads is a dream
      that pulls him away from dark shadows.
        He walks freely on a tranquil plane
          immersed in oceans of his symphony,
            his love gazes in awe of his courage..
              
          Let his soul rest on his soft dreams
              wavering like stars from heavenly willow,
            slipping in pirouettes to streams of oblivion
          he breathes in the silence of his anodyne...

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Date: 9/9/2020 10:32:00 AM
You're such a prolific, brilliant poet, dear friend. I am always astonished and amazed by your words which enchant and touch the soul. You're a blessing to us all. May you continue to write with such expressive and extravagant words. Love and prayers and blessings - Gina
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Date: 9/9/2020 1:03:00 AM
- A wonderful poem, Aditi :) - Congratulations on your top win :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 9/8/2020 8:05:00 PM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this, and for sharing your talent. God bless you.
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Date: 9/8/2020 3:48:00 PM
Coming back around to enjoy another read and offer congratulations for your top win. Well done, my friend ~ John
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Date: 9/8/2020 5:17:00 AM
Congrats Aditi on another superlative write and top win!! amazing talent!!
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Date: 8/5/2020 11:17:00 AM
Congratulations for your excellent top win :)
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Date: 8/5/2020 5:46:00 AM
Another one of your stunning creations, brilliantly written and executed...you always shine my friend. A special creative gift adorns your pen, Aditi. BIG congrats on your win at the TOP of #1.
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Date: 8/5/2020 3:04:00 AM
Wow,aditi mam you always deserve to be on the top of the list glowing:-)This a stunning free verse with striking imageries... Awaiting his impeding doom~painful...lines.. Congratulations on your lovely win:-) Keep inspiring.:-)Take care.Much love :-)
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Date: 8/4/2020 3:30:00 PM
Oh, above the clouds - didn't see you up there at first! (I am only using a phone, so this is kinda true) - Huge Congratulations, Aditi. Your Anodyne poem is graphic tragedy of a high order. The soldier depicted grabs all readers' hearts.
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Date: 8/4/2020 3:16:00 PM
right at the top as I predicted!!! Congrats to you.
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Date: 8/4/2020 12:36:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!!! What A Write. A wonderful story/poem. Enjoy your win and day..............
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Date: 8/4/2020 12:01:00 PM
Heartiest congratulations on winning 1st place in my contest with this outstanding poem, Aditi:-) I was floored by it! Faved.
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Date: 8/4/2020 4:57:00 AM
This is indeed remarkable poetry, Aditi, congratulations on your win:)
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Date: 7/29/2020 10:57:00 PM
Your imagination is quite alive with this one. I wonder if your experience in the Army informed your exceptional depiction of dying on the battlefield. Such wonderful imagery and mystique. The volta at the five tildes is remarkable. Great writing, keep it going! Congratulations, friend ~ John
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Date: 7/28/2020 5:12:00 PM
I was thinking to write on this theme: anodyne (once I found out its meaning) but then ended up doing romance under the moon. I just can't write the way you do in free verse. your style is perfect for the word anodyne!! I am sure this will be a big winner.
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Date: 7/28/2020 11:36:00 AM
Wow Aditit splendid It leaves me or rather i am left thinking the way you craft your works and writting you have or are currently studying English at University higher grade level. Great stuff
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Date: 7/28/2020 5:03:00 AM
" Oh but what about angels? Wouldn't they caress his last wishes.." I would certainly think so just like he did.
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Date: 7/28/2020 2:33:00 AM
Absolutely beautiful. Kind wishes, Kai
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Date: 7/27/2020 7:05:00 AM
This leaves me breathless. What an exceptional piece of writing. This should do very well in the contest. Blessings Rick.
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