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A Long Life Goodnight

My chest holds echoes none can hear, A hush of thoughts that won’t appear. What once was warm, now drifts like mist, A weight unseen, too dense to lift. Each fracture blooms a quieter scar, Where bitter seeds still bloom afar. No shore, no flame, no sense of tide— Just vacant halls I roam inside. By day I wear a borrowed face, By night I vanish into space. Thorns have grown where roses laid, And joy, like wind, has slipped away. I feel the pull to slip below, To whisper what I’ll never show. My voice is dust, it meets no ear— A silent scream no one can hear. You shimmer still within my dusk, A faded gleam in memories’ husk. I dream we speak as once we did— Before the cold began to bid. No bitterness could take your place, You linger deep, a shadow’s grace. But where you stood, now hollow lies— A soul grown thin beneath the skies. One truth remains, untouched by time: A trace of you, forever mine. A tether neither blade nor night Could sever from this ghostly light. Am I undone, or just concealed? A mask of calm, a truth unsealed. Not hate, nor wrath, I seek to wield— Just peace in ground that’s never healed. The tales of joy and sorrow, pain and grace, Are etched within the lines upon the face. The laughter lingering in a quiet space, The love that time can never displace. Now rest descends like stars in velvet skies, A peaceful calm that soothes the weary mind. The soul prepares to lift and softly rise, Leaving the weight of years behind. A long life’s journey finds its final light— A tender, tranquil, everlasting night.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 8/2/2025 5:00:00 PM
FOR ME, THIS CONFIRMS IT: YOU ARE A BORN POET. THIS IS OUTSTANDING, BEAUTIFUL, ENTRANCING AND BRILLIANT. I didn't know CAPS was on 'til I started typing, looks like I'm yelling. Seriously, you gave me what I love: a poetry adrenaline high. I love this so much that I can't help but want one change to make it perfect: each stanza has 4 lines of rhyme or near rhyme except 3rd: 'And joy, like wind, has slipped away.' How about ending w/ the word strayed? Play with it? I'm faving. Hugs, CayCay
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Rowena Velasco
Date: 8/3/2025 12:11:00 AM
Hi CayCay, Your comment absolutely lit up my day—thank you! I laughed at the CAPS confession (no worries—I read it as enthusiasm, not yelling . I’m so glad the poem gave you that poetry adrenaline high—that’s the best compliment I could hope for! And yes, I see exactly what you mean about the third stanza. I’ll definitely play with the rhyme—thank you for that sharp eye and thoughtful suggestion. Big hugs back, and I truly appreciate the fave!

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