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Date: Dec 03, 2023

Contest Name: Pick a Title Volume 40

Contest Sponser: Edward Ibeh

 

 

The Vanity of Pleasure

The Vanity of Pleasure 

Temptation tingles
I was confused by my desire
I believed the sensual was transcendent 
Rising as I did on the waves of want
Seduced by skin
a wanton whisper
A Goddess wrapped in cellophane 

Eyes that made me weak in my knees
Feather soft fingertips 
Sweet supple lips
Screams of delight
Slipping into tunnels tight
A train on a fast track
Her beneath me on her back

She fed my erupting ego
Made me feel like a man
I was less somehow
but more than my awkward self
First time fast
Captivated by her cyclone power

An attraction distraction
One that could never fulfil
Like trying to extract happy from a pill
My vanity insanity 
exercising of my free will
Her name not known
Me just a bit part in her play
The 17 year old kid
That pleasure whisked away.

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Silent One Date: 12/17/2023 3:25:00 AM Congratulations on your placement in the contest.. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/17/2023 5:48:00 AM Thanks.

Christuraj Alex Date: 12/16/2023 7:21:00 PM "waves of want", "A Goddess wrapped in cellophane", "Like trying to extract happy from a pill" - Powerful expressions. Congratulations! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/17/2023 5:48:00 AM Much appreciated.

Sotto Poet Date: 12/16/2023 6:01:00 AM This exemplary probe fully explores the intricacies of the lifestyle, shedding light on our inherent trend to yield to enticement and the results that grow clear during our formative years. Hearty congratulations on your well-deserved win Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/16/2023 6:07:00 AM Thanks my friend.

Edward Ibeh Date: 12/16/2023 4:56:00 AM What a masterfully crafted piece, Richard:-) It's a pleasant surprise to see you here! Congratulations on your win in my contest! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/16/2023 6:08:00 AM Thanks for selecting my poem. I am enjoying the entries to your contest. Blessings Richard.

Sam Kauffman Date: 12/4/2023 11:40:00 AM Another poem that delves into learning experiences from your masterful pen, Richard, playing with the concepts of pleasure and regret so skillfully written with dynamic images and phrasing. I am so glad I found your poem. It is sensual and emotive. Thank you! Blessings! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/5/2023 12:51:00 PM I’m pleased you enjoyed it. Thanks for the visit.

Tom Woody Date: 12/3/2023 10:06:00 AM Vaseline lips? Why not. Teen sex is indeed vanity. Should be outlawed lol. Still, those primal instincts can be hard to keep under control Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/3/2023 11:47:00 AM True, lives can change in a moment. For some the consequences of youthful encounters lasts a lifetime. Thanks for reading and commenting.

Ink Empress Date: 12/3/2023 9:39:00 AM Very creative rhymes and rhythm to your brilliant write: i love the flow of your storytelling and how subtly and poetically you’ve also played with words espoused the happy pill line was clever. Temptations can be distractions and you’ve written so well on this theme. Pleasure reading. BOL for the contest Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/3/2023 11:49:00 AM I’m pleased you enjoyed this poem. Thanks for taking time to read and comment.

Silent One Date: 12/3/2023 7:26:00 AM An excellent take on this theme.. we have a lot of things from the age of 17 that are a result of temptation.. Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 12/16/2023 7:39:00 PM I was 17 w/my 1st son, he's 47 now, mom just left her hospital rm when I did mom's routine of counting, toes, eyes, etc., and I didn't know she was up, she said, "OMG you are so 17--he's yours give it a rest!" (she's 21), "Babe, I was just doin'...oh forget it," That my friends became the normal length of future gabbage written in stoned. Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/3/2023 8:07:00 PM You were smarter than I was. Fortunately she didn’t become pregnant. Silent One Date: 12/3/2023 12:42:00 PM when i was 17 I dated a 28 year old briefly, but I did not let her sleep with me.. was difficult, but i was too afraid she would get pregnant! Tom Woody Date: 12/3/2023 10:07:00 AM Not quite The Graduate but close Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/3/2023 7:28:00 AM Indeed. My temptation was a 23 year old hairdresser.

Paula Goldsmith Date: 12/3/2023 7:24:00 AM I enjoyed your write/story. Good Luck... Have a wonderful day.................. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/3/2023 7:29:00 AM Thanks for reading and commenting.