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Sweet Lover

'Love Story' Poetry Contest. 
Sponsor: Regina Mcintosh
1st Place. 

“I fell in love the way you fall asleep: slowly, and then all at once.” 
                                                         - John Green, "The Fault in our Stars."
"Love is selfless. Love is respect. Love is infatuation. Love is more than all three combined."                                                                    
                                                                                           - the poet

your lashes flutter when you open your eyes
chocolate orbs, blown wide
my favourite flavour

it starts like that

two souls – a little bit broken, a little forlorn
raven locks to hide behind and skin moonlit parchment
I think I must be a little bit gone
lost in nose scrunches and cheeks all bunched up
a healthy blush spread all over and those shy plunges
my poor heart clenches

it’s pouring outside and your clothes are drenched
your body is shivering and your teeth are chattering
yet the umbrella you hold is over my head
eyebrows strewn together, worried I’ll catch a cold
it’s not just the wind ruffling your hair, I think I love your heart

and everything’s pure, this feeling blueberry snow
you love without asking something in return
it’s not just your heart, I think I love your soul
I touch its beauty and I find a lover.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024




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Date: 8/9/2025 1:25:00 PM
So sweet. I love this short romantic poem that captures little things so exuisitevely . Congrats
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Date: 8/9/2025 9:19:00 AM
Dear Hiba, you poignant, poetic pen never fails to stir my heart, soul and imagination. I adore your tender imagery and the falling in phases "I think I must be a little bit gone" and "I think I love your heart" and "it’s not just your heart, I think I love your soul" (love that so much!) and for the grand finale "I touch its beauty and I find a lover." - ah, swoon-worthy for sure. An exquisite love poem. Congratulations for your success in Mark's contest. Warmest wishes, my esteemed poet friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 8/6/2025 3:51:00 PM
Hiba, congratulations on your second-place win on Mile 3 of my 2025 Poetry Marathon Contest. I enjoyed your tenderly romantic poem. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 4 has already started.
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Date: 4/2/2025 11:51:00 AM
I have always been a romantic at heart. Even as a young boy. I would write little poems and slip them unnoticed into the locker of a girl that liked. All these years later still writing poems now for a woman, but still unnoticed, and in spite of, at times, feeling somehow less like a man. Living in a machismo society I'm sure only enforces those unwelcomed feelings. With that said, I can't help but be moved deeply by your expression of loving someone. Thank you...")
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 4/4/2025 8:27:00 AM
Hey David, can I share a secret? This poem is based not on an actual relationship, but my feelings of a pure, first love, and what I believe a healthy relationship would look like. I completely abhor the stereotypes enforced by society; you seem to be a true romantic, and that's beautiful. I hope your love is soon reciprocated equally, and wonderfully as you, I and everyone deserves. Be happy and blessed, always.
Date: 6/27/2024 5:59:00 AM
So sweetly innocent and romantic. Awesome poetry Hiba
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 6/27/2024 8:57:00 AM
Thank you, Woody <3
Date: 6/18/2024 9:06:00 AM
Such profound love described in such depth, Hiba! Loved it!
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 6/18/2024 10:12:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Smita! I treasure you.
Date: 5/10/2024 8:06:00 AM
Hiba, your poem on love delves into the profound aspects of love that transcend mere physicality and material possessions. It focuses on recognizing and cherishing the inner qualities of a person, using vivid descriptions and sensory language to evoke powerful emotions in the reader. Metaphors such as "chocolate orbs," "raven locks," "skin moonlit parchment," and "blueberry snow" enhance the visual and tactile experience, while comparing love to blueberry snow and a lover's soul adds layers of meaning to your work.
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 5/10/2024 8:23:00 AM
I cherish this comment so much <3333 Thank you for recognizing and appreciating the metaphors. I am grateful to every reader. God Bless.
Date: 5/9/2024 11:00:00 PM
Beautiful quotes and profound and very meaningful poem that depicts love and what it means and how an infatuated heart feels, youv captured them all so very well here in such eloquence! I especially love “ your body is shivering and your teeth are chattering yet the umbrella you hold is over my head“ now thats love really! Selfless n unconditional. Pleasure reading this. Congratulations on your win too
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 5/10/2024 12:25:00 AM
Thank you so much!!!! for writing such a sweet (pun intended) comment and for highlighting what you like the most, along with your interpretation of it. Reading this makes me so happy.
Date: 5/5/2024 10:08:00 PM
Wow I love this. Another fave for me tonight!
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 5/6/2024 11:45:00 AM
Thank you, Andrea <33 you made my day.
Date: 5/2/2024 11:53:00 AM
Dear Hiba, I loved the way you intertwine imagery and emotion of falling deeply for someone, cherishing both their outer and inner beauty. Yes, finding that love transcends physical attraction and encompasses selflessness and respect. Very wonderful Poem! - Blessings, Daniel
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 5/3/2024 3:09:00 AM
Thank you so much! This comment warmed my heart <3333
Date: 5/2/2024 9:27:00 AM
Your poem beautifully captures the essence of love and admiration. The imagery of fluttering lashes, chocolate orbs, and the metaphor of "my favourite flavour" sets a tender tone from the very beginning. The juxtaposition of vulnerability and strength in "two souls – a little bit broken, a little forlorn" adds depth to the emotional landscape.
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Hiba Junaid
Date: 5/2/2024 11:37:00 AM
omG thank you so much. comments like these always motivate the artist, no matter what form of art they create. I appreciate you <3

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