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Rhythm of a River

Smooth moves
rivers perform
with intuitive flow.
Even when storms cause them to churn,
their God bequeathed responses are right on.
Not so, emotions in my heart,
besieging my faith's hold.
My needs pursue
smooth flows.

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Paige Hind

Date: 8/7/2025 9:49:00 PM

"Deep", truly! :)

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 8/6/2025 11:06:00 AM

How serene it is to see and hear a river flowing softly by, whilst we might be ready to explode on the inside and how well you contrast and create this poem. KUDOS my friend. Jennifer.

CayCay Jennings
Date: 8/6/2025 2:51:00 PM

Your lack of ego issues is showing and it is absolutely beautiful. You are a unique blessing in this world, Jennifer, truly a humble giver. Thank you for such uplifting comments. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Rowena Velasco

Date: 8/5/2025 11:42:00 PM

This is so beautifully felt, CayCay. I love how you contrasted the river’s steady rhythm with the unpredictable churn of emotion — such a powerful image. That longing for “cued / smooth flows” is so relatable. Poised and poignant, just like your pen always is.

CayCay Jennings
Date: 8/6/2025 2:52:00 PM

Thank you for your uplifting comments, I appreciate your words very much. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/5/2025 11:17:00 PM

This one is superb. Did you say you you didn't get it submitted in time. How tragic if that's true. For me it's too notch.

CayCay Jennings
Date: 8/6/2025 2:55:00 PM

Nope, not submitted, no Rictameter toe crossed over the submit line. Acceptance issue and in the scheme of all things life, an easy one! Love, CayCay

Anne Winter

Date: 8/5/2025 10:22:00 PM

Dear CayCay, your poem is a beautiful reflection on the contrast between the natural world and our inner turmoil. The image of the river flowing smoothly, even in the midst of storms, is a powerful metaphor for the calm and resilience we often strive for. Your words capture the longing for emotional balance and peace, and the phrase 'cued smooth flows' is especially poignant. Thank you for sharing this heartfelt and relatable poem. Beautiful just beautiful wow Love, Anne

CayCay Jennings
Date: 8/6/2025 3:01:00 PM

You put so much thought into your comments, I appreciate how you dive in and find/describe a poem's everything elements. Your comments help me see if I'm delivering as intended which is valuable knowledge to any writer. Love your light on Soup. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 8/5/2025 4:23:00 PM

I appreciate how you infused God into your poem. Nicely done! Best wishes with the contest, hugs, Sara

CayCay Jennings
Date: 8/5/2025 4:34:00 PM

I thank you, I do and believe me I try to infuse God into every second of my life. I did not make it into the contest, it closed on me, but I birthed a Rictameter and I can't say that every day! Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Bill Baker

Date: 8/5/2025 3:53:00 PM

I bet this one is for a contest. Good luck! my friend. Well-written poem, CayCay. A poet friend in Texas, Bill

CayCay Jennings
Date: 8/5/2025 4:36:00 PM

Thank you, Bill. There were 34 in the contest when I became inspired, but I didn't scribble fast enough to make it into the mix. That's okay, that's alright, I took a chance ... CayCay