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[A Collective Nouns Poetry Contest hosted by Suzette Richards] Placed 2nd

redlight district

redlight district
an ambush of tigers
at every corner

word playsenryu

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Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 9/29/2024 4:54:00 AM

How creative and true about these butterflies of the night - an ambush of tigers, is such an apt description, maybe even more dangerous than a tiger. Congratulations on your win my dear friend Paul, hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/29/2024 2:44:00 PM

Thank you for the feedback and congrats, dear Jenny. Always a pleasure to have you visiting. ~ Warm regards and hugs, my friend. // paul

Nancy Kaufman

Date: 8/24/2024 6:16:00 AM

Hi Paul, A belated congratulations on this well crafted senryu. I visited one in Amsterdam in 2004 with a friend. As sad it was to see those lovely young women in their display cages at least the Dutch keep it clean.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/29/2024 12:10:00 AM

I too stumbled on the area, Nancy, but if it wasn't for my granddaughter I'd not have even realized :) Thank you for stopping by with comments and congrats. ~ Regards // paul

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 8/20/2024 3:08:00 AM

Very clever, Paul: In some cases cougars act the same LOLCongratulations on your placement. SuZ

Paul Callus
Date: 8/21/2024 1:14:00 AM

Thank you, Suz. It's lovely having you drop by today :) Best regards, my friend // paul

Terry Miller

Date: 8/16/2024 1:00:00 AM

Excellent!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/16/2024 10:58:00 AM

Glad you liked, Terry; thank you // paul

Suzette Richards

Date: 8/15/2024 11:04:00 PM

Congratulations on your 2nd place win with this very delightful allegory, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/16/2024 11:00:00 AM

Thank you for the encouraging placement, Suzette. This was such a fun contest! Regards // paul

Joe Maverick

Date: 8/13/2024 10:08:00 AM

So not a true delight (in truth its such a sad plight) Captured by circumstance And restrained both by; day and by night.)

Paul Callus
Date: 8/14/2024 12:33:00 PM

Thank you for stopping by and commenting in your own personalized style, Joe. :) Regards // paul

Sam Kauffman

Date: 8/1/2024 10:25:00 AM

Greetings Paul. You have captured the emotional wilderness of the "red light district" and the sense of peril at "every corner." This metaphoric artistry. Thank you for sharing this poem. Blessings to you!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/9/2024 11:19:00 AM

I am glad that you enjoyed the 'metaphoric artistry', Sam. Thank you for the visit and comments. ~ Regards & blessings // paul

Ink Empress

Date: 7/30/2024 7:57:00 AM

Having seen some of those districts in places like Amsterdam and also some places in asia, i felt like you did describe it very well in few syllables, flesh thirsty tigers…do not care for the ones that are helplessly exposed. Zxexactly what iv seen. Sad scene too in some ways, pleasure reading your work, best wishes always

Paul Callus
Date: 8/9/2024 11:09:00 AM

Thank you for the insightful feedback, Empress. I too saw those districts in Amsterdam and my granddaughter warned me keep my distance :) Best regards // paul

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/29/2024 7:36:00 PM

I second Andrea's comment (below). Exactly what I was thinking. Either way, nicely done, Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/1/2024 12:51:00 AM

I willingly accept all comments, Gershon :) Thank you for reading and liking. Best regards // paul

Crystol Woods

Date: 7/29/2024 1:41:00 PM

Hey hey! This is great! Less is more in many cases and you've proved it here! (I wanted to lyk I posted my song "I will wait for you" again and added the audio. In case you'd like to hear the melody...I'm sorry to use your comment area for my own agenda but I'm excited to hear from you about this since your also a song writer!) Xo

Paul Callus
Date: 8/1/2024 12:48:00 AM

Thank you so much, Crystol! I'm on a short break at the moment and have little access to internet, but will make it a point to go reread your updated audio/poem. ~ xox Have an enjoyable day :) // paul

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 7/29/2024 6:58:00 AM

Hello Paul, I love your words and Tiger can fit the bill quite nicely. They are independent, fierce, stealthy, and go after what they want. I enjoyed reading this one! - Blessings, My Friend, Daniel

Paul Callus
Date: 7/29/2024 12:17:00 PM

Thank you for the insightful feedback, Daniel.. Regards & blessings // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/28/2024 10:14:00 PM

Could it also be cougars? Haha. I love the wit here.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/29/2024 1:57:00 AM

I see that visitors to this post seem to prefer cougars lol, but they're ignoring the fact that men of a certain age could be at a disadvantage :) Thank you for the 'like', Andrea. // paul

Brandy Nicole

Date: 7/28/2024 6:32:00 PM

Dear Paul, sometimes less is so much more, and that's certainly the case here. ' At every corner, ' there's ' an ambush of tigers. ' Soooo true. Always stay aware and alert, I find that's the best way to avoid an attack. Your thoughts are deep and powerful. Many wonderful blessings to you, my dear friend. Hugs, Brandy

Paul Callus
Date: 7/29/2024 2:48:00 AM

Thank you, Brandy! You're a wise person and I certainly don't mind heeding your 'advice' :) Sending you warm regards for the week ahead. Hugs // paul

Silent One

Date: 7/28/2024 2:13:00 PM

Very clever... thought provoking also..

Paul Callus
Date: 7/29/2024 2:18:00 AM

Thank you S1. Regards // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 7/28/2024 8:34:00 AM

Hmmmmm...tigers, eh? In the red light district? Cougars more like it. Good luck in the contest.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/28/2024 10:58:00 AM

Cougars is the term for older women who go out with younger men. ;)

Paul Callus
Date: 7/28/2024 10:56:00 AM

Thank you for reading and commenting, Eileen. I just had to use 'tigers'....they're the only ones with stripes! Regards & hugs // paul

Tom Woody

Date: 7/28/2024 6:14:00 AM

Tigers or cougars? Either way best to avoid those corners. Good one Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 7/28/2024 10:53:00 AM

Thank you, Tommy. Tigers or cougars...ah that's the advantage of poetic licence :) // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/28/2024 4:58:00 AM

now this knocks me off me socks, paul...visually engaging and uniquely defined : you gave a different take on the tigers! huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 7/28/2024 10:11:00 AM

Thank you, Nette!! It's not often that I knock a woman off her socks!! :) Glad you enjoyed. Regards & Hugs // paul

Gary Radice

Date: 7/28/2024 4:00:00 AM

Nice one Paul. I never knew that was the collective noun for tigers. :) .. I’m thinking a litter of cougars too :). Cheers - Gary

Paul Callus
Date: 7/28/2024 10:01:00 AM

Yes, Gary, cougars would have been equally effective, after all both are in the Panthera genus; it was the word "ambush" which tipped the scales :) Thank you for stopping by. Regards // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/28/2024 3:22:00 AM

Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. A good name for family of tigers. I wonder who named them that. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Sara K

Paul Callus
Date: 7/28/2024 9:55:00 AM

Thank you, Sara. I too wonder where "an ambush of tigers" originated from, but most collective nouns get me stumped that way! Regards // paul

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