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Phone Call To Gwammy Bout the Wain

Ello, Gwammy,
Yea, saw the wain, Gwammy,
Big dwops fallin’ on the soil.
Dwopped fwom clouds.

Aunt Jan was angwy.
Said I get wet.
But I took her bwolly,
The one with the paint on it.
Big bwolly so I no get wet.
Went on the bench to see better.
The soil got wet.

Aunt Jan called me,
But I want to see the gwass gwo.
The wain will make the gwass gwo
And I can play there.
But it gwo a lot, only
Can’t play in gwass.  Much wain.

From the bench I saw lovely colows.
Aunt Jan said it’s a wainbow.
Don’t know.  But you know, Gwammy,
I saw mamma on the wainbow.
She smiled and sent me a kiss.
I want to see the wainbow again.
But no wain now.
When you come
Bwing me cake with a hole.
I lowe it.  I lowe you too, gwammy.
Must go.
Bye, Gwammy.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024


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Date: 9/11/2025 8:41:00 AM
The picture is ideal for this poem. You expertly imitated the child's interests, vocabulary and pronunciation. Readers needn't strain to 'feel' the child because your pen transformed in to one. Seeing his mom in the rainbow is so sincerely and as a matter of fact stated by the boy that it's obvious to readers he believes everybody knows that can and does happen. I am blessed that you led me to this. Time w/ innocence via your poem is a lot like spending time w/ God. LOVE CayCay
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Date: 12/30/2024 10:22:00 PM
This is so precious Victor, and I love the photograph you shared with it. I absolutely love this, it is a fave for me.
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Date: 12/18/2024 4:26:00 AM
Oh! This is so sweet, Victor:)
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Date: 12/17/2024 8:06:00 PM
I use to talk to my grandma a lot and spent a lot of time with her. She use to spoil me so much. I miss her. Love your cute poem, my friend.
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Date: 12/17/2024 5:03:00 AM
Oh My Dear Victor, So heart felt and brought a tear to my eye. Just seeing the child's innocent and joyful recounting of a rainy day experience to their grandmother. And that tearful moment of imagining seeing their deceased mother in a rainbow. I loved every word that you wrote, and having three granddaughters, I can relate. Merry Christmas, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 12/16/2024 4:04:00 PM
so lovely and creative, enjoyed a lot, thanks Victor
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Date: 12/16/2024 12:52:00 PM
This is really sweet poem Victor.. it show how talented you are at writing different themes...
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Date: 12/16/2024 5:19:00 AM
Sweet and endearing Victor, a lovely exchange between a boy and his Granny… Beryl
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Date: 12/16/2024 2:26:00 AM
This is such a sweet and charming poem, straight from the heart of a child, and amusing too - I wead it and was twanspoeted into the child's world. Surely this can't be fiction. I loved it Dear Victor. Hugs Maria
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Date: 12/16/2024 12:52:00 AM
Tollrific my fenned. Love your childish words in this one Victor. From a childs world that is very creative of you to mimic a child.
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Date: 12/15/2024 9:19:00 PM
Awwn this poem made my heart so full! Such cuteness and innocence in every line, of the times when we can't even utter alphabets and sounds properly ~ my mum tells me that I too couldn't say r and instead it was w always haha! Loved reading this, beyond adorable and that ending is really heartfelt... Pleasure reading this! Sending best wishes and light to you always..
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Date: 12/15/2024 8:05:00 PM
This is a sweet, charming poem, and the picture is adorable, too. Nice work, Victor. :)
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Date: 12/15/2024 5:00:00 PM
So beautiful and touching on many levels. Very sensitive and heartfelt read. As for the language, one of my favorite poets of old is James Whitcomb Riley, who often recolored language and words in a similar, delightful manner. Wonderful read. I'll never forget His, "The Raggedy Man. Thank you for sharing.
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Date: 12/15/2024 12:53:00 PM
Victor, your writing is astoundingly artistic and entertaining. Wishing you a wonderful weekend.
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Date: 12/15/2024 12:24:00 PM
Ah, cute! Are they part of your memories? A pleasure to read -
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Date: 12/15/2024 10:15:00 AM
Awwn this is so cute, reminds me of my son, when he was little he couldn say r too he said used w. It was so cute! And this is so adorable and its a pleasure reading this fun and lovely poem! Made me smile. Sending you light today and always
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Date: 12/15/2024 9:50:00 AM
Okay, just read the title and am giggling! Now I read on…this poem is darling! Surprised and delighted by the subject matter! Hugs-a-Merry-Chwistmas ~ Kim (Christmas in keeping with the heart of the poem)
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Date: 12/15/2024 8:32:00 AM
So sweety and using w sound. My daughter had speech impediments for such a long time. We never knew why.
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Date: 12/15/2024 6:54:00 AM
- An amusing and cute poem, Victor :) - hugs
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Date: 12/15/2024 6:27:00 AM
Love the humour Victor, very creative write. Hope you're having a lovely weekend. Tom
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