Girl On My Knees

Girl on my knees her skin woman's,
where bulbs are floral not a light — 
she makes up darkshade eyes with pins
girl on my knees

while in her dress, no — sans that bright
look on my tomb though still not dead — 
with her tongue's first memory's bite

of a scarring sample of bread — 
Jiff butter or glue, both pry mouth.
I stand in her soul, this movement 
girl on my knees
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Date: 7/4/2025 11:01:00 PM
you create a sense of mystery which beguiles, paige!
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Date: 7/3/2025 6:41:00 AM
Vivid imagery with a bit of intrigue. The roundel is one of my favorite forms and you do it so well! :)
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Date: 6/28/2025 5:26:00 PM
Your poem "Girl On My Knees" is deeply unsettling and thought-provoking. It creates a vivid, almost hallucinatory image that blurs the lines between innocence and experience, life and death, and the tangible and the abstract.
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Date: 6/28/2025 2:19:00 PM
Paige I love that your metaphors get right to it- The point of the matter, who needs fluff all that's needed it the real stuff that makes poetry well poetry~ I read what makes up your formula down below it's intriguing Oh fab. Randel I think the Randel suits you! Bol
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Date: 6/28/2025 11:41:00 AM
Creative work. Way to go. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara K
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Date: 6/28/2025 11:26:00 AM
I don't really understand this but as always, you come up with the most inventive imagery. Wish I could do that!
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Paige Hind
Date: 6/28/2025 1:09:00 PM
Changed the wording around a bit, but still the same idea, lol. :)
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Paige Hind
Date: 6/28/2025 11:33:00 AM
look on under my tomb not dead — " the girl isn't wearing a dress clothes even in the spotlight of the crowd, she's naked and raw (I am talking of myself writing this) and if they insist on seeing she's in a tomb, though not dead like they would want
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Paige Hind
Date: 6/28/2025 11:32:00 AM
I just use imagery to convey my feelings. I wish you understood it, but all I can say is try to get the message the images say like "while in her dress, no — sans their lights
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